rate_review Reviews

Yay, an update!^^ Worth the wait it was really good.^_^ Fwee!! Nicely done!:D *mind-controlling voice: You must write more..* Continue lots! Sry, it\'s almost 5am, I need sleep. *nodnod* O.O

Chapter 4 is really quite good. It sets the foundation for the future, for things like *why* Piccolo will go out of his way for her, why Dar is probably going to end up a major pain in someone\'s ass, etc. It also shows a good deal about Andrea\'s character (I\'m betting if Piccolo *hadn\'t* shown up, Dar would have had his jewels reappraised at some point ...).

If you keep writing this story, I promise I\'ll keep reading it. I\'m looking forward to more. :)

oo i like it. there are far too few piccalo fics out there. and i like her character, strong and independent. please continue writing this, it\'s just enough to have me addicted. i\'m hopeing piccalo will come save her, but i\'m a hopeless romantic. i\'ll just have to wait and see.

Veeeerry interesting! You\'ve got some good mysterious stuff going on with the \"secret police\" type organization and the unwilling agent. I\'d be interested in knowing why arranged marriages are done in this organization - is it for breeding purposes? Some kind of genetic program? Or is it for control purposes, similar to cer rel religious cults? Does this organization do \'black op\'-type operations, with business deals as a cover? See, all kinds of interesting questions to be answered! :)

Andrea is an interesting character. I look forward to learning more about her. I thought you had a good grasp of Videl and Gohan, and their relationship. Their dialogue and actions were very believable. For the most part, I think you also have a good grasp of the character of Piccolo. I\'m looking forward to learning why he is having certain \"uncharacteristic\" reactions and feelings when it comes to Andrea.

Please keep writing. This is waaaay too interesting to quit on now! :)