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Reviews for Saiyan Enlightenment

By : CardDragonBall

From on June 23, 2004
~Crys~ I can't beleive that AFF.net was down for so long, it was so frustrating. What great couple of chapters, i love the bit where Vegeta and Piccolo where makingll jll jokes and Goku didnt find them funny,lol. And i wondeful lemon, i really felt all of Gokus feelings this time, i felt kinda like i was there. Weard ne? And the passion comment wreatreat. ^_^ Poor Veggie, hehe sex is like his life line. Can't wait till the next chap Card-san, and i hope you are feeling better, Ja ne!
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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 23, 2004

I greatly enjoyed the update. Aff is back up... Whoohoo.

First step: fuck. Second step: fight. Third: meditate on it. Trunks missed the first step,

screwed up the second and failed the third altogether. -LOL

It seems there is a new lesson plan. *Grins*

Keep up the great work!

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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 23, 2004

I greatly /p>
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on June 18, 2004
he really wanted to get to that �learn to control your impulses� part so he could go find his son and apologize and not have to worry about beating his face into the ground. --hehe yeah that would be nice thing to control...nobody wants their face beat in.

�She thinks I�m wrong about Da�Goku. That I�m being a stubborn prick.�--he is really hurting about this if he wont even listen to his wife...that is insane that he is letting his marriage suffer.

�You know,� his brother said, glaring at him levely (which wasn�t intimidating thanks to the oversized clothes falling off his shoulders)--lmao and you know what even if he was dressed normally I dont think it would be that intinidating.

Oh. Lord. His brother thought like a woman. --LoL

Va jua just left Bulma, how the hell does anyone here expect to be able to trust that he won�t just leave Goku?--So this is what bugs Gohan. The fact that Vegeta is random. I never really thought of it. From a son/daughters pov I can somewhat understand where he is coming from, not that I really agree with him. Because Vegeta is flawless in my eyes, but I do understand and yes...I do think he is thinking like a woman. And if Vegeta went through he hhe has gone through and he hasnt left Goku yet that has to show for something.

and mentors didn�t randomly sigh at thpupipupils for no reason. --LoL

I hope you feel better soon. ^_^
Vegeta: *wearing biohazard suit *---LMAO! Vegeta in a biohazard suit and you are a dead zombie *sobs* I feel like I am trapped in a resident evil fic. *looks at Claire Redfield sleeping in Goku's nest and a zombie is hiding in a tree*

^.*
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From ANON - Macha on June 17, 2004
You spent a significate amount of time with Piccolo, Gohan and Goten this chapter. Piccolo is so wise. Can I be like him when I grow up? Well, maybe not, concing ing the lack of lemons. He was really helpful in being the con to Gohan's pro in this debate.

Vegeta picked a very good atmosphere for Goku to be meditating in. I hope that it turns out well for him.

Krillin was a little strange. It's nice to see that he was trying to be civil.

I had to laugh at how many times Goku wished that he'd just leave.

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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 17, 2004

Thank you.

I had a nice long review for a change and when I clicked review... I lost all of my work again! *very annoyed*

*follows neighbors example and chucks computer out window*

*smiles* Gohan still calls him Dad. -LOL

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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 17, 2004

Thank you.

I had a nice long revier a r a change and when I clicked review... I lost all of my work again! *very annoyed*

*smiles* Gohan still calls him Dad. -LOL

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From ANON - Elenek on June 17, 2004
We�ll It certainly did take me long enough now didn�t it? Now, let�s see if I can shock you even more. Gohan needs to just back off and realize that his dad is a big boy and will be living his own life and learning from his own mistakes. Of course it might be easier if he knew more about the entire saiyan bonds and mates thing. Now take your Nyquil, go back to bed and get better.
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From on June 17, 2004
Woooooooo, ~Hugs Piccolo~ The almy Piy Piccolo-san. Now that we know what Gohan's problem is we can have it sorted easyer, hopefully. Sorry the review can't be longer, i have to go out. Can't wait for the next chap, and i hope you feel better soon, Ja ne!
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From ANON - Sarkywoman on June 16, 2004
Aww come on, I can just imagine it......

Gohan: How could you?

Goku: Grr! You mean how can I be gay? How can I love Vegeta? You need to grow up Gohan!

Gohan: No! How could you take Vegeta from me?!?

Goku: *sweatdrops*

Vegeta: *faints*
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on June 16, 2004
More often than not he found that he couldn�t sleep.--I don't blame him with everything that is going on and Goku isn't in there.

Because this man that was lying in his bed was less of the person he was becoming and painfully more of the person he had been.--It's like a circle to Goku, he doesn't want to leave that circle. But he must...sooner or later, and I fear later would be worse than sooner.

Maybe there should be meditation instead of fighting.--yeah that makes total sense

If Radditz had tried this crap he would have kneed him in the gut, --lmao! if Radditz tried that it would seem awkward to me for some reason.

There has to be something. I mean. I�m not giving you up.� Vegeta smiled--awww I love that! Of course he isn't giving up his Prince *snaps fingers* darn it I thought Vegeta was mine for sure that time...
I don't want Goku to have to give up Vegeta or his son. b/c he loves them both and I dont want anyone to hurt. I want the world to be filled with false happiness!

Aww I loved this chapter and thought it was so comforting and cute to see them holding each other while they were in bed. And the lil lemon was good too! yummy!
lmao at end notes
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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 15, 2004
Kakarott with insomnia? Pity party anyone? *rolls eyes*

Gohan is a prick. Vegeta sucked some dick.
And now his teeth he brushes so he wont get sick?

LOL

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From ANON - Anon on June 15, 2004
That was very considerate of Vegeta. Finding the fastest and most distracting way of getting those annoying thoughts out of Goku's head. hehe

Poor Trunks. And then, he's going to have a full nights sleep, so I have to think, "Poor Goten." ;)
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From ANON - EleneK on June 15, 2004
I�m glad both mothers are getting involved. And Trunks is going through angst too, poor Trunks. Both Trunks and Goku are going to have to go through that second stage where they learn control.

You�re right, Raditz never did have a son. But Vegeta does. He started off this fic being a pretty good parent. Now he�s being a little cold and callous to anything family related (at least when it concerns Goku�s family). He is going to have to find a way to make himself less hypocritical. If he wants to be with Goku he is going to have to come to terms with Goku�s family ties. He also needs to understand that the feelings he has towards his own drendren would also apply to Goku.

Here�s a question for you. How did Gohan handle his puberty? Dad was dead and Vegeta certainly wasn�t helping him out.

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From on June 15, 2004
Ahh theres Piccolo ^_^ good to see he is where he should be. ~Nods~ And why is Vegeta gargaling afterwards? It can't be that bad,lol. Now, lets see, maybe Goku and Gohan could go for a walk, or a fly? Or just play a simple game of chess? ^_^ Just to get them comunicating to gto get to know eachother again. ....0_0 i just had the most weard realisation. You know Gohan wears glasses at the end of DBZ? Well i just realised that it is some corny take off from Superman...or was DBZ first?...no thats not right. Anyway he's the great Saiyaman and so he has classes like Clark Kent. Hahaha, i don't know, it just poped into my head, and i thought id tell you so that the review was longer since you where contenplating making your updates longer,lol. Well can't wait till the next chap, Ja ne!
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