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Reviews for Never Before

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Ginia on April 24, 2004
First - a non review... Card my sweet have you noticed that on several of your current fics you are chapter number challenged? *snicker* Go check the numbers on your current fics. Now I will read your wonderful chapter!
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From ANON - Elenek on April 24, 2004
I am so happy your computer likes you again. I actually feel really bad. I have been tearing through your fics like a bag of Hershey's miniatures and this is the first time I've reviewed. I get on line and read them daily, faithfully and religiously. Please forgive me for not reviewing sooner. I feel so ashamed. I'm normally not this irresponsible.

I'm not going to be the one to slap youakarakarrot may be clueless but he is still a saiyan. A rather good looking one too. With two rather good looking boys. It would be a shame to take one of them out of the gene pool.......... I'm sorry where was I again?... Oh yes writing a review.

This is a really good fic. I love the way you are writing Vegeta. He is so clear. He almost steps right off the page. (Now if he'd only step off that page and into my shower.)

Thank you for writing and especially updaupdating every day. That is sooooo nice of you. Oh and just in case you've missed it. you are the ONLY writer I've compared to chocolate so far.
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From ANON - Caralin Fury on April 24, 2004
Caralin Fury is a very jealous girl...jealous of this author's wonderful talent in writing lemons (she very much prefers the non/slash lemons and these are very ggod), jealous of what must be a very active sex life (you are writing from experience...I can tell...sigh I've been married for 11 years and have three children...spontaneous sex is a thing of the past) and of an amazing ability to update so frequently (wow...most days I barely have enough energy to climb into bed...or out of bed!)

Great writing...serious talent...even better sense of humor...I love a story with good V/B sex and humor...there is not enough laughter in this world.

Gah! I have to go watch my son's soccer tournament...otherwise Ms. Fury would be attempting to write a new chappie on her own fic. Alas...not until the kids are in bed!
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 23, 2004
That last line with Goku at the end was hilarious. Poor Chi Chi, having all that beautiful Saiyan for a husband and never getting any. I would just die.
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From ANON - Shiro Ryu on April 23, 2004
Wow!
Lemonade anyone?!
Screw lemonade, I am going to go hunt down my husband!!!!!! ^_^
Fantastic work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^_^

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From ANON - Getarian on April 23, 2004
Really loved the opening scene with Bulma and her mother. :-)

Definitely loved the follow up scenes with Bulma and Vegeta. The atmosphere in the room was almost cozy...in a sexually charged kind of way...LOL!

Loved this:
�My parents are home.�
"So? He didn�t particularly care."

LOL! Don't you just love a man who doesn't panic at the sight of the olds. :-D

I think you're probably the first author I've come across who doesn't have Bulma as a lousy cook. It's very refreshing. :-)

"And she sighed at him. �You�re always going to be an ass, aren�t you?�"

LOL! 'Fraid so m'dear. No not really, he getsh beh better later on. But I so love this...it's so very Vegeta at this point. :-D

Totally loved the bit with the shorts and their individual thoughts on each other having worn them. ;-)

Love how Bulma knows exactly how to get the Prince aroused and totally loved his reaction. As always I completely love your lemons, and this was certainly no exception. The chemistry between these two is incredible. :-)

Loved the bit at the end when Bulma's mum came to the door and asked if everything was okay, her long pause after Bulma informed her that Vegeta was with her was hilarious. Could see her mind processing that, and realising that her daughter had snagged the Prince before she could :-D

This was an enjoyable chapter. Love the sense of closeness that seems to be developing between Vegeta and Bulma. :-)

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Hope your computer troubles are not that bad. Damn things can be so expensive to fix sometimes.

Really loved this:

"Gk: See? Chichi does the same thing. Every time she sees me, she gets pissed off!"

"Bulma *mumbling * well maybe if you tied her to the headboard and fucked her unconscious once in a while she wouldn�t be so pissed�"

"Gk: O.O!!!!!! BULMA! I can�t do that! She�s�she�s� MY WIFE!

ROTFL!

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From ANON - Getarian on April 23, 2004
Really loved the way Bulma watched Vegeta sleeping, studying him (probably the only time she could do this, without him demanding to know what she found so fascinating) ;-)

Loved her thoughts. Got a really good mental image of her pulling him along by his good arm and he quietly following along without a peep. Totally love the idea of him allowing her to tuck him in bed. He can be so damn adorable sometimes. :-)

"He wasn�t exactly committed to her in any way. (Other than, she thought with a smirk, he was very fond of her breasts.)"

LOL! Love her smirking thoughts. Go get him Bulma, thrust those breasts :-D

"(Again, she thought of poor Chichi, and wondered why that woman didn�t just move away while her husband was gone..."

ROTFL! Played a little scene out in my head as I read this, ChiChi waving bye-bye to Goku, watching him fly away and then quickly running into her house gathering up her possessions and taking off into parts unknown, chuckling maniacally. Goku returning later, finding different people in his home, grinning at them before sitting down at the table, eating all of their dinner, and then shouting see-ya before taking off to the woods again. :-D

"She couldn�t remember any specific time when Goku had actually be around long enough to be doing�er�Chichi.)"

