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By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Getarian on April 21, 2004
Another wonderful chapter. Loved this:

"But this woman—really, would it kill you to call her by her name?—before him, she, at least, he could understand."

Just loved the way he cut in on his own thoughts, to reprimand himself. :-D

"Knew the effect she had on him, and was just enjoying it."

LOL! Indeed. Who wouldn't? :-)

Oh, deeply loved the scene, where Bulma asked: “So you admit there are things I know more about than you.” and then Vegeta gets up, makes his way over to her, presses against her and says: “I said there were some things you did better than me.” This moment played out very well in my head. Could even hear his voice...okay, don't get scared...it was a background thing...I'm not actually hearing voices...oh God, sometimes I think I should just stick to saying. "Good fic, want more!" LOL!

Really enjoyed the way they played with each other, loved Vegeta's thoughts as he slowly moved his hands up Bilma's sides, to move on to her breasts. Really loved this:

"If fighting yielded sex all the time, he would happily supply the topics to fight over."

LOL! See...this is why he was such a seemingly arrogant bastard...really he was a sweetheart, but he just got more sex as a bastard. :-D

"Dropped his head down to her perfect chest and closed his mouth over her nipple, ed oed on her, and felt her hands in his hair."

Oh Gods, you write the best lemons. This was completely amazing, both Vegeta and Bulma's reactions, Bulma's thoughts...Everything was amazing...too much to highlight. But I do feel the need to highlight this, 'cause it was funny...

"Wondered if moaning his name would always work to her advantage. Because if it would make him pliable as putty, she would just start moaning his name every time he started to argue. Bring every argument to a quick end, she was sure. Just tip her head back, thrust her breast in hirectrection and moan out his name in ecstasy."

LOL! So if Vegeta puts his plan into action and Bulmplemplements hers, then they should both be dead before the androids arrive. :-D

"Picked her skirt up and pulled it back on—because the rest of the Z-fighters were known for their great timing."

LOL! So true. Can't afford Goku to be popping up while Bulma's sans shirt. :-D

Totally loved the end 'conversation' between Bulma and Vegeta. Extemely well done. I can easily picture this in their early days. She seems to read him pretty well though...which is just as well, 'cause he's not exactly 'vocal boy' is he? :-D

Really loved this chapter. Looking forward to the next.

Loved the chatty tone in the end dialogue :-)

"*Vegeta hides in all of Card’s other fics resolute to ignore his ‘mate’ or ‘the 3rd class moron’ or the ‘faceless it’ until Getarian’s insane plan is ignored and he does not have to suffer through yea more delicious lemons.* I like that plan. *marches off to implement said plan*"

Noooo! I'm sorry Vegeta, don't hide. Ya know...Goku can sense your ki...and he has...da, da-da, da...Instant Transmission! Go get him Goku!

"That’s right Getarian! You let Goku know which one of you is smarter. Instant Transmission away PUNK! You’re still going first. *Goku looks slightly disturbed, as do onlookers.* Heh? o.O. I’ll go away now…"

ROTFL! You know, I pondered for a long while before deciding to leave that bit on my review, I thought, oh Gods, they're all going to think I'm a nut...then I thought...eh, what the hell. Loved your response. :-D

Well, I'm going to have to leave it here for the moment, as I am well overdue for some sleep. Longing to read your other four, but if I did that, then I wouldn't get any sleepall.all. Will read and review, before your next post though. Lots of reading still, to look forward to. :-)
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From ANON - Getarian on April 21, 2004
Re lov loved Bulma's hurt and anger-filled thoughts about stupid aliens, both the married and the insanely questful variety, (but mainly the insanely questful one) :-D

You keep her beautifully in character, I really could hear and see her saying these things and acting in such a manner. Really loveis pis part at the end of her rant...

"Wondered if the asshole was already back in the GR."
"Probably."
"Not that she cared one damn bit."

LOL! She's so Vegeta, she cares, but damned if she's going to display that fact anytime soon. :-)

Loved Vegeta's thoughts when he noticed that the GR was back on. Love how he gave a mental wince at the 'clear cut message' which was followed by a mental shrug. Signifying that he wasn't going to let 'the woman' or anyone else come between him and his quest for Super Saiyandom.

Definitely somewhat single-minded at this point. Loved this:

"In fact, if not for the fact that the large idiot was intolerably loud and the woman was too he probably would never have noticed he had a son until it had come up to him and asked him to train it."

LOL! Very funny. :-D (I know that you know, that I would defend to the death that Vegeta and Trunks had a wonderful father/son relationship after that first year, and I also know that you think he was a good father too. But yeah, in the initial stages...) That's what makes this so funny, Vegeta to a 'tee' at this point in his life, coupled with Vegeta sarcasm. Quality stuff :-)

Love Vegeta's thoughts on Bulma just before he uses the GR. Totally love the fact that he tries to justify to himself what he said to her, was not what she implied, that he was just using 'proper English' LOL! Typical male, never admit that they fucked up, it's always 'the woman overreacted' :-D

"feltfelt very calm. Reached forward and jabbed his bad shoulder with one finger. Watched him wince, and then raised her eyebrows and said: “I don’t know, Vegeta. I am just a dumb woman after all.”"

