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Reviews for Saiyan Enlightenment

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - macha on May 27, 2004
It was really really good, until the part you just STOPPED. Not mad, just plain evil.

Alright. This chapter was good. I liked all of it, just wanted more, but of course, you already knew that.

I'm glad that Piccolo's advice turned Goku's thinking around.

I liked the part where Vegeta thought that a sayian wouldn't give an hour long apology. That was funny.
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From on May 27, 2004
Hahaha yes i supose i would be that pationt if the sex was that good aswell. ^_^ Hehe really jucy lemon this time, tis loveing every second. You know ive been thinking and i think that Piccolo should take on the job of couple counsaling those two, i'm sure he'd do a good job of it. And they wouldent fight so much then. Can't wait till the next chap, Ja ne!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 27, 2004
The fact that he wasn�t standing but sitting in the bottom of the tub. --*gasp* he can't even stand to take his shower...*shakes fist at Goku*

I loved how Bulma helped Vegeta out and even picked him up. That was so sweet of her.

And now that woman was all worried about him and if Kakarot heard that he had made Bulma worry than this stupid cycle of thoughts that had to be going on in the idiot�s head�--O.o Oh I hope Goku will be able to understand.

Hell, Vegeta had sex with Bulma, and Goku wasn�t knocking down her door to prove who Vegeta belonged to.--I am glad he is seeing it this way now. I loved how he described everything to Piccolo it was so cute and funny.

�You should trust him. He doesn�t want to hurt yo mak make you hurt someone else.�--Piccolo always has a wise word and is usually right. ^_^

and he really liked hanging out with Vegeta except for the past few weeks because they su a l a lot.--They did? A LOT you say? Where was I when this alleged sucking was going down? And I do mean going down...who was going down on whom..hm?

I hope all goes well....and I see Goku is still hating his saiyajin side. I wonder if that will ever change...

^.*
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From ANON - macha on May 26, 2004
Well, even if he did say things to Piccolo that I donhinkhink that Vegeta would wholely be happy about, at least he's thinking it through now, rather than just reacting to it like he was in the last chapter. Seemed as thought Piccolo was somewhat helpful, even if he was a little embarassed.

I don't know what to think about Vegeta ending up at Bulma's. It's not that he was there, but even that small amount of time, and the fact that the boys have already said something to Goku about Vegeta having been there, How is Goku going to react to the knowledge when he actually may scent her on Vegeta? Is he going to have another Raditz-like episode, or is it just a par for the course situation?

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From ANON - Hecate18 on May 26, 2004
*Hides behind chair*
I've been neglecting one of my favourite fics, but its my day off today so I had a chance to read uninterupted... I actually 'had' free time! *faints*

I liked the opening of chapter 15, it was mean but Bulma's reaction was a little funny. ^-^
I certainly wouldn't mind finding a naked Vegeta in my shower, even if he was bruised and battered... I'll take good care of him ^.~
But its a good thing he didn't go to his own shower. Poor Vegeta *strokes him*

'No purposefully, but he slammed headfirst into the Namek and ended up tangled up rather indecently with the other alien.' - I can just imagine that, a mess of spiky black hair and green antennas LOL!
Piccolo's pretty understanding of Goku'd Ved Vegeta's relationship though, especially considering he comes from an a-sexual race who give birth by spitting out eggs. ^_^

But its good to see that things are a little bit better and Goku is not 'so' mad at Vegeta. ^-^

Looking forward to the next chap, I'm off now to watch a video... (I'm taking advantage of my day off and I seem to be the only person who hasn't watched LotR- return of the king!)
*looks at time and sighs* For a movie that takes about 3 hours its not a good idea to start watching it at 9pm when you've got college in the morning. U_U
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From ANON - kodachi on May 26, 2004
So sorry! I haven�t had the time to review- couldn�t even read your stories until now.. How long has its been? Two weeks? It sure felt like withdrawal and the only good thing about this dilemma is that I�ve gotten to read ...uh... lots ^-^ of chapters in a row!!!!! Yah! I�ve been keeping track on that one, MLS and NTOO and I love every one of them to bits! You have so much talent it really has to hurt sometimes, hasn�t it?! *smiles*

