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By : CardDragonBall
  • From on March 09, 2004
    I loved it!!! I really really love lil Vegeta's personality, but then again I like all of the boys personality's. I feel sad for him, he just has to stand around and listen and sulk...awww poor thing. What will happen with Trunks and Goten. *wonders* Will Trunks be in his world all alone if Vegeta and Goten leave? It's so sad to think about.
    This a g a great chap!!!
    ^.*
    -MB-
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  • From ANON - Getarian on March 09, 2004
    I really enjoyed this chapter! I particularly loved Goten's straightforward approach to Trunks. Saw alot of his 'mum' in him in this chapter :-)

    Absolutely cracked up at this:

    "I want to fuck you."

    "“Oh. Please. Stop the romancing,” Trunks sneered." LOL

    Okay, I really loved this:

    "...“Hear what?” Trunks demanded. “I’m not begging you for what you asked me to do. You want it, you damned well ought to be the one begging for it.”"

    All in all, I thoroughly enjoyed Goten's 'mating ritual' with Trunks...the whole thing was a hoot!

    This wasssicssic:

    "The man married to the world’s last living harpy."

    I've read many fics where ChiChi has been described as a y, by, but this is the first time that the mythological creature has been brought to life so beautifully in a single sentence. LOL


    "Vegeta stifled the immediate, 'yeah, and some people need to fu re response, because while his mother would have laughed his ass off at that..."

    *chuckle* Yep! That would definitely amuse the Saiyan Prince :-)

    Vegeta's trip down memory lane over the various antics that he and his twin got up to, was wonderfully written. I could visualise each prank with perfect clarity. So much so, that when I got to the bit about the hair dye, and visualised the 'Prince of all Saiyans' with pink hair, I lost it completely. ROTFLMAO!

    Definitely looking forward to the next chapter :-)


    "Thanks for reading it and reviewing. I wanted to write thery, ry, but I didn’t figure anyone would even look at it. So thank you so much!"

    It was my pleasure :-) Thank-you so much for providing us with such wonderful entertainment!


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  • From ANON - jaygoose on March 09, 2004
    You know what...I don't generally read stuff that has original characters either. But I am the main one with a story called the History of Kalika. An original character. *looks confused* Now how the hell did that happen?

    Anyway, I am glad to see that Goten got the pants off Trunks. And poor Lil'Geta, no nookie for him... That's too bad. *Waits patiently for next part*
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  • From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on March 08, 2004
    WOW!!! *steps bravely intforiforiegn world* I have NEVER and I mean NEVER read a fic with out my precious Ouji in it, but yet I am reading this and I absoluetly LOVED it! I love lil..err...little..uh..junior...I mean...Goten's twin Vegeta..(don't want to upset him)

    “Freiza was not a girl!”
    “Yes she was!” rofl, that was very funny!!!


    Goten figured he was obligated....that line was just great

    Mom was loyal to only those that passed whatever invisible test he judged everyone by. Yup that sounds like Vegeta to me, I like how that was described.

    and lil Vegeta's personality is so great. He acts like he doesn't care and realizes that maybe he does care what happens to Trunks...that is so nice and I love how he feels for his brother, doesn't want anyone to take him away from him. I know how that feels b/c I have a twin brother myself, I feel the same way...

    until he gets on the comp or hogs the Ps2 then I want to destroy him...*smiles*
    I love this story!
    ^.*
    -MB-
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  • From ANON - jaygoose on March 08, 2004
    This just might turn out to be my favorite fic. I love the twins. They rock. I can't wait to see if Goten is gonna get in Trunks's pants. Yaoi is fun for everyone. :)
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  • From ANON - Getarian on March 08, 2004
    Okay, this is a first for me. I have never read a DBZ fic that didn't have DBZ Vegeta in it. But I really loved the twins and I love your work, so I thought...what the hell :-)

    Loving it so far! Goten is a hoot! Vegeta is so like his mother, that I feel like he's still in it...sort of :-)

    Absolutely loved the bantering between the twins. :-)

    Cracked up at:

    "Of course, his high and mighty Vegeta-ness, thought that Goten shouldn’t sleep with Trunks. Which was perfectly fine, because of the long list of things Goten had planned, Sleeping was not one of them." LOL

    Goten sure sounds like his dad when it comes to sex :-) Not sure if I'm going to be able to get into the lemons in this fic, I'm more a follower of Vegeta only, in that area...but that doesn't really matter, I'm sure there are enough Gt/T fans to drool over those scenes...I shall read for the humour, which as usual is plentiful indeed :-)

    Loved Vegeta's thoughts re: his horny little brother, particularly enjoyed:

    "How was he going to go back to his own time and tell his parents that he had to leave his twin behind because the brat was attached at the hip to the twerp?" *Chuckle*

    Looks like Vegeta's going to have trouble when it comes to returning home, Goten already seems like a lost cause to me :-)

    Looking forward to the next chapter.

    Still enjoying the end dialogue :-)

    "Trunks: I am so not having sex with you."
    "Goten: Riiiight" LOL!
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