LOL! Yeah! Gotta love Bulma. This is why they are so good together. Brave, she doesn't take any of his shit, and she's very loyal and caring...and I'm getting all mushy now, so I'll quit while I'm ahead. :-)

Love the 'frozen peas' scene, so normal, so everydayish, that it adds to the reality of this story. :-)

Oh, I totally loved Bulma's thoughts as she tended to Vegeta, the way she sympathized with him, and I loved the way he kept looking at her, as if he was seeing her for the first time. Totally loved the way they slowly shifted from almost friendly little jabs at each other into Bulma shifting into flirst mode, and Vegeta ultimately responding to it...loved this:

"There was a smirk on his face, a real expression bes tes that stony non-expression, and he said: “Some things.”"

Hate that you ended it there...love that I only have to wait one day. :-)

More! Love this!

Loved the end dialogue :-D

I'm glad that you're enjoying writing this, and it definitely shows...this is wonderful stuff. You know me, I pretty much stopped reading B/V's 'cause they were so boring, predictable or just plain annoying. I now only read a select few. This one, is the best I have ever read when it comes to them getting together, and you have them so wonderfully in character. :-)

Poor Goku, you're just going to have to give him more nookie in one of your other fics. *evil grin* Poor Vegeta is going to be one sore puppy ais ris rate :-D

Glad that it's only tension headaches rather than something else (touchwood) but, tension headaches can be scream-worthy stuff. Totally sympathise...literally :-)

"*In minds eye, sees Getarian shoving Goku in front of the line and taking momentary triumph in delaying her turn.*"

LOL! Yeah, the bastard used instant transmission at one point, but when he vanished, I took a few hasty backward steps and he still ended up in front of me...he was not happy :-D

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 21, 2004
A nice little chappie. Lacking in the bagging department, but nice. Soooo....hmmm....will there be banging in the next chappie?
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From ANON - Makota on April 20, 2004
You update quickly. I like that in authors, especially when the dish out such high quality work. It's been awhile since I've read a good BulmaxVegeta fic where both characters are 'in' character. The way you write Bulma is something I can appreciate; she's a strong woman.
Kudos to you.
And Goku *sigh* He is quite the dummy isn't he? But a lovable one even if he does stares at people's boobs, lol. I wonder if he would do that to men as well? Some fat old bald man. Goku: "Wow you have huge jubblies, can I touch them?...Hey why are you calling the cops?" I know, I'm sad and wrong, but well entertained. Great job!
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From ANON - S Ryu Ryu on April 20, 2004
Great chapter! I am really looking forward to the next chapter!
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From ANON - stella on April 20, 2004
don't leave it there. we want more. i like this story alot, please update soon.
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From ANON - Getarian on April 20, 2004
Loved Bulma's thoughts on, ChiChi's high-strung bitching, Bulma's hope that Goku's return involves a conjugal visit for her friend, Chi Chi's obsession's about education, and the frustrations involved with being married to Goku. You really do portray Bulma, very well :-)

"...(promptly as in he waited for her to fall asleep and then left while she wasn’t looking.)"

LOL! Also love her thoughts about her wayward lover. Can just imagine him lying there willing her to go to sleep, so he can take off into the night. :-D

"She said “Thanks Chichi, I promise I’ll send him straight home after he fixes this bent…thing for me.” She tried to remember what the excuse was why she wanted to see Goku."

ROTFL! Oh Gods, I loved this! If ChiChi was a bit sharper on the update, she'd be having some pretty strong suspicions about these two by now...she'd be wrong, but it still would be a fair enough misconception. :-)

"He looked sheepish (as sheepish as a Saiyan could while their eyes were glued to your breasts)"

ROTFL! Simply loved this! Oh, and btw, I love that that you used the image that I had of him in this, I certainly don't mind at all :-)

Love the way Bulma crosses her arms across her chest, to get Goku to pay more attention to what she is saying...you know, I always thought it was an action she picked up off of Vegeta, but now we know the reason why. ;-)

"...Wasn’t that just PEACHY?! Now she was a single mom living in a post-apocalyptic world. Great!"

Really love her sarcasm, she's such a good match for Vegeta. I totally loved the way Goku responded after she asked him what happens between her and Vegeta...

“Well, didn’t Piccolo already tell you, Bulma? You were there. Vegeta dies in,” he paused here to think for a few seconds, “Two years.”

LOL! Not exactly grief-counsellor material is he? :-D

Loved Bulma's insight into how Vegeta might react to knowing that the mysterious Super Saiyan , is in fact his own half-breed son. Particularly loved her loss of patience with Goku...

"...She was so sure that was going to make him feel tons and bet better. “Oh, go home to Chichi,”"

LOL! Not exactly Goku's fault that she's pregnant, but love the fact that she's experiencing a pre-emptive mood swing anyway :-D

"She couldn’t be someone’s mother. She couldn’t even take care of her shoe collection."

