Click Here!

Reviews for A deal or two

By : RandomFluff
  • From Safir84 on April 01, 2008
    Shit, this is good, okay, it's more than good, actually, hehe, coz I love it so far! And you haven't updated for about 3 years now, what happened?!

    Anyway, I feel like I should tell you that I've only read the manga up to vol.4 (so I haven't really seen much of Envy yet, if one doesn't count the blissful but short appearance he made in the beginning of said volume) and I've seen the anime, which I loved and I do of course love the manga too! But I'm sure I'll love it even more after reading the whole lot and I've to say that even though I like both of Envy's portrayal in the manga and the anime, I've to favor the anime one because of the simple fact that I really haven't seen very much of him in the manga yet.

    But also because of the majority of all the Envy/Ed fics out there, has/are being portrayed with Envy from the anime, rather than the manga! And also because I love him a little bit more as the raving psychopath that he is in the anime or at least, he's a lot more scary (which I believe) in that one. But also beacause of the fact that he hates his father (Hohenheim) so much, which concludes him to hate Ed and Al as well, (which also means that they're his half-brothers) (especially Ed, I believe)! And Ed hates him back with a passion, that helps of course, hehe.

    Okay, so back to the review; I've already mentioned that I really enjoyed what I've read so far and I'd love to read more, as I'm sure others'd love as well! Hint, hint, hehe!

    Anyhow, I think the plot was very good and the portrayal of the charcters were great as well, maybe they were be a little OOC but not much, so never mind that, eh! I really loved the interaction between Envy/Ed, coz that was awesome and the smut, let me say; "Whoa, that was excellent and very hot, hell, it was probably one of the best I've read recently, and that should say something, eh", in other words, well done!

    A few things which kinda bugged me about the fic; the fact that you kinda didn't use any commas in your sentences, (mostly in the latter chapters) it made the whole reading experience a little annoying, actually.

    Another thing was that there were some weird typos in the text at times and some words were also typed two times in a row.

    And finally the fact that you refer to Envy as he's a grown up man, well sometimes and I kinda feel that it's a bit wrong, coz Envy's favorite form is rather youthful, he's tops one or two years older than Ed, (in looks, of course) so that would also make him a teenanger, eh!

    So maybe you ought to go and re-edit the fic and fix the minor mistakes and typos, just a tip!

    All in all I really liked this fic and I really think if you've the time and the will; you should definitely continue and write more, hopefully soon coz I want to read more and find out what going to happen next!

    So please write more!





    Report Review

  • From ANON - Kai on February 07, 2006
    -clear's throat- Alright, I have a couple things to say. YOu have the manga and Anime mixed up. In the manga, Envy is not human what so ever. He never was. The whole human transmutation to humonculi is only in the anime. Not manga. Envy is acutally a very large eight legged lizered like monster with a lot of people that scream and um... used to be human at one point but was... hell I cant describe it!!!!!! But the bottom line is that Envy wasn't human ever in the manga
    Report Review

  • From ANON - mandy on June 11, 2005
    it was yummy ^_^ normaly i dont like lemons, too sour ,but this was really tasty ^_~ n e way hope you write more its awesome! i want lemons,mangos,tomatoes(wait! that's not a fruit! O_o) and yes goddamit i want a melon!
    Furher: ^_^ here ya go (hands me a melon) happy b-day!
    Me: O_O' umm......thanks.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - MonkeyGurL on May 08, 2005
    Please continue writing this fic, I just love ed+envy. Not that many good ed+envy fics out there, and this one is really good!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - zelliyn on April 23, 2005
    WRITE MORE!!!!!!! My favorite pairing. (looks around making sure no one is looking,then cries,"I WANT MORE OF THIS PAIRING,But,I just wanna read the ened pairing.)Basically I'll read ANY and ALL OF THE ENED PAIRING.MY odd way of saying continue,please.

    Report Review

  • From ANON - TenshiKaitou on April 18, 2005
    Yay for smut. Didn't mind that it was long since the part was written so well that it is pretty addictive. I swear I was near to hyperventilating while reading it. Anyway, i hope you're still up on updating this fic.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Kira on April 14, 2005
    You have you write more! More! More! More! It's really good and so you have to continue! I think it's really cute and good and write more soon!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Lady_Mashala on April 06, 2005
    i've noly started to read it but what I have is good so far.... but I have to ask... Do you know that there half brothers... You find out in the last or next to last episode... ^_^ Bring on the insest! Teehehehe.... I'm so bad. LONG LIVE YAOI!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Nobody important on March 26, 2005
    PLEASE UPDATE!!! I really like this story. Your characters are not out of character at all. I have only seen the anime, so i don't know what Envy is like in the magna. I haven't seen him much yet in the anime. He seems to be a bit insane, likes to toy with people's heads, and just have fun. Ed still seems exactly like the short tempered teen who will do anything for his brother. So, yeah. Your characters aren not OOC at all. And please update soon. It's not fair to leave us all hanging here in the middle of a great fic.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Keylah on February 09, 2005
    Come on, update please? I know you're alive...I checked your LJ ^_^; Are you still working on this? You haven't updated for...-counts fingers- 1/2 a year!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Aori on February 08, 2005
    O.O Holy Fugin Moly!!!! That was good! You should really stop saying that Ed and Envy are OOC cause they really aren't. Envy is acting like.... Envy (if the manga). And Ed is really doing normal Edish like things. Ah, the joys of having Envy toy with Ed the way he does. I LOVE this fanfiction. Update soon please! *puppy dog eyes*
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Artemis on January 27, 2005
    This story is cool!! I like it alot, you deserve a prize or somthing ^^!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Cringe on December 22, 2004
    When do you intend to update? It's been almost 6 months. I think this is a really good EnvyxEd fic. ...You don't find this pairing very often...Meh...it's too bad really. I think it's a good pairing...Especially when written this way.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - foreverhidden on December 22, 2004
    aww... this fic was soooo cute!!! you should update asap!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Skyler Daemon on November 06, 2004
    This is really good. I've only read up to volume seven of the scanlations and Your Envy is just like the Envy from the manga. I really like EnEd pairing and I hope to see more of this story soon.
    Report Review

T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!