Anyway, it somehow galled me to no end that Goku would leave Vegeta just like that and put all the blame on the Prince... but that seemed to work out just fine right now and even though I could hit Kakarott for it it somehow fits him (his current mental state at least because he IS confused and shocked and sad and angry....) Anyhow, I have to congratulate you on the characterization of Vegeta and Kakarott (and Piccolo and so on)! Very emotional, heart-warming and overall very understandable (and that�s a compliment in itsself!). The line "Vegeta was his mate. His other." was especially striking as was the fact, that Katt stt slowly comes to terms with everything that happened and FINALLY analyzes his viouviour more deepl don don�t mind that he shares information with Piccolo as I rather like "the green one" and I think him and Vegeta do harmonize quite well with each other :) Wouldn�t mind if their "relashionship of acceptance" would change into a friendship of sorts. And before I forget it: that sex scene in chapter 13 was *really* hot! *fans herself* I think it was your very best (though I like the other ones as well!!!!!). And last but not least, I don�t think Kakarott was *that* rough with Vegeta. You could still "see" Goku who-loved-his-mate-and-didn�t-want-to-hurt-him in his actions. Liked especially the way he drove Vegeta over the edge without allowing him to touch himself... that was just... just ...grrrrrrrrrrrr ^-^ (I�m weird, I know.)

To your story MLS: That�s maybe my fate ate at the moment (I�m known to change my opinion from time to time ^_~)! I especially like the scene where Vegeta unclips this ring of metal (that protects his mind) and gives it to Nappa without a second and the fact that Goten "falls" for our lovely Prince because of his strong will and unique determination! (See a parallel there to the Boo episode?! *grins*)

Alright, nuff said. I hope you aren�t mad that I�m not seperately reviewing your stories, but it just had to be said in one connected text. ^-^ Hope you are well and wish you a nice day! Friendly greetings, ~kodachi~
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From on May 26, 2004
All hail Piccolo the god of resoning. ^_^ Haha silly Goku, he's blowing this whole thing out of propotion. I respect Vegeta for staying so pationt with Goku, it must be hard for him, knowing what Vegeta can get like. ^^; Can't wait till the next chap, Ja ne!
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From ANON - Plyric on May 26, 2004
Arg! I meant to review on Chapter 13! Oh my god, what a de-LI-cious lemon! Uh, I had such sweet dreams Monday night! So now, oh, geez, poor Goku, what... a... tragedy. And, what an interesting role reversal considering the topic of developing trust in someone, i.e. in MoP it was Vegeta learning to trust Goku and now in SE it's the other way around. It's too bad he's not thinking about the fact that Vegeta is not a Saiyan, well anymore that is, who breaks promises. Hmm... It's also too bad Goku doesn't have a best friend who's the smartest person in the world who could make sense of his right vs. wrong dilemna... Oh wait, Goku DOES have the smartest person in the world as his best friend! Hmm, now is Goku smart enough to figure out this is one problem he really shouldn't handle on his own? And why can't we just kill of Gohan? J/k, j/k!!! *smirks evilly*
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 26, 2004
But it would have been pleasantly aching if not for the fact that Kakarot really did have tears in his eyes --I feel badly for him and at the same time *shakes fist at him* I want him to be able to cope with his saiyajin side so he doesn't blow up like he did in MoP...and then I just get all sad for him and I'm like awww he is crying and I know he is truly confused...I know it is as hard as hell for him to deal with this b/c he found nothing wrong with it but was disturbingly right...so *sighs* I am just torn because I feel badly for Vegeta too and him wanting to bring this side out of Goku and it really keeps backfiring or getting worse...

�How the hell can I trust you now?�--O_O! This is maddening!!!! I know Vegeta told Kakarott he would let him do that...but he can trust him...he can't give up on him....*sobs*

Because he was Vegeta and wearing a fucking sheet was just demeaning.--LoL. But I can not believe Goku just left Vegeta there..and in such a state and with only a sheet! Ugh that pisses me off. -_- that's what I look like when I am pissed off...hehe...

Because he was the one acceptthatthat part of Vegeta.--whoa! So that is how he feels...like it is justfied b/c he accepts that part of Vegeta but he never asked anyone to accept all of him..he doesn't even accept it himself.

Why even say you would do it if you weren�t going to do it?--Such a good question but if only he would look at it from Vegeta's point of view then maybe he would understand why.

Vegeta had lied to him and he had betrayed himself and Vegeta and there was nothing anymore.--No...there is always more! I am so sad...this story is so freaking sad! hehe...but it really is. It seems this plan of bringing the saiyajin side out has turned for the worst.