LOL! I love the way that Bulma gets sort of embarrassed when she thinks about Goku and ChiChi going at it. :-D

"Those thoughts (thankfully) were interrupted when Vegeta�s hand brushed her knee, and she looked at him and found that he was watching her."

Oh, so hot! I love the imagery I got from this. Those dark sultry eyes...Mmmm.

"�And what else should I do?� He said this with a bedroom type of voice (er, duh, they were in the bedroom.)"
LOL!

"Full of sultry promises and rumbling with the last dredges of sleep."

Whoo, you do have a way with words. So sensual.

�Oh, no, buddy. You can shower in my bathroom. I told you last night I was not going to let you out of my sight.�
"So he shrugged. Like he didn�t give a damn, and went into her bathroom."

I truly love the way you have these two interacting with each other. It's so easy to visualise the couple we see on t.v. being like this with each other. :-)

"(Was already nicely n, an, and all his skin was sleep warm as she touched him in passing.)"

Mmmm, nicely naked Vegeta...

"Then, almost without her even realizing it, she watched him as his hand dropped down to his erection (LIKE IT WAS SO NORMAL) and he stood there, in her shower, and stroked himself like she wasn�t standing there watching him."

Holy shit! This scene is so amazingly erotic. You use just the right words, and the imagery is astounding. Love this. :-)

"So she kindly stepped into the shower with him. Saw that he was grinning�bastard�and she put her hand over his."

Oh yeah, he knew exactly what he was doing...sexy little bastard. ;-)

�Now, Vegeta,� she said, �I told you not to use your shoulder for anything strenuous.�

Ah, that was so kind of Bulma to help Vegeta out like that...what a good samaritan. :-D

�Maybe I�d been willing to accept some of your help.�

Ooo, she's definitely got to him. Love how he fought over what he was going to say, so as to not scare her off. I can just see him, mentally throwing away a shit-load of 'Vegeta' remarks and frantically searching for something that will ensure he gets some nookie. :-D

Loved the shower scene. Particularly loved this:
"Then he stopped, tightened his hand over hers and she felt him shiver a little as he came."

Stunning description. I almost feel like a voyeur when I read your lemons, so damn real.

From this:
"�Did you really think that was the whole show?� he asked. Made her shiver."

To this:
�Enjoy the show?�

Was simply amazing, loved it all! You make the best lemonade of all, I drink it all in and always want more, Well done :-)

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Loved the end dialogue :-)

"*Giggling still * I read the addendum review and I was like o.O er? Then I read it again and I started to laugh. Very clever. Very clever indeed."

*Huge grin* Thank-you. Really happy that you enjoyed it. :-)

on�ton�t think I could write that many lemons. (Not straight ones, anyway.)"
LOL!

"*Grabs writing pad and grabs Goku as he IT�s away to find Vegeta. *"

Yeah! Go get him Card...gotta love that IT.)
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From ANON - Ally-Snicker-doodle. on April 22, 2004
I just recently found the all mighty adultfanfic *bows and worships n shit* and I love your story ^___^...I'm a sucky reviewer...la la tacos and beans....AHHHHHH .........random...lovely work doll...simply lovely!!!!! Veggie is so fiiiine *dances about*
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From ANON - Pixelgoddess on April 22, 2004
Keep writing wonderful smut like you do, and you will be forgiven for not having time to review... You write so much I can't keep up with all of your stories to keep reviewing either.
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From ANON - Makota on April 22, 2004
*drools* Whoa, that was hot!!

Jeeze, but you have a sex-driven mind.

I salute you!

So when are they going to bring in the 'toys'? --Not that they need them, but handcuffs are awlays fun--
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 22, 2004
Just when I have escaped you pull me back in. I am a slash fan girl not a hete! *Sigh* But I feel myself being silently converted. Alas, whatever shall I do? I never liked Bulma and Vegeta together, but now it seems so right. I am so confused! I miss Goku, I'm going to read Group Therapy...
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From ANON - stella on April 22, 2004
i love it. can't wait for more. good job btw,good job.
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From Pixelgoddess on April 21, 2004
Very nice how Bulma and Vegeta are both realizing how much power they have over each other.
she was good with the foreplay but he was better with the sex - Ah yes, the Vegeta ego we know and love.

Of course, her parents might be a bit disturbed by this method. But she was sure she would like the results.

I can just see Bulma deliberately moaning his name to get him to do what she wants. And Vegeta smirking because he knows exactly what she's doing.

Oh look - Card reviewed one of my stories! (Food Fetish)
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From ANON - Getaruan on April 21, 2004
My bad...

"...loved Vegeta's thoughts as he slowly moved his hands up Bilma's sides,"

Oh Dammut! I know her name's not Bilma, ut's jist that the 'I' is next to the 'U' on the sully keyboard. :-D
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 21, 2004
Yay! Banging! I know what was I thinking! Yay for Lemon Action! I am really digging Bulma in this fic. Well, I usually always like Bulma. I can see how she and Veggie ended up together. but I do miss Goku just a little, not that I think that he and Geta should get together in this fic. Because this one ofcourse is all about the hete...OMG! I can't believe I just typed that!
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