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Reviews for Underlying Conspiracy

By : chayron

From Zofo on February 19, 2009
Wow Vegeta's had a lot of threesomes, at least in his dreams, no wonder Goku 1 panicked and ran :)

Loved the whole Authors thing, very funny, and true. But I think Vegeta's on to you now :)
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From Tru6768 on February 16, 2009
Ok, I *love* this chapter. I know I already told you all of this, but I think it bears repeating. I laughed and laughed while reading it. First of all, Goku No. 2...he is such a character. The Goku of Vegeta's dreams, who lives only to please him, haha. I enjoy when he comes around. He's so damned naughty ;-)

Also, Vegeta and the threesomes...that was hilarious. He has quite the imagination.... Or *THEY* do.... :)

Too many funny lines in here for me to copy/paste them all, but here were some of my favorites:

�Well, having your planet blown up, then having a difficult childhood with Frieza constantly raping you can do that to a person,� Vegeta agreed.
Goku�s brows crossed. �What are you talking about?"
�I�m not sure. But this is what�� Vegeta looked around carefully, ��what THEY say,� he leaned to whisper into Goku�s ear.
�They?�
�No. THEY.�
�Oh, THEY!� he muttered after a minute. He wondered if he was thinking about the right THEM. �Well that must be very hard on you. But how the hell did they arrive at this conclusion?�
Vegeta shrugged. �It�s all about drama. And sex,� he added. �Especially sex.�

xxx

Vegeta knows us so well!

xxx

"Vegeta, with the same blood-chilling facial expression, smiled wider. �Goddamit, Kakarott!� he burst out suddenly. �Do you really think that I�m some weepy emo?!�
�What�s an �emo�?"
�Doesn�t matter! What matters is that I would never do those things if THEY didn�t make me do them!�
��THEY�?� Goku repeated, his forehead furrowing while trying to make sense of what the prince was saying. �Are we talking about the same �THEY�?�
Vegeta looked around carefully. He leaned in to Goku. �Yes,� he whispered into Goku�s ear, ��THEY�, the authors.�
Goku startled. �Shhhhh!� he hissed. Paling visibly, he looked around with panic stricken eyes. He could still remember the last time he had been turned into a woman with a macho complex. There were also times when he could swear that some of �THEM� were trying to make him look like an absolute idiot.

xxx

I believe I'm often guilty of this myself ;-) Sorry, Goku.... And Vegeta using the word emo...love it :)

Anyway, a great chapter. Keep up the awesome work!
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From Zofo on February 08, 2009
Are the chakras that Goku is trying to master going to be like those in Naruto?

Giggled at Vegeta imagining Goku flying in front of him in a thong. Yummy! But laughed out loud at Vegeta getting the louse and going overboard, plus Goku's reaction :)

Oh poor Goku's got crabs now by mistake (hope that won't stop any future intimacy with Vegeta!). They are both in the wars now but it makes for very humorous reading :)
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From Tru6768 on January 24, 2009
I like this chapter a lot :) For those who have been wanting a lemon, there's some hot, naked, wet Goku action here. And regular Goku as well...hungry and, of course, completely oblivious. Ah well, poor Goku No. 2, having to entertain Vegeta in his dreams every night.

So nice of Yamcha to try to get them together... Even though he's only doing it to get back in Bulma's pants :-P
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From DarkSerapha on January 23, 2009
Oh boy. I loved the bit about classes on Vegeta-sei. *eyes you* You're not by any chance german, are you? Because that joke would have worked even better in german. The german words for tail and cock are identical. Yeah, I'm not a native speaker either, as you might have guessed by now.
As for co-writing - take your time. I'm pretty busy at the moment anyways. But if you ever feel like trying, let me know. It's been a while since I co-wrote a story (and lets not talk about that one, shall we), but I'd be curious to try once more.
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From Zofo on January 22, 2009
Oh I could just see Vegeta doing that to his house to get rid of the cockroaches, and it made it worse that he followed Goku's advice at first, not something he makes a habit of doing so he must have been really kicking himself.

