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Reviews for Much Like Suffocating

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - Indigo on December 22, 2015
Why are your stories written like a computer is messed up I don't even know we're the story starts
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From ANON - Katie on November 25, 2006
I really don't know where to start in this review - there's just so much in this story that amazed me and entertained me and generally blew me away. The concepts and the ideas behind the characters were compelling. I hope you won't take it the wrong way if I said this could be original fiction. If I'd picked this story up as a piece of original fiction, I think I would have enjoyed it every bit as much as I did when it was fanfic. You seem to have a talent for quickly hinting at things and creating the concept of an entire race within a very short time. I was absolutely fascinated by the way Goten was punished by the Juro gods every time he used his mental abilities. And the spider people... And the amazing duplicity of Bardock... I think this is one of those stories that will stay with me for a long time.
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From ANON - Irol on September 11, 2006
wow i just read all 41 chpters today...being sick has some advantages. i loved it, it was like nothing i've ever read before.
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From ANON - jaygoose on June 06, 2004
Whaaa...its over. Ah well. It had to end sometime. I like the unanswered questions though. The best stories are the ones the leave you with something to think about.
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From on June 06, 2004
�Don�t bow to me,� Vegeta said. Stood up. �You don�t ever have to bow to me.� --hehe, that is good and very nice. I'm glad he said that. Seeing as how they have been through all of this together...makes me see he hasn't changed.

Goku is staying here.� A pause. �With me.� There was possessiveness there. Deep possessiveness,--that is almost creepy, but I loved it.

�You have the respect of every one of us. You don�t have to suffer alone.�--that is good to know.
And that lemon was very good...very different and I was a little apprehensive, but it was great. I liked it.

�But now I return to my home, to the Spiders that eat your kind and have long hated the traitor.�--hehe what a nice way to say goodbye...

�You�re an odd bitch, Chi,� Bulma said.--rofl!!! I am glad they can say things like this now. The war is over...they survived it and won.

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ch. 41

Or like Goten and Trunks who spent their free time proving just how powerful they were by fucking each r inr into blackouts. --rofl! and that is a great way to prove yourself...hehe

Trunks didn�t look convinced. But he also didn�t look like he was going to run out and kill Krillin.--LoL

�You are mine. You can fuck whoever you want and you�ll always be mine.� --as strange as that can sound, it is very sweet.

Offered to help him in exchanged for a place to fuck�yes, he really said that�and left it just at that-- O_O! lmao!

�He said you disgusted him. But he died thinking of how proud he was of you.�--:) oh gosh, that makes me so happy.(if it is true, Vegeta did make a valid point) But I believe Goten, because I like it...and I think it makes sense. But as long as Vegeta, Goku and everyone else is happy then it really doesn't matter.

This was such an awesome story, I loved it and am sad it is over...
thank you for such a wonderful fic.

^.*
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From ANON - macha on June 04, 2004
Once again, this was a VERY, VERY good A/U. It isn't often that I see and author put such a good A/U together. A lot of the time is see what I would call an alternate time line rather than a real A/U. (But A/U is what everybody uses for something that isn't cannon.) Wonderfully created and discribed alien types. Along with the personalities you gave them. Each character had their own place.

Great discription with the gore.

Oh, and once they came along, lovely lemons.

Thank you very much.
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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 04, 2004
Excelent conclusion.

I"m glad Goku is finally able to see the sights
on his home planet.
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From ANON - macha on June 03, 2004
"Pssst," looks around warily ahisphispers some more,"the Krillin lemon wasn't that bad."

In a normal tone, "If Goten is taking any more emotionally scared patients, can I sign up?"

Sorry if I pout, but I was kind of hoping for some yuri between Chi Chi and her kitten. That would just be strange, and I guess that I am happy that it didn't happen.
It just seemed for a while that the sotry was headed in that direction. *shrugs*

I am very happy that Vegeta is taking a VERY personal interest in Goku.

So one more chapter huh? Well, you've certainly given us one heck of a good A/U.

*scratches head* I can't remember what I said in my review yesterday to start that, but your responce was sure funny. I guess I have to go and read my own review now to find out.

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From ANON - Noel on June 03, 2004
Ahhh I've been blinded....My poor Virgin eyes!! Ohhh Card Krillin why why tarnish Goten, why...........J/k (sorta) I haven't reviewed in forever so I though now was as good a time as any....the last couple of chapter were wonderful! they always are with you though. Congrates, you know my brother (Spazzmasta) and I came up with a name for Krillin like when the show first started to air..........heheh "the little midget bastard" its not nice but hes a geek. But i felt sorry for him in this fic which was completely unexpected!