Vegeta probably doesn't want to learn instant transmission...just so he can continue to complain about it. Besides I think he likes when Goku IT's him places. :)
*sobs* No one likes Yamcha...well JayGoose does I think we are the only two ppl in the world who like him. j/k

This chapter was really excellent and now I am all sad...and highly anticipating tomorrows chapter. I do wonder where Vegeta went in just a sheet.
I feel so bad for him...Goku leaving him all bruised and battered b/c he lied...oh but the lie was for a good cause and everyone lies once in ahwile!!!!

^.*
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From ANON - macha on May 25, 2004
Well, if we're going to call it training, then Goku isn't doing it very well. Do you think I could scare him enough with the pom poms that he'd go back to Vegeta? Maybe I should have cheered him on, just so that he knew it was alright? Right now all I want to do is tell him to get over it. *sighs in exasperation*

"Nice tantrum Goku, any other remodeling you'd like to do?"

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From ANON - Sarkywoman on May 25, 2004
Vegeta ought to go spend the night with Piccolo and then Goku would get all jealous and have animalistic sex with him again.
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From on May 25, 2004
~Grabs Goku~ How can you be so stupid? ~Shakes him about~ ;_; Card-san you can't leave it like that, you have to make everything be ok, i hate angst when its between Goku and Veggie. ~Crys in her hanky~ WHYYYYYYYYYYY????
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 25, 2004
�STUPID ASS!� He yelled, �I HATE THAT MOTHERFUCKING TECHNIQUE! GET YOUR POUTY ASS BACK HERE KAKAROT!� --LoL aww poor Kaki...and poor Vegeta shame on him for never learning that technique.

And who should be in front of his home but the little bald thing, who jsquesqueaked when he saw Vegeta and managed to stutter out a: �I was just here to see Goku.� --LoL bad timing.

With fists and fighting and if all went well, fucking.--*crosses fingers* I hope all goes well. I am still laughing about Krillen..hehe what a moron.

aliens�like Zarbon�or�Dodira� Or�Yamcha.)--rofl!!! yamcha...*shakes head* I like Yamcha...am I the only one?

In fact, just the thought of Vegeta and Nappa even attempting to do soing ing was enough tke hke him want to puke. --yeah that makes me want to puke too...seriously...that is just sick! and should be banned in the fanfic world..if there are such fics.

a bit convinced that he was second best because he couldn�t be the Saiyan that Radditz was,--WHAT! aww that's how he feels?! He is way better than Radditz! *hugs Goku*

Considering Vegeta was dead set against anyone else knowing their business, that left only one person for him to prove this fact to.
Vegeta himself.--what an interesting concept...

He was a nice person a good person that cared about flowers and bunnies and loved everything. -- -_- LMAO!!!!

Tonight Vegeta would be screaming only his name.--YES!

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ch 13

And another grin. Kakarot�s hair went gold as he paced there for a moment and watched him. --*dies and cries* I love it so far!!!!!!!!!!!!

Vegeta pulled his gloves off, dropped them on the ground and moved forward, --He is stripping! hehe... I liked that line...Vegeta got serious!

One hand moved away, grabbed his right wrist and dragged his hand up, waved it in the air stupidly to get the grass off --that is so cute.

Wanted to hear his name.
That�s what this was about, after all. His name. Only his name.
He was the only one and that�s what this was all about.--loved the...a...a...and amazing to see how his train of thought is just about this.

�Kakarot,� Vegeta whined, leaned his head back against Goku�s shoulder and looked at him. --*is offically dead*
I loved this chapter, and thought you tackled that sex excellently! I read it like 3 different times. It was really good and not just b/c it was a lemon but b/c Goku gave in to that side, yet he still didn't want to hurt Vegeta. Just wanted to hear his name that would prove everything to him. I loved that. I loved when Vegeta screamed his name. I loved it all!

*is scared of end notes*
I hope it isn't an omen

^.*
-MB-

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From jaygoose on May 24, 2004
whoa!...Oh yeah...I'm leaving again for a few days. I can't wait to see what happens while I'm gone.
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From on May 24, 2004
Don't worry if you don't have time to reply, atleast you updated. ^_^ Tis goooood. At last Goku and Veggie get it on Saiyan style. ~Skips off into the distance wisteling happly~
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