OMG you had me fooled along with Vegeta when Goku was talking about tail lengths, I had to go back and re-read it! Saucy :)

That's just the kind of food related dream I can imagine Goku having, the hamburger didn't stand a chance! Vegeta's was pretty raunchy, shame he didn't catch Goku 1 before they woke up. Oh well, maybe next time :)

Surprised that Yamcha was the one trying to get them together but kinda gagged a bit when Baba came onto him!
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From Tru6768 on January 11, 2009
Chapter 3 has been my absolute favorite so far! So many memorable moments here. First, the massage. Our poor, clueless Goku, innocently enjoying it like that. Doesn't he know he's stuck in an M/M story? A massage is never just a massage...

Also, the mental image of the Ice-jin zapping our heroes with sneezing fits was highly entertaining. I liked how, after all Vegeta has been through in all 9 seasons of DBZ, it's a cold that finally takes him down and makes him want to give up. Men are so useless when sick :-P And Goku did a wonderful job of reminding him of what Summer Kold's family had done to the Saiyans and appealing to Vegeta's pride to motivate him. It was a very Goku moment.

Of course, Vegeta's explanation of how to properly choreograph a fight is right on target and completely hilarious. I read it to my husband and even he was laughing out loud and shaking his head in agreement. You got in a lot of good digs here at all sorts of things: breast implants, long-winded villains, and even capitalistic society. A great chapter from my new favorite Saiyan satirist!
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From 66Hiei08 on January 11, 2009
No problem. I just thought I'd ask. Story is great so far. :o)
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From Zofo on January 10, 2009
I was hoping that massage was going to lead somewhere, think Vegeta was too, typical Goku to ruin the moment with his uncontrollable tail! I also think Vegeta has a pretty good idea why they grew back.

Really loved Summer Kold, great description of her and a funny new character. Shame we have to wait five years for a rematch.

Laughed out loud when Vegeta caught ill, I could just picture him whining like that, and PMSL at Vegeta explaining how to fight properly according to the series, so very true. Loved the bit about removing the gi at the end as well, Vegeta was very keen about that part wasn't he :)
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From DarkSerapha on January 10, 2009
*bursts out laughing* I especially liked the part about the lemon. Though it still saddens me, it also made me smile. If you ever want to co-write a story.. eh. *remembers she still has a humorous story waiting to be betaed* Nevermind.
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From Sigart on January 10, 2009
*snickers8 this chapter made me laugh in so many different places XD awesum.

Also, you forgot that the hero's trusty, but weak, friends had to get beat up first, then the hero shows up at the last moment... or is that another scenario? Oh, right, that's the other scenario. Avenging Hero XD
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From topbear1974 on January 10, 2009
hahahahaha! Vegeta is hilarious when he got cold. Wonder whether summer kold would be dead of galic gloves in five years time.

BTW, I can totally see the chemistry.Why everybody said this style could not tolerate lemon? I can totally see a lemon coming. Or it is just me? *blink, blink*
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From princelouis on January 03, 2009
oh this is funny! i like it! please continue.
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From finale on January 03, 2009
OMG this two saiyans are way toooo cute! I just hope their little adventure will never come to an end XD
Goku's method of pushing Vegeta to SS3 is soooo dangerous but effective, hahahaha~ It's a little sad that
you won't write a sex scene for this one (but you did say that everything could happen later. Wink wink
;D), but please please give us more humerous romantics! Just can't wait to see them develop feelings for
each other! Seems to me Vegeta already has some toward Goku :D
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From ANON - PurinsuArashi on January 03, 2009
Okay! Yeah I completely loved that episode, with the worms and such,
seems to good that Vegeta would be freaked about worms! XD
and always just seems too funny that gokuu would be able to convice Vegeta to do anything!
lol!

No not WAY OOC, I tend to exaggerate! ~Pouts~ I'm good! I swearz!
And I am sorry, I really did mean anything by it!
Besides my brain was lacking oxygen from laughing so hard, and I was covered in water
too as it spewed from my nose! Nothing quite like a nose enema!

Again, completely awesome! Thinking of Gokuu in the Green Party!
HA, thing is I can actually SEE him doing that!

How are you going to pull off the sex part for a comedy?
Seems to me it would be hard to do and keep it a comedy
or have people laughing up their lungs! I know I couldn't pull it off!

Well keep up the great work!

Thanks for to great update!

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