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Reviews for Saiyan Enlightenment

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - macha on May 22, 2004
Case in point for vocational school. I think that Sayian Enlightenment is a VERY necessary course/life study for Goku. Of course one of the majors of this life study happens to be lemons, more specific, sayain lemons. Regular education just doesn't seem to make lemons, of any sort, a priority.

So he was so concerned about doing it in the hallway, but is now walking around in a grassy field in nothing but a sheet. What a paradox. Then of course there is going to be a VERY interesting fight where Goku is most certainly going to lose his sheet. nks nks about Goku without his sheet* Nice image.

I am glad to see that he is determined to make Vegeta forget about Radditz.

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From on May 22, 2004
0_0......................!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! I wanna know, i HAVE to know what happens next. Goku's going to let go, be Saiyan, do what ive been waiting for all this time. And you leave it there?? It trully is a crule and shameless world. ~Shakes her head~ Well brill chap, i felt all of what Goku was feeling, hehe. I wanted him to bring back Raditz and kick his ass again. ^_^ Well can't WAIT till the next chap, Ja ne!
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 22, 2004
This was prabably the best chapter and best cliffy in the story so far. I couldn't stop reading this chapter. Poor Goku I would be so tired if I was him. Fighting both sides so vehemen He He needs a break. Take a break Kakarot. *smiles evilly*

*has flash back of Vegeta's mustach and grimaces and sqivers* Ugh!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 22, 2004
And away the fool went, there came Kakarot, who was a lot fucking smarter than he liked to let on.--I love this. Rather sad but love the whole Kakarott/Goku thing. thought it was so cute when Goku was sitting with his hands on his lap *trying* to be as innocent as apple pie and a simple question could flick the switch to Kakarott...

What he had done to Kakarot, the one person in the whole of the universe that he thought would be safe from that sort of treatment --how emotional, and Vegeta really tried his hardest not to do that to Goku..and he failed...so sad.

People loved to laugh, after all, and there was nothing funnier than Kakarot being smart and Vegeta being emotional.--That is so sad, but it is true...and that is such a upsetting outlook to have. But really it seems that outlook was forced on them.

They were all necessaryfortfortunately, because until he figured out what in the hell Kakarot thought was so wrong about it, he couldn�t figure out how to help him. --He is so smart!

Then came a question that he wasn�t so sure he was going to answer with a great deal of honesty. �Who�d you do that with?�--LoL ...I hope Goku can handle the answer.

I really loved and enjoyed the conversation between Goku and Vegeta, again it was very emotional for me. I find their relationship very intense and real. Loved how Vegeta set Goku up with those questions of do you hate me..etc...thought that was a very good way to try and find out what is really bothering him. I can never tell you how much I enjoy reading this fic but it is A LOT! I think Vegeta is being a very very patient man in this fic not just with Goku but throughout this ordeal. Very impressed.

Maybe he could swap the babies without anyone noticing. (A joke, a Joke! He wasn�t really going to do it.) --LMAO!
baby swapping is no laughing matter!

He grinned. �About a day, actually.�
She shook her head. �I meant since you saw him.�--rofl what a hentai!

Anyway. You can�t review under a different name! That�s chng. ng. *nods affirmatively *--LoL you are correct and I would never do that anyway. ^_^

I loved this chapter...

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - jaygoose on May 21, 2004
Whoa...I might have really messed up the order this time. I loved the little cliffies in this chapter. I might be the only one though. Poor Goku he totally missed his right of passage.

Little Bra must be adorable. But I figured that Pan would be unreasonable. Have you seen her in GT, she's a little bitch. I hate her.
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From ANON - macha on May 21, 2004
Oh no. What a dreaded queston. I am glad that they talked about most of it before it got to that questoion.

Goten is very cute with the baby. I like their understanding, I hope it continues to work so well.

That wasn't very nice of Goten, to go diving onto the bed. *laughs anyway*
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From ANON - macha on May 21, 2004
A whole chapter of nothing but lemon! YEah. *takes pom poms out, and is waving them madly* I waited until the chapter was over though. Goad aad a difficult enough time with the fact that it was in the hallway, I didn't need him to know that someone was watching.

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From ANON - Hecate18 on May 21, 2004
The last chap was� yum, your lemon scenes are so descriptive and emotional which is a very rare trait. ^_^

I was thinking along the same lines as Vegeta, but poor Goku�s so confused, ��I didn�t want to hurt you, Vegeta.�� Its actually really cute. ^-^

And know the Raditz subject has popped up! O_O

Goten is so lucky, �She didn�t cry and he didn�t bitch about her.� � doesn�t everyone wish they had that sort of relationship with babies.

