Reviews for Saiyan EnlightenmentBy : CardDragonBall |
I really like Saiyan Enlightenment.
Goten and Goku are so alike. It was hillarious to see both of them teasing their mates.
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I uhhh what? I uhhhh want to fuck you into the ground, do you mind? It’ll only take a minute? Oh. His father was just full of brilliant suggestions wasn’t he? Go talk tm. m. Tell him what you want to do. Right, because Trunks was so well known for his ability to talk about sex without blushing like a tomato.
-LOL Poor trunks.
“uhwhatwhat?” Goten asked, wiggled away from him, out of his grasp (which was getting progressively tighter.) He stood there, close enough not to make Trunks grab him and drag him closer again, but far enough away that he had his own ‘personal’ space. Sniffed his shirt and made a face of disgust. Pulled it up off his chest and tossed it to the ground. “You couldn’t have found some water?” -Oh dear. You shuldn't have done that. *snickers*
Goten was half naked. He was horny as all hells, and filled to the brim with images of his boyfriend spread out under him in every imaginable way, crying out his name and helpless to do anything but submit to the pleasure and his boyfriend was half naked. He closed his eyes, and that didn’t help any because the images just came to mind and instead of being half naked Goten was fully naked. -LOL *grins mischeviously at Goten*
“Trunks are you okay?” Concern. Wasn’t ieet eet how his boyfriend was concerned about him. Heh. *rolls eyes*
It was funny when the pen broke, geting ink all over Vegeta. *laughs*
Looking forward to more.
My favorite parts and my responses to them are in bold.
“Trunks,” he said—and was very proud of him for for not growling out the word because he was feeling much better about life in general this morning—“You can’t learn to control nature. So go find your boyfriend, be honest with him and then fuck him.” Crossed his arms over his chest. *chuckles*
Kakarot snorted. “And then,” he said like an old lady teacher, “Come back and we’ll give you a big gold star!” -LMAO at this remark.
“Uh…so, after I do that I won’t want to do it again?” Hdn’tdn’t look like he really believed this to be the truth.
Was it the truth? Not entirely. There were still times he would like nothing more than to shove Kakarot to his knees and have a bout of animalistic sex. That sort of thing just didn’t go away because you did it once, but generally the urge wasn’t ever as strong as it was the first time. That first time was killer, because it took control of you until you had little choice but to give in. Stronger men than him had tried to stop the impulse and failed. But after that initial encounter, it was easto hto handle. He looked at his son, who was still fidgeting and answered him (after much too long of a delay to be comforting.) “Not like you do now.” *rolls on floor laughing*
“Ah, well,” she said with an attempt at a smile. “If you’re going to be here for awhile I’m going to go take a shower…or a bath. Are you going to be around long enough I can take a bath?”
He rolled his eyes at her and her long-ass baths, but nodded. She tossed the burp clothe on his shoulder patted him and ran off, up the stairs gleefully squeaking all the way. was was always a bizarre woman. -Squeaking all the way? Bizarre indeed! *chuckles*
Goten huffed. “Alright, look. Why are you hanging on to this so hard? Are you really going to let Dad’s decision to be with Vegeta to ruin every single aspect of your…TRUNKS!” He jumped up from the rock he had been sitting on and charged across the space and tossed himself into his boyfriend’s arms. (Never mind he looked like a spastic fangirl mauling her favorite bishie.) *rolls eyes*
“Every aspect of my trunks?” Gohan inquired, turned around and looked at them with a raised eyebrow. (Just a little tiny bit of amusement that warred with a lot of near-disgust.) How could Gohan be so dense? *laughs at his ineptitude*
I am now wondering what Goten's response will be when Trunks tells him what he wants to do to goten. *smirks*
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!! Oh and review chapter 12 for me please.
I am slowly trying to put my story up on Hudine's site as well.
My favorite parts and my responses to them are in bold.
“Trunks,” he said—and was very proud of himself for not growling out the word because he was feeling much better about life in general this morning—“You can’t learn to control nature. So go find your boyfriend, be honest with him and then fuck him.” Crossed his arms over his chest. *chuckles*
Kakarot snorted. “And then,” he said like an old lady teacher, “Come back and we’ll give you a big gold star!” -LMAO at this remark.
“Uh…sfterfter I do that I won’t want to do it again?” He didn’t look like he really believed this to be the truth.
Was it the truth? Not entirely. There were still times he would like nothing mohan han to shove Kakarot to his knees and have a bout of animalistic sex. That sort of thing just didn’t go away because you did it once, but generally the urge wasn’t ever as strong as it was the first time. That first time was killer, because it took control of you until you had little choice but to give in. Stronger men than him had tried to stop the impulse and failed. But after that initial encounter, it was easier to handle. He looked at his son, who was still fidgeting and answered him (after much too long of a delay to be comforting.) “Not like you do now.” *rolls on floor laughing*
“Ah, well,” she said with an attempt at a smile. “If you’re going to be here fohilehile I’m going to go take a shower…or a bath. Are you going to be around long enough I can take a bath?”
He rolled his eyes at her and her long-ass baths, but nodded. She tossed the burp clothe on his shoulder patted him and ran off, up the stairs gleefully squeaking all the way. She was always a bizarre woman. -Squeaking all the way? Bizarre indeed! *chuckles*
Goten huffed. “Alright, look. Why are you hanging on to this so hard? Are you really going to let Dad’s decision to be with Vegeta to ruin every single aspect of your…TRUNKS!” He jumped up from the rock he had been sitting on and charged across the space and tossed himself into his boyfriend’s arms. (Never mind he looked like a spastic fangirl mauling her favorite bishie.) *rolls eyes*
“Every aspect of my trunks?” Gohan inquired, turned around and looked at them with a raised eyebrow. (Just a little tiny bit of amusement that warred with a lot of near-disgust.) How could Gohan be so dense? *laughs at his ineptitude*
I am now wondering what Goten's response will be when Trunks tells him what he wants to do to goten. *smirks*
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!! Oh and review chapter 12 feaseeaseease.
I am slowly trying to put my story up on Hudine's site as well.
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