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Reviews for Young Man's Heart

By : Rogue

From ANON - bunnicle on February 16, 2007
oh, i love this story! You know, The females are starting to annoy me! Expecially Vadel! That woman needs to be smacked upside the head. Gohan just needs to get a backbonde and tell her to get lost. She really isn't much of a positive aspect in his life right now... or ever, really.
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From Robyn on January 27, 2007
Again, a very great chapter! Stupid Bulma and Chichi just barging in! I do feel bad for Lian, being left at Gohan's appartment like that...I do have to wonder how the two women would have reacted had it been Kris on the floor instead. *smirks* I like Kris, and how he makes Gohan feel.

Now to wonder if Gohan will actually go to that appointment Bulma set up, and if so...how it will go.
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From Guice on January 15, 2007
I've been a long time fan of this story and have never reviewed. I was pretty happt when you started to update again. Anyways, your writing techniques are amazing. You have a true gift for describing things. How Gohan acts, his feelings toward other people, how people react to him... they just seem so real. I loved this chapter in particular... well probly because it had hints of lemon in it, yeah that preobly did it. I like how you made Kris have scars as well, I think thats what truly made the chapter for me. I think it helped Gohan come out of his shell just a little bit and it made all the difference. ok, I'm babbling now. Good job and keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Macha on January 14, 2007
YEAH! :) I loved this chapter. You were right, you kept it very light. Glad to know you are working out the more difficult parts of this story. I can' wait to see what you have in mind next!
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From ANON - Asha on January 14, 2007
you know, I usually really hate these kinds of stories, and avoid them like the plague, BUT! I really really like this one, and I spend way too much time thinking to myself about how much I want the next chapter. Just thought I'd let you know that you have at least slightly corrupted me, and made me stray from my normal story preferences. congratulations. ^-^

PS - MORE!
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From ANON - Macha on December 26, 2006
YAY! For the update. I am glad t hear you plan on continuing this story, even if the chapters will be random in coming.

Hmmmm...well, Gohan has seemed to have found himself a new friend...and I don't mean Lian. Those pills...it makes me uneasy that they will stay in a sayian's system for so long.

Lian on the other hand, she seems to be doing Gohan some good; at least she knows enough not to let him be alone long.

Huh...I do wonder how the visit with Kris and Tom will go.

I really like this story, and how you are totally exploring all of Gohan's emotions and reactions in it. Dark, but totally believable.
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From ANON - Kikyou-sama18 on October 08, 2006
Oh hell...another death...another source of angst Gohan has to deal with...
I loved this chapter Rogue!! Gonna e-mail and write you about it more proufondly if you don't mind...*g*

Keep up the good work!! *wink*
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From ANON - Macha on October 01, 2006
Oh my. You are doing a wonderful job writing this story. Gohan certain has strayed away from the path his friends and family had set out for him.

Hmmm, I wonder if Vegeta will ever get involved with this...there seems to be quite a few cross over points he may have had some similar experinces with.

YAY ROUGE! You're back!!!!
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From ANON - Macha on September 09, 2006
Well, now that I have reaquainted myself with this story, I hope the fact it has resurfaced to the front page means you are thinking about starting in with some new chapters!!!!!

I hope to see an update soon. :)
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From ANON - Kikyou-sama18 on August 18, 2006
Oh man....Gohan's angst is so deep...God...You do a wonderful job with
his character! Can't wait til you write another chapter!!! ^-^

Yeah and one more thing about Videl...I just love the way your Gohan shuts her out of his life!!!
She's an annoying bitch that's for sure... ( Not a Videl fan...*giggles* )
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From ANON - Boris.k on July 25, 2005
Wow. Gohan is in some deep stuff.I love how you make Gohan's life so..... so........ sad and real and just.... I dont know.I'm speechless. But this is some really awesome stuff. I really look forward to more.
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From ANON - Camaro on April 22, 2005
Uhhh... that was strange. It sent my review before I even wrote it! hahaha.. funny. Anyways, I wanted to say that I adore this so far. Very unique. See, I took a long time before reading it because I was afraid by your summary that this was just one big Gohan bash. And I don't mind Gohan so much so I totally avoided it. But wow, really, this is awesome.

I wanted to commend you for putting yourself so perfectly into Gohan's shoes, examining his psyche SO well that he essentially seemed human. Yet, I loved some of your lines because they were so appropriate.

He just felt the need to be alone, be alone with his thoughts�just alone. He was so alone inside, he might as well indulge in it outside as well.

I just thought that that sentence in particular was very powerful. I've noticed that your style of writing is absolutely exquisite, with certain sentences just SCREAMING out to the reader, really being strong enough to grab out attention. Yes, I think that's the perfect way to say it. Your style is attention grabbing.

No matter how much he deluded himself. He was neither Saiyan nor Human. He was something else. Not enough of either to ever be happy in this world.

I've heard writers use the term "neither Saiyan or Human" before but I think you just did an excellent job of bringing out a better point. The last sentence when he said that he was not enough of both to be happy in this world. I just thought that was an AMAZING point. As much as his emotions are characteristic of humans (loneliness, torn between two things, inadequacy) it's also making us aware that as much as we think we can sympathize and identify with what he's feeling, we can't.

And no one else seemed to have inherited this problem. That in itself helped to darken his purgatory as well.

I thought the wording in this sentence was phenomenal. "Purgatory" is especially (maybe just for me) a difficult word to associate with many thing. It's kind of just a difficult word to work into any story but wow, it fit in SO well in this, really one of the best metaphors I've ever read. It's like he's torn between two lifestyles, as you brought out so well. Neither in Heaven, nor in hell, just a stalemate, dangling in between.

And the last scene of this first chapter was awesome. How we know his super powers are enough that if he wanted to dodge, he probably could. But the hesitation he uses keeps the reader on edge, (and I'm an annoying, loud person.. the type that screams out random obscenities at stupid people in movies) and I was at the point where I almost shouted out "God DAMN IT! DODGE!" It doesn't take much to get a reaction out of me but this is just pushing it! hahaha.. I was wringing my hands together!

How powerful this is.. man you should be so proud. And here I am feeling like a putz for