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Reviews for Saiyan Enlightenment

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - jaygoose on June 06, 2004
*waves sheepishly* Uh Hi...I don't know if you noticed but I have been MIA for a minute. I have been so business and off schedule. Sorry. *sigh*

First off, Poor Piccolo. I feel sorry for him. He can never know the joy of wild monkey sex. And then Goten and Trunks. I am a tad worried about the twitching thing too. And of course Gohan is an ass. -_- I will however try really hard to keep up. :)
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From ANON - Mechanical Brflyrfly on June 06, 2004
�Its been almost a month. Videl wanted to know if it was something she did.� -- -_-;; Uh it's this little thing I like to call, hating Vegeta. that's why a month has gone by...

He turned to leave, and Kakarot actually moved to attack him�low threshold for stupidity was a great Saiyan threat�YEAH!!! KILL HIM! *eats popcorn*

but Vegeta darted forward and grabbed him before he could hurt his son.--DAMN YOU VEGETA! *shakes fist at him* Actually I am happy he stopped Goku, even though I know he despises Gohan he would never let Goku hurt his own son. And how can you hate a guy like that ? *glares at Gohan*

Vegeta would have let Kakarot beat him to a bloody pulp, wrapped him up in a bow and sent him home to his wife in pieces. --rofl...that really isn't such a bad idea

(this was mobviobvious by the slight creasing of the brow, and the fact that he was scratching the back of his head now.)--awwww cuteness *dies* It's funny how you know when he is thinking...if only more ppl could be like Goku the world would be a better place.

He sat up on the bed too and looked at Kakarot, looked down between his legs too. �Is it really dead?� --@_@!!!!!
rofl!!! *glares daggers at Gohan* I really hate him now, if there was thing that could have pushed me over the edge that was it. Hentai girls like myself need our lemons!!!!!

Vegeta could have stripped and pole danced in front of him and he probably wouldn�t have even managed a meager response.--that is it!!! he needs to die...no wait...death is too good for him...he needs to be tortured! TORTURED I tell you!

and a veiled (or not so veiled) comment about how his son would be losing either his genitals or his face iis sis sex-drought went on for very much longer.--rofl!!! I vote both!!! Carve his face like a pumpkin!!!! DO IT!!!! MY VEGETA NEEDS SEX *whispers* and I need ot read about it...^_^

I love that Piccolo has become the one appointed of Goku's sex life problems. And I died when he started off the convo by saying "Piccolo, I have a problem..." lol..poor Piccolo, I will gladly take his place. ^_~

Piccolo, it�s not SUPPOSED to SHRIVEL UP! What happens if it never unshrivels?� -*dies at very thought* I feel his pain..it effects even my world...*thinks of killing Gohan* What? *smiles innocently* I'm hungry...I'll just be ...HEY WHAT's THAT!? *points in random direction then goes off to kill Gohan*

�You had better not know what I�m talking about.� Seriously glared at him.--LMAO! Poor Piccolo...hehe I love it!

growled about that internally and was very pleased, retrospectively, that he killed his brother. Then he felt bad, and then he was glad again. --rofl!!! so homer simpson like

while she practically salivated over his every word.--love this observation

Goku: Lets just hope the author never has a dirty thought about him. *scary music plays *--rofl! *dies*

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ch 22

Goten wasn�t the smartest boy in the bunch and he knew this, naturally--I loved this and the opening paragraph b/c it seems like he said some pretty smart stuff to me!

Vegeta glared at him. Which was odd, because it was an unconcentrated glare,--LoL, my poor poor Prince.

LoL Goten has to carry lube everywhere...yay!!! lube=lemons!

they were talking about Gohan (he who killed arousal everywhere) --LoL, *laughs then gets mad* Gohan...I thought I killed him? If not him...then who...who is in the closet *is scared*

that made them infinitely more attractive and dangerous.--LoL

Almost like a battle, only they were just standing around naked and smiling.
Which got boring fast.--lmao

(YES! He was all about this sex thing and nothing was going to stop him! There would be no shriveling today!) --*cheers* YAY GOKU!!!!!!

YAY!!!! LEMON GALORE!!! *eats lemon*
That was fantastic!
and end notes lol

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From ANON - Sarkywoman on June 05, 2004
Gohan definitely needs a spanking. He's just jealous 'cos he wants Vegeta's nice ass.
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From ANON - macha on June 04, 2004
Yes, he got his mojo back. I don't really care what kind of thought process it took, but he got there.

Twitchy Trunks*snickers* Oh, poor Goten. I think Vegeta gave him very good advice.