The New King Vegeta is awsome!! but wait isn't he suppose to like marry some chick of like royality or some high classed Saiyan chick? how is he going to keep Kaki? *Looks worried with big watery puppy dog eyes* well *sighs* I must be off I promised I'd reread Get Psycho to figure out why Finch like bird names or something. and I have yet to review it beacuse my computer hasn't liked me to do that......your the first one it has let me reveiw! It must like you. *Smiles*

~*Noel*~
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From ANON - EleneK on June 03, 2004
WAAAAAAAAAAA! I like the end of stories. I hate the end of stories. I'll be sorry to see this one end but I guess I'll just have to reread it. over and over and over.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on June 03, 2004
Bleh..my computer is being so stupid and my review got lost somewhere between the review button and that dumb to may connections on line 11...-_-

But what I do want to say is that I totally loved everything about that lemon. I loved how Goku was the one being, caressed, loved, showered the affection just plain worshipped. I find that very rare in many fics and I really like it. He deserves it any way. Then it just kind of turned into them worshipping each other.

And they were being so sweet to each other saying please and thank you...
loved it

I was glad when Vegeta kept telling Goku he was nothing like Bardock. I think he needed to hear that...feel that someone didn't think he was anything like his father.

I don't think anyone could be that cruel.
Especially Goku at least I hope not.

I just about died when Vegeta put his hand over Goku's chest and said feel that...thought that was utterly sweet and caring...romantic even

And loved how this chap ended with Vegeta saying nothing like him...I do hope Goku takes that to heart.

Excellent as usual.

You never know I just might go to a cosplay as ChiChi and pass along your fics and then *gasp* you might rule the world...but if that day ever comes you have got to make a DBZ Yaoi anime...

^.*
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From ANON - macha on June 02, 2004
Oh, this was soooooo good. It was kind of angsty, but both men had questions and emotions that had to be answered. And answer some of them they did!
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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 02, 2004
Excellent.

The traitor got what he deserved.

Goten's scars were healed? I wonder if the saiyan gods healed him and gave him some
of their power. As he becomes stronger, is it possible he could be a challenge to the juro
dieties? And what happened between the the gods? The saiyan ones obviously were not
happy that the juro ones invaded their turf.

Looking forward to more.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on June 02, 2004
And the man that raped the Saiyan world with his perversity.--I loved the openeing paragraph and the sort of short synopsis of just what Bardock had done...the damage he caused. Loved how it was written.

castrated him with a single thrust of his sword, and there was a scream. --O_O, that is cruel, but I honestly believe he deserves that and I was cringing while reading this and I practically cheered when he screamed. I was waiting fort mot moment.

�The heart,� Chichi hissed.
�And the head,� Vegeta added.--these two are not playing around...especially ChiChi she has been talking about having his heart for awhile now.

�Just kill him,� Goku said from behind them, �Now.�-- :( *feels sad for Goku*

Held it in her hand as it throbbed one last time and the brilliant red blood of the traitor dripped off her fingers in long, thick strands.--glad she finally got her prize..

but Vegeta stood as their King, with the crown on his head and the air of the roy aro around him so thick it was nearly tangible. --*cheers* YEAH! I'm so loving that he is goregeous *dies*

BARDOCK IS DEAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YEAH!!!!!! and he died painfully...and in a cruel manner, but so well written it was perfect! YAH!

His mind was nothing but a mind now, no powers, no knowledge.--that has to be hard for him to deal with. this was tery ery thing he had been trying to avoid.

And thought that he should have just helped. Should have said �fuck you� to the Gods and done what he knew was right. --yeah that is what he should of done, because he ended up whre he didnt want to be anyway.

I had my very first dirty thought about Krillin while I was writing this chapter. *shudders again * Just this Krillin though. �is that a bad thing? --lmao! OMG! do did I, I am ashamed of myself. And I even found myself wanting to draw this Krillen..well actually I have been wanting to draw all the characters from this story...and the twins. I have been debating it.

LoL at end notes
and yeah I think you could have done a way better job at writing Angelus.
LoL about Spike and Angel...when the Immortal visited..hehe ^.~

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ch. 38

�The traitors heart pumped its blood into my hand,� she said, �The little fry cried.�--LoL I love how Bulma and her interact...how she always calls her kitten and seems to take care of her.

The King is�will soon be on his throne.� A smirk there, �He is currently on som els else at the moment.�--LMAO!!!

Foolish bastards, Gods are, that take their immortality and mock us with it. --damn it she is cool! I loved that line. if I did cosplay I would make a costume of her and go to a anime convention...then everyone would be like, "who are you supposed to be?"

Awesome lemon!!!!!

Bulma: My head s cas can I have some Tylenol?
Goku: Nope. Doesn�t exist.--LMAO!!!!

^.*
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From ANON - macha on June 01, 2004
Oh my. Those lemons were soooooooo good I can taste them. Oh, wait, that's the Mike's Hard Lemonade I'm drinking. How appropreate! *takes another sip* "mmmmmmmmmmm."

I know that I should have at least ten question about things like the throne and the other characters, but I won't ask them. As a matter of fact, I may just go and reread the chapter!
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