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Reviews for Saiyan Enlightenment

By : CardDragonBall

From on May 20, 2004
~Pats you on the back~ hehehe. Really nice lemon, i was kinda worrid for a second when Vegeta was thinking about how there was suposta be a tail. o_0; Well can't wait till the next chap, Ja ne!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 20, 2004
These last 2 chaps were so good!
And Piccolo and all the greeness was hilarious.
But I am now worried about Goku, he is doing all this training and if he continues he will never reach his saiyajin goals, although he doesn't want to. Boy when he is determined not to do something he is really determined.
And I think Vegeta has a right to be angry...but I fear what is going to happen in that hallway.
And when Goku thought he should just end the fight by slamming Geta's head into the wall to show whose stronger...hehe I loved that, but he should of done it because now I araidraid!!!!!
I don't want bad stuff to happen. *is worried* I hope Goku can over power him...maybe this will awaken the saiyajin side in goku...or maybe it will awaken something else...I dunno...guess I have to wait and find out.
Anyway I loved it sooooo much, and end notes were great!
^.*
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From ANON - Webtester01 on May 20, 2004
Another great chapter. (Chapter nine.)

The last two phrases were especialy funny. LOL
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From ANON - macha on May 19, 2004
I only have one thing to say.........

..........*smirks*........enough said.
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From on May 19, 2004
~Watches your jittery self~ Don't worry i wont go anywhere.^_^; I just wont have much to say. Anyway, i wonder what got into Vegeta, one minute i thought he was going to have a go at Goku and the next....well you know. ^^' Hmmm i wish they would just come out and say whats on their mind, thats what i'd do. But then again i'm not Saiyan. Well look forward to the next chap, Ja ne!!
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 19, 2004
Oh...the plot thickens! So that's what Goku has been up to. I wonder why it took Princy so long to notice? Anywho, do I see a preditory lemon on the horizon?
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From ANON - macha on May 18, 2004
Interesting, that Goku has something similar to a glass jaw, or Akili's heel. I know that if I were Vegeta, I would be exploiting it. It was awfully nice of Vegeta to let them get a meal first, though.

Happy New Years! Prissy Trunks *snickers* yah, prissy. Still hot though.

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From ANON - Hecate18 on May 18, 2004
*Drum rolls* I back! (plz excuse the very late short review, I'm taking a little break from all my 'hard work')

Bra is finally born *Whoops* Poor Trunks, baby's are very messy.
I certainly hope Vegeta doesn't tell Bra what(who ^_~) he was doing on her birth date.

The lemon with Trunks and Goten was very yummy, '�Is it New Years yet?�' - I loved that! ^_^

Anyways off to bed... I mean work *stares longingly at bed*
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From on May 18, 2004
Lol, Trunks blushes to much, hehehehe. So funny. Nice little bit of Trunks and Goten there, very amusing. I really find it hard to come up with any thing to say in the reviews. I'm not use to people updating thier storys everyday, its cool and strange at the same time. I'm still trying to get use to it, don't get me wrong i love that you do, it just leaves me with nothing much to say. Anyway can't wait till the next chap, Ja ne!
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From ANON - jaygoose on May 18, 2004
*finishing off lasagna* Nope that is definitely not better than sex...better than a ham sandwich, but definitly not better than sex. This lemonade is pretty good though. Refreshing. Anywho, at least Trunks and Goten got to bang.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 18, 2004
Chapter 7

�I am NEVER having children,� he said. Looked at Goten, who was sitting on his bed in his boxers, and upon Trunks� statement lifted the waist band of his shorts and looked inside.
�Well, than it�s a good thing I can�t give you any.� --ROFL! Aww poor Trunks and Goten hilarious as always.

If she ever went from �that� to �his sister� he would die of shock.--lmao, well I will be ready with the death certificate when that change happens b/c it is bound too..hehe...

He just wanted Gohan to leave Vegeta alone. To stop repeating that stupid question �How could you� like a mantra in his mind until Goku was deaf from the stupidity of that question.--Loved this line so much. It seems as though Gohan hasn't bothered them in awhile I do fear what would happen if they did run into each other or just confront each other. I think it is good Goku doesn't want to fight his own son that is what makes him, him. But if Vegeta was in his place I honestly dont think Vegeta would fight his son either. *shrugs* I dunno that is just my belief. And that question of Gohans (how could you) Seems to definately be eating away at Goku's thoughts....how frustrating and annoying that can be.

Because that�s all it was. Gohan was just upset because Vegeta wasn�t a girl. --I always believed that was what was truly bothering the demi saiyajin. That is so sad...to bad Gohan can not see past this fact. Ignorance has blinded him, preventing him to have a relationship with his father... Really it is very sad (I do not mean sad like I am crying, but sad like pathetic) to know it effects him that greatly he won't budge in his decisions I truly hate Gohan in this fic.