Mmmmmm, I like it when Vegeta is seme. ink ink Goku does too.
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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 04, 2004
I loved this chapter.

I would be funny if the dragonballs were used to make Gohan perpetually horny for a year, as punishment for his stupidness. LOL

I would just laugh at his ignominy, from the results. LOL
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From on June 04, 2004
~Grins~ Hehe alright get on your hands and knees and bark,lol just kidding. I wont be able to get back on a computer untill atleast thursday next week so i wont be able to review or anything. I'm really sad about it, sooo unfair. Reading you fics has become like a ritual, hehe. ^_^ Really glad we had sex in this chap and Goku didnt lose it, that would have been really, really, really frustrating. And what is gonna happen with Trunks and Goten? Hmmmm. Can't wait to get back and read more, ~Puts on her traviler hat and picks up a stick~ i bit you fair well my freind, till next time. ~Walks away~
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From ANON - macha on June 03, 2004
This was horrible, horrible I tell you. *Goes to find Gohan. Then shows him all the Card A/U's where he is getting laid because he isn't such an asshole, immature prick.* Well, I guess it's up to him now.

How could I possibly find it humorus that there wasn't any hot monkey sex because of that kid? Okay, Goku torturing poor Piccolo with the sex talk WAS funny. I just hope that he gets his mojo back soon.
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From ANON - angry monkey on June 03, 2004
its like Piccollo is an agony aunt; like Mr. Hankey from South Park. *Pictures Piccollo gleefully springing out of a toilet and bouncing around the bathroom singing about Santa* Hhmmm ..I've got stop recalling TV. *Remembers the monkey in a neon hat on a unicycle* hehehe (Side note- I watch way to many cartoons and biology documentries- the result is a mentality of lime dancing livers and square dancing stomachs.) However, Piccollo is really funny in this. Gohan, however, is not. So I call upon him..... DISASTER, like raining nappies (Goku blows up a garbage factory!) or Piccollo feeding him bad Mircaro.
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From on June 03, 2004
Man i can't beleve Gohan had the nerve to go there and blame the fact that he was only there because of Videl.Son of a ****. He should of just told her the truth, "No Videl it's not you it's me, i'm being an ass and scared my own loving father away." Stupid, stupid ~Rants on for a few hours~ Baka!!! (That means stupid aswell btw, just incase you didnt know) ^_^; Don't want to confuse you. LOVED the bit with Goku going insane to Piccolo. Hehe he's going to be even pailer next time we see him, hehehehehahahahahahaHAHAHAHAHA!! *Ahem* Sorry. Now, get to the sex my dear auther. ~Points to the sky~ Ja ne!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on June 03, 2004
but Vegeta knew his lover, and knew that if you got him started on an idea he could talk your head right off your shoulders about it.--LoL awww

So Vegeta smirked. �Yes?�--so the tables are turned look whose smirking now.

Crossed his large arms over his large chest and tried to glower, but he still couldn�t keep eye contact with Vegeta. --Poor Piccolo..aww but its just so funny...*laughs uncontrollably*

Vegeta couldn�t resist. �Yes. Sleeping.� Then smirked broader. �Naked.�--lmao!!! How can the Prince be so cruel? Doesn't he understand Piccolo is uncomfortable...poor green Namek..LoL *smirks* That is why I love him...(Vegeta that is) hehe...

and then Kakarot collapsed against his back and rested his sleepy head on Vegeta�s shoulder. �Tiiiiiiired.�--*dies* That is so cute!

�He ate some bad cauliflower,� Vegeta said. --rofl!!!!

(oh, lets all bow down) --*happily bows and licks Vegeta's boots*

(did anyone else notice that Vegeta was just a tad prissy for a Saiyan?)--yes and I find it irrisitably cute and sexy!!!!

which led them to believe that Krillin had spent all his free time jacking off and plucking black hairs out of his head so nobody would know about it. --*dies laughing*

(Something that Vegeta didn�t even pretend to care about as he walked away.) --LoL, I would do the same thing though.

and Piccolo looking funky and white because he ate cauliflower.--aww Lmao...

(Goku doubted this to the truth, however, since he knew nothing about Namek metabolisms, he couldn�t sat that it wasn�t. Of course, he also had no fricking clue what cauliflower was.)--GAH!!! ROFL!!! He doesn't know what that disgusting vegatble is !!!!!????? He is so cute! *dies*

Hoped the fight lasted all day. Hell, maybe for two days. Maybe for a week!--O_O A week! But Goku! *looks at Goku's nether parts* They will be sooo neglected and dusty after a week! A week is like a decade or something in sex talk!

and the strange sense of pride that he felt as he watched Vegeta, as he felt the damage his smaller mate could inflict on someone, and even on the receiving end of it, it was�arousing. --that's better as long as he's aroused...
but seriously I like that Goku is getting into this fighting and seeming to let go of himself and hopefully not hold back anything.

