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Reviews for Much Like Suffocating

By : CardDragonBall

From jaygoose on May 24, 2004
Dammit I'm gonna have to wait to see what happens. *is sad and pouting* Oh... and poor Gohan. :(

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From ANON - JESS-C-CUPS on May 23, 2004
MY FRIEND NOEL TOLD ME TO READ THIS STORY BECAUSE THERE ARE SOME GREAT INTERNAL STRUGGLES. WHOA BOY WAS SHE RIGHT. I LOVE THIS STORY!! HECK I JUST LOVE INTERNAL STRUGGLES. HEHE SO DEEP SO EMOTIONAL SO TIRING SO REAL SO (OH MAN I RAN OUT OF SO'S) SIGHS I AM NOT REALLY A DBZ FAN BUT I READ BECAUSE NOEL WRITES HERE AND I FIGURED I'D GIVE YINZ A TRY. AND YOU BY FAR ARE ONE OF THE BEST WRITERS EVER (DON'T TELL NOE) HEHE I JUST LOVE THIS STORY IT'S ALL SMUTTY WITH OUT BEING SMUTTY AND DRAMATIC WITH OUT BEING TO DRAMATIC I'M IN AWE. I TOTALLY LOVED GOHAN AND I WAS VERY UPSET THAT HE DIED. (I LIKE BAD GUYS AND HE WAS I FEEL WORST THAN THE OTHERS BECAUSE HE ACTED LIKE HE WAS A FRIEND TO THE OTHERS) AND I NEARLY DIED WHEN BULMA DIED BUT SHE DIDN'T DIE SO I CAME BACK TO LIFE. OH THEN THERE IS OF COURSE THAT FRICKIN JURO PRINCE IMA SMACK HIM. I WONDER IF GOTEN USES HIS MENTAL POWERS TO WATCH GOKU AND VEGETA? I WOULD BUT I LIKE GOTEN JUST NOT KRILLIN. CHICHI IS WICKED AWSOME SHE IS MY HERO. ALL CRYPTIC AND ALL EWWWWW I LIKE THAT ITS COOL. TRUNKS LET ME JUST SAY IF THAT BOY WEREN'T A CARTOON CHARACTER AND REALLY WAS LIKE HALF SPIDER AND HALF SAIYAN LIKE IN THIS STORY HE'S BE ALL MINE. I WOULD HAVE TO KNOCK OFF GOTEN BUT THAT CAN BE ARRANGED. SORRY.

MUCH LOVE

JESS-C-CUPS
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From ANON - macha on May 22, 2004
I am glad that Vegeta got that last bit of vital information before he and this group storm the palace. I think that he needed to know these things. I also am happy that he didn't do much except yell at Goku. It could have gone so much worse.

So they are on the moon now, and one step closer. I hope they feel the adrinline rush, I sure do.
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 22, 2004
*runs around excitedly* This pleases you, no?
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 22, 2004
Because they would seize up his body and break it so badly that not even the power of his would sustain him. --No! That is awful, I don't want that to happen.

�I fail to see how this is the best plan,� Vegeta said dryly, --That's my little tactictian!

How do you expect to concentrate if someone is fighting on top of your head?� Vegeta asked.--*falls out of chair laughing* That sound like a very interesting fight...

She snorted now. �Right. Not everyone is as free from curiosity as you.�--I loved the conversation between Chi and Bulma. And loved that sentence. Shows the total opposite sides from which these two approach a cat and a spider... But as for me I am a very curious person..and often times curiosity will get you in trouble. Which I suppose was ChiChi's point.

More often than you will ever realize, kitten, the knowledge is worse than the ignorance.�--Loved that line and that is so very true. Because you know things that you may not want to and have to live with the thoughts.

Afraid of Bardock even more than she had been afraid of Freiza, and more devastatingly, she was almost certain that Bardock already knew that.--Bardock is very good at making ppl feel afraid of him. and damn it that is so sexy...but he is so bad in this fic, I can't love him. I feel badly for Bulma and I hope she does live through this. I love her character and loved that she is going to face her fears, very brave.

(He can laugh until ies�ies� But he�s still going to die.)--*is partly sad* (not really) I just love Bardock (not iis fis fic) so I guess I will be glad when he dies..it's just so hard. I have never encountered a Bardock character quite like yours where he is so cruel he seems almost heartless. But then again I like cruel heartless characters...but not when they hurt Goku or Vegeta so...*shakes fist at Bardock* his death wbe abe a very interesting one to read about.

Vegeta: *one eye brow raised in arrogant amusement * Deal with it. *looks at Aya * Are you sure you�re a man?--LMAO!!!!! I often asked myself the same question...I love Weiss Kreuz

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - jaygoose on May 22, 2004
Whoa...the drama...the tension...the wonderfulness...and some Bulma too. I had wondered where she was. ChiChi is cool. She gets the official stamp.
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From ANON - macha on May 21, 2004
It sounds like an interesting plan. I hope that everything works out the way that it's suppose to. Of course, these things usually don't.

Goten's train of thought gave me a little more insight into Krillin. I guess the little guy does have some guts. Squishy Juro guts, but guts all the same.

It seems as though Bulma may almost be over her fear of fire. I find that interesting also.