A sandwich is a very serious thing to consider, especially when choosing one to buy� (having a half an hour lunch break just isn�t enough! U_U)

�He grinned. �About a day, actually.�� I liked that, I was thinking the same as Bulma, i t did sound very naughty (has nothing at all to do with my hentai mind ^.~)

Like I said before take your time on beta�ing the chap, I�ve hardly got time to read fics let alone type them *crys*.

*Yawns* I�m off to bed, I have finally finished my work: I looked the deadline in the eye and laughed (while giving in my work of course)� Ok maybe I didn�t laugh I just threw my work at them then dashed home before they could give me more. *laughs manically then falls asleep* X_X

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From on May 21, 2004
Hehe, you tied them up. ^_^ Anyway i'm just dieing about the situation. Will Veggie tell Goku, will Goku understand and whats gonna become of the relationship if it gose badly. This is killing me, i'm so glad it Saturday tomorow so i know you'll be updating. ^_^; Can't wait till the next chap, Ja ne!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 20, 2004
How dare he waste Vegeta�s time. Didn�t he have any fucking clue how important it was to train your natural impulses? --exactly! How dare Goku waste the Ouji's time. but he is afraid of his saiyajin side, heck I'm terrified of his saiyajin side.

Pressed two of his bare fingers against Kakarot�s mouth, felt the lips part and he grinned, felt the mouth close around his fingers and teeth dug into them as Kakarot sucked....--I am not sure if I should be very scared, turned on, or just die...but I can tell you I am feeling all three.

Felt rangrange sense of d�j� vu that almost made him sick and wondered where the tail was, remembered doing this before and there had been a tail wrapped around the prone back, had to blink, forget the past --wow, I wonder why this etingting Vegeta in such a way. I mean I understand why...it's just amazing that it is getting to him. He really does have a heart...awww

Uncurled his hands, and when Goku lifted his head and looked over his shoulder, he found that Vegeta was just looking at his back like he couldn�t figure out who he was. --that makes me sad

Now it was stilled, now Vegeta was thinking and he groaned. Thinking just hurt people. --I love that..shows how complicated everything truly is. This fic makes me truly sad...and to see these two saiyajins both struggling trying to achieve goals..opposite goals. One to make the other more saiayajin, and the other trying to deny reject that side of him.

�Kakarot,� Vegeta said, leaned down, over him, shifted and pressed against his prostate without even meaning to. �Am I hurting you?�-- *wipes tears away* That is really nice of him...and his thoughts really must have got the better of him. And I just loved that...Vegeta asking if he was hurting him that means a lot.

so Vegeta curled his hand tighter around his hip, held him still --that was so sweet

the end notes were so cute!!!!

Yeah I am very worried and curious about what Vegeta is going to say when Goku wakes up.

Also, I have to point out that it�s just a little weird how all of the stories have Macha, Webtester 01 and Mechanical Butterfly reviewing in that order. Weird!~~~~~~~ ;)--lmao that is weird..it's b/c we are one in the same..yes that's it!
*sighs* actually no were not...*shifty eyes* or are we? MWHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!! *runs off to type up a review as Macha*

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - Webtester01 on May 20, 2004
I keep getting that line 11 thing and then "Anon" shows up. ARRG!
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From ANON - Anon on May 20, 2004
Felt a strange sense of d�j� vu that almost made him sick and wondered where the tail was... Hmmm.
Interesting. I wonder if they get their tails back. He must have been thinking of Raditz.

Loved the whole chapter.
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 20, 2004
Oh Yeah. I feel wrong after readihat hat one...like I was right there watching this wonderfulness happen. Good job!
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From ANON - Ginia on May 20, 2004
Oh well. Maybe if I get to the computer earlier next time I'll be able to mess up the 'normal' order of reviews.... at least I tried.
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From ANON - Ginia on May 20, 2004
Just to mess up the 'normal' order of your reviewers... Here I Am!!

Now that Goku has experienced 'the Saiyan approach' - I think he'll be more willing to let his instincts rule and pin Vegeta down and take him without fear for how Vegeta will feel... because he now knows that Vegeta is gonna feel GREAT!

Countdown to last day of school: 5 days

Ginia
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