ROTFL! Oh Gods, this chapter is very funny. You do the best Bulma I've ever seen. :-D

Ahh, I totally loved the way Vegeta reacted to the information that he overheard. Your entire description of him and his thoughts were beautifully done, could easily imagine that this is how he actually took the news in the show. Loved this:

"He briefly wondered if it would be okay for him to hyperventilate if nobody was around to see it happen. Because, technically, if no one ever saw it, it didn’t happen."

*chuckles* Vegeta logic! Love it. :-)

Totally cracked up at this:
"Felt the need to have a little talk with his nether parts about how they were not supposed to just randomly assist in producing drendren without his expressed permission."

This nearly brought tears to my eyes, you don't even want to know the mental picture I got from this :-D

"Thought back fondly to his brief intention to hyperventilate. That was a good plan."

LOL! God I love the way you describe Vegeta and his thoughts. :-)

"Would be prepared as soon as he got the woman—should he call her that now that she was carrying his son around?—to fix the damn GR so he could go back to training."

Love the way that he broke into his own 'chest-thumping' thoughts, to wonder if he should still be calling Bulma, 'woman', before continuing on with his inner tirade.

Love Vegeta's thoughts re: mirai Trunks, and his sudden realisation that if his son could go Super Saiyan, then that trait is definitely in him as well. Happy thoughts :-)

Loved end end bit between Bulma and Vegeta, cause yeah, Vegeta definitely strikes me as the jealous sort. Which would make him slightly insecure in the early stages.

This was a very enjoyable chapter. Looking forward to the next. :-)

Loved the end dialogue :-D

"Sheesh, everyone who reads anything of mine should have realized that the chance this would stay just one chapter was slim to non-existent."

LOL! Yeah, I sort of had my hopes...but I didn't want to pressure you, you're writing so many other stories. But yeah, love that you are continuing this :-)

"I get really bad headaches a lot too. (So much that I’m generally more disturbed when I don’t have one.)"

Oh, that's not good. Maybe you should see a doctor? Could be you need reading glasses or something though, with all the writing you do?

"Hope your head feels better."

Thanks. Actually, it's still there. Look at me, offering advice about doctors, but refusing to go myself...I'm a bit like Goku in that sense. Can just see the two of us in line for an injection...pushing everyone else in front of us and then struggling with each other as we become the last two...LOL!

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From ANON - jaygoose on April 19, 2004
(Besides the half-breed, and why hadn’t it occurred to him then that Trunks could have been his child?)- O.O Oh yeah...Now I really feel stupid.
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From ANON - Pixelgoddess on April 19, 2004
I think it is funny how you have Bulma pitying Chichi for being married to Goku. He tends to be way too clueless for words - and their wedding night had to be scary. 'No Goku, you put this in here, good, now quit scratching the back of your head and move damn it!' I've got a love-hate relationship with him, a gro growing regard for Chichi. It has to be tough, after all - and he hasn't even committed his seven year vanishing act yet. Poor Vegeta - he wants to hyperventilate and can't. Yeah, Bulma and Vegeta were the closest to a believable couple in the show.
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From ANON - Ginia on April 19, 2004
Card darling - I'm not making fun of you! Just teasing a bit because I'm jealous. You have such an amazing talent that can turn any one shot idea into a wonderful fic with a detailed and tight plot. And I Gok Goku's 8 ball message holds true. I wrote a Chichi/Goku interlude... and after all this time it still gives me nightmares. I just don't like Chichi in ANY sexual situation - well at least one that dosen't include Pixesgoddess' Rezu.
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From ANON - Makota on April 19, 2004
Excellent fic! I'm a sucker for VegetaxBulma fics, even though I only write yaoi. *sigh*
I like how you've given Bulma a nice set of brass balls, perhaps she can clock Vegeta with them if hees hes her any lip.
You're too damn good, I can't wait for the next chapter.
Bravo!
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From ANON - Caralin Fury on April 19, 2004
More mayhem! Great writing. Great sex. More I beg...more!
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 18, 2004
Ha! I knew you couldn't resist a challenge. Anyway, I find it interesting that you think that Vegeta is a "Breast Boy". Hmm...I always figured him for an "Ass Man" myself. Hmm...interesting. It is good that not every writer has the same theories about every thing. It make fan fic that much more fun to read.
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From ANON - Ginia on April 18, 2004
*snicker* Is your drabble fic going to stay a one shot? I could have sworn you said this one was a one shot... Oh, and for the record you have NO problem exchanging het for yaoi in the quality of your lemons. Nope none at all... Tomorrow is Monday... I wonder if I'll survive the long hours until your update - or IF you will be updating this one tomorrow?
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From ANON - Pixelgoddess on April 18, 2004
Hah - Knew you couldn't resist. Sure, go ahead - turn me into a Vegeta/Bulma believer...I'll let you.
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