I'm crossing my fingers for them.
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From ANON - macha on May 21, 2004
sorry,ell ell a little behind in the reading. I will review anyway.

Hey, there's Krillin. Heso oso obsessed about what he knows is a punishable offense in his Gods' eyes, he may not be seeing what they may find as a sin. i.e. not helping Bulma. Is it a matter of damned if you do, damned if you don't?

now on to the next chapter
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From ANON - angry monkey on May 21, 2004
Squishy, wimpy Juro guts- heheh, i liked that one. Squishy. heheheh. Reminds me of Happy Tree Friends (a violent cartoon, if you haven't seen it,go (unless oyu dislike cartoon violence)) *pictures Krillien being crushed to death in a claw machine, screaming wildly* heheh :) Bulma's in this chappie as well.
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From ANON - EleneK on May 20, 2004
I do not really understand why it is that you listen to my ramblings, especially since my brain does not seem to work the way everybody else�s' does, but thank you for the theology lesson.

This was a really satisfying chapter. Krillin�s motivations got explained and he grew back that nice new spine he lost in the last chapter. (Even though I feel sorry for him now because he has to let Goten get the credit for what little he is able to contribute.) We got an interesting theology lesson. Bulma is getting to be smart. Chi Chi is making beautiful references to blood. What did you say earlier? Something about spiders being lethal but liking long slow deaths. Purrrrrrrrrrr. And Goku is wrong, this story does not need a lot more sex. While lemons are nice and fun diversions to lighten up the dark moods, especially since you are so good at writing them, the story carries its own weight quite nicely. (Although I believe I have told you this once.)

I also learned that you do like your reviewers even when they are being annoying pains in the ass. Something I promise to not be again.

May Midoriirochi-zu (My name for the Saiyan goddess of the moon, Translates from Japanese to English as Green Cheese) continue to look over your fics.

-El-

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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 20, 2004
and if he were deaf or mute he couldn�t hang onto the Gods long enough to get them to free the enslaved onhat hat Bardock kept. --those are some pretty awful consequences.

�When the murdering child it never saw como clo claim its life.� Smirked.--That is the moment I can hardly wait to see, I get excited just thinking about it!

�The Juro pity the victim in every situation. So if your mean old daddy smacks your head when your five, they still think you�re pitiable after you�ve killed enough people to populate a planet. It�s a fucked up system.�--indeed it is, but that isy iny intresting how the Juro view things.

�Yeah,� Goten said with a grin, �They really like Trunks. Think he�s such a poor little boy.�--LMAO!!!

Goten,� Trunks snapped, �If you�re going to say things, say them outloud. Its pretty fucking hard to plan a strategy when half the fucking people are zombified with your voice prattling in their minds!�--rofl! yeah that would be kinda hard to do stuff with someone always talking in yor head, but it just sounds so funny.

Vegeta: No wonder the kid always turns evil.--lmao!!! Never thought of that..but it's true! Gohan needs to get laid!!! poor guy (not really)

Oh loved when Angel said I want you Lindsey..and then he's all I better rephrase that, I was O_O. I would say more too but also don't want to ruin it if some ppl haven't seen the show...*shakes fist at ppl who haven't seen it* Watch it!!!

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - Webtester01 on May 20, 2004
Zombified? LMAO at that word.

Anyway it keeps getting more and more exciting.
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 20, 2004
I guess I can let Krillin off the hook...for now. He's torturing himself pretty good anyway. Oh my gosh, Gohan doesn't ever get any in your fics does him...well you learn something new everyday.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 20, 2004
WOW!!!!
*sobs* I missed so much!!!! I am truly sad...I hate my comp sometimes -_- but I am happy now that I am reading this!!!!
I am loving how Goten can heal minds, and I love the process of it all and how he can possible become possessed. That is scary!
Wow Frieza's death took a long time it was just like really watching DBZ ^_^ hehe...
But so excellently written and filled with so much turmoil and grand emotion, really had me on the edge of my seat, even though I knew he would die. Frieza said some really nasty stuff and even I wanted to rip off his tail and feed it to him hoping he might choke on it.
And I am so glad Goten healed Goku's mind and glad Goku felt something lifted off of him and felt as though he was feeling freedom for the first time. That was great.
I feel so badly for Vegeta that he feels weak and that he couldn't beat Frieza.
But I totally love that ChiChi brought Frieza's head to him she kind of reminds me of Illryia (from Angel) and *sobs* today was the last episode of Angel!!!!!!!!!!!! *sighs* I miss Spike already...anyway sorry for the lapse in thought.

Oh wow yeah!!! goku got to be on top! That was great!!!! *dies* and there was end notes somewhere where Goku says why is this creepy kid thinking about my sex life..oh that had me rofl!!!!

The visions Bardock had were very disturbing. Especially about Vegeta...I hope that doesn't come true or that would be very bad. And I was so sad when Goten said Bardock really doove ove his son but he hates him enough to kill him with his bare hands...that is so intense. This whole fic is intense and it seems to be getting deeper. But at least we now now exactly why Goku was left with Frieza he was supposed to be killed but wasn't...just, wow you are good!
End notes freaking hilarious!

^.*
-MB-
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From ANON - Webtester01 on May 20, 2004
"We should go back." -- Such a mood killer. LOL

Bardock ans dumb as a sod house. -- LOL
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