And I love that he missed fighting so much that he feels like he could do it for a week.

Because sometimes Goku is Kakarot and sometimes he is Goku and she KEEPS FORGETTING WHICH--LMAO! aww it's ok *pats you*

lmao at end notes!

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From ANON - macha on June 02, 2004
I am so happy with how Goku's training is coming along. Look at that, he blew Krillin off so that he could go fight. *wipes tear from face* Makes me so proud.

I like the way you discribed how this fight felt a little different from all of he previous fights. Sure, he has always liked the fight, but somehow it means more now.

Certainly seems like they were both having fun knocking the shit out of eachother.
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From ANON - angry monkey on June 02, 2004
hey- Vegeta may wear gloves, but he may not be prissy :) Motorcyclists wear gloves, but they don't get hounded by the animal rights people because rich ladies in fur are easier too beat up than big men in leather (and gloves)! Heh- Piccolo ate bad caulifour- next it'll be Mircale Gro thats past its best before date.
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From on June 02, 2004
Uhhh, ~hands you a plastic bag with your hair in~. Hehehe there you go ^_^; Try not to do that again it must hurt. Poor Krillin not being able to talk to Goku, he must feel sad....BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA like i care. *Ahem* Anyway a great chap, i just can't wait to see more nerviose Piccolo. And don't worry about not replying, everyone get busy now and again. ^_^ Can't wait till the next chap, Ja ne!
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From Shan on June 02, 2004
Well that was nice. But I am interested in finding out why Piccolo's being all weird, unless there was something already that I missed.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on June 02, 2004
Kakarot�s brat was the hentai. He probably would have sat here with Bulma and taken notes. --LoL

�Yes.� Best to keep his sentences short, just in case she got confused--rofl

�Without divulging any sort of details about the hot monkey sex?� she asked, �I hardly think so.�--what a hentai...she is a woman after my own heart. I would say the same thing if I was her.

�You never had sex outside with me. You said it was too public.�--lol this converstaion sounds like a lot of fun for Vegteta

And then she grinned. �Well, if you were outside in a public place, just what did he use to�� --LoL great transistion!

�Goku,� Piccolo said, �It was yesterday, not the other day.�--O_O! Well exxxcuuuuussssseee me Mr. drill sergeant perfectionsist have to have the days right green dude...sheesh ^_^

That always screwed him up (no pun intended.) --LoL

(who gave a day off to a psychotic saiyan-side with a taste for raunchy sex anyway?)--not me, that's for sure.

Vegeta came home he sniffed him. Just a little sniff. --aww that saiyajin side is coming out more and more..sniffing that is cute...but I suppose it could lead to deadly things if he sniffs something that he doesnt like.

�So you made me horny. When I had to tell her how you fucked me.� --that is so sweet and cute *dies*

Yummy lemon!!! I do hope that is not the end of it.

Vegeta: *sharpening kitchen knife with whetstone * Good plan--o.O! NO! she brings us good lemons!!!

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ch 19

So he pressed his cheek to Kakarot�s again--that is the kind of stuff that makes me die! I love that those little things or when they just kiss run fingers through hair. It is so small but it makes it seem so real.

Held there by hands on him, and he wiggled against them just so he would be restrained harder--I love that. Vegeta is so bad, but bad in a good way. He knows how to get what he wants.

Liked being able to turn Vegeta over and know that he wasn�t hurting him, just giving him what he wanted.--Good. I am glad he is learning this and understanding it too. See there is an upside to all of this stuff.

Used his free hand to wrap up in Vegeta�s hair, felt the t bla black strands in his fingers and that made him moan, he loved the feeling of Vegeta�s hair ---*dies* I absolutely love that it is beautfiul and I am totally convinced you are the Queen of Lemons...^.~

That lemon was ...amazing...*drools* Delicious! I must read it again...and I shall!!!!

and put his hand ontop of the one tracing his chest. --cuteness

Not that he was about to tell anyone, but Vegeta really liked it when people touched him.--awwwwww that is so adorable. I will touch him all he wants. I will touch him FOREVER!!!!!

�Mm-hmm,� Goku said. Nodded. Didn�t move to go and shower though and Vegeta didn�t either, just laid there, sprawled and comfortable as he was petted.--LoL

lmao at end notes

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