And that was truly stupid.--glad he thought that b/c that is exactly waht it is, truly stupid.

Another wonderful chapter and the end fight it getting terribly exciting...I can hardly wait to see what is going to happen...

^.*
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 18, 2004
chapter 6

�Oh, I stayed right next to your crib until I choked on how cute you were.�--lmao what a sweet lie

Smirked when Kakarot grabbed the headboard and almost broke it. �Better?� he asked.--O_O I think I broke the keyboard because I just...DIED!!!! This lemon is so delicious and it fits the mood just right b/c I am eating lemon chicken lucky me...or unlucky me b/c I am reading a lemon and eating a lemon chicken not getting any lemons of my own...hehe oh well I love reading this!

Ok wow an uninteruppted lemon in which I died more than once...very nice...thank you

Because he really did love Vegeta, and he knew what the Saiyan side of him liked, knew what it was hungry for and he wasn�t about to give in and let it have what it wanted.--wow that is ise, se, and so very scary. I wonder if he can control his saiyajin side, not give in to it...that thought worries me...

lmao loved the end notes!
^.*
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From ANON - Plyric on May 18, 2004
Nah, I don't think Vegeta wants a dominate Goku; I think he wants more of a "mental-equal"... well, maybe not mental ;P) , but more of an equal-ized partner/lover/mate than just a submissive. Carry on, carry on! =)
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 17, 2004
Chapter 5

I am glad that little Bra is finally born. ^_^

He was not a fan of hammocks, so he stayed standing, --thats good..neither am I..hehe

Dress in drag and dance the Macarena, he thought dryly-- LMAO!!!!! help..me...I almost died when I read that, I felt my heart giving out! Warn me before you write things like that!!!!! ^.~

It tasted too good for him to eat it prettily. --LoL, didn't I tell you to warn me!!!! j/k

(Especially since that fucking nurse kept coming in and pouting about how Kakarot had disappeared.) --aww *blasts nurse* there she is dead now no more worries... except..pearpears in nurse uniform and gawks at Goku*

But for the most part, he had spent the whole day as himself, as the Goku he remembered. --There goes that tinge of sadness through me. I hope he can always feel like the Goku he remembers even if he unlocks that saiyajin side fully.

Spoiled and pushy. (Not that Goku had any problems with him remaining that way. He rather liked Vegeta being all Prince like.) --I like it too, it is adorable.

Found that Vegeta was using his shirt to clean off his hands and face and knew that if it had been Vegeta�s own shirt that he was wearing it would never have been used for this purpose. --ROFL!!! That is so rude! But it presents and intresting point...his clothes are not worthy of grease or maybe Goku's clothes ARE worthy of sPrinPrincely grime...yes that must be it....hehe ^_^

loose ones, which meant this was part of Vegeta�s plan the whole time�aww what a nice plan...*sobs* but where is the rest o fitj/k
j/k

Ah. Not only do I miss a day� But I tease you too.--yes you do!

^.*
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 17, 2004
Chapter 4

Realized that he probably should have realized Kakarot would revert right back to his �help me I�m confused� behaviors like he had right after his wife had died. --You know that is sad but I cn'tn't help but laugh thinking of him sitting out there in his nest.

�I think I would,� Kakarot said, �Don�t let me, Vegeta. No matter what you have to do. Don�t ever let me do that.� --again..it just makes me so sad. I feel so badly for him and his struggle with this. But I am glad that he doesn't want to hurt the Prince.

�Kakarot,� Vegeta said, �You could have allowed me to get a shirt.� --LoL

�Oh,� his lover said, �Sorry �Geta. Here take mine.� Then he stripped off his shirt and pulled it on over Vegeta�s head before he could say anything. �There you go.�--GAH!!! *falls over dying of laughter* Goku is crazy!!!! But that is just too cute! Especially Vegeta in that big shirt!

Stopped stock-still at the newcomers that hadn�t checked in at the desk and stared quite blatantly at Kakarot who was just there, showing off how muscular and attractive he was. --ROFL!!!

Which was adorable. Which is the way it better stay because if he found out that Kakarot was having lecherous thoughts about anyone but him, than Vegeta would kill him.--LMAO!!! That is soooo cute!

�Dad, I think it would be best if you went and finished getting dressed. If another girl comes in here and gawks at you I think Vegeta is going to start killing them.� -- O_O LoL yeah that would be a good idea to get dressed...we dont want any dead nurses...or do we????? Got Goten was still talking (at this point, Goku had to wonder if somehow Goten had gotten female genes that allowed him to talk for many, many hours without having to breath.) --Lmao poor Goku having to listen ll tll that talking...

and the end notes were hilarious!
Another wonderful chapter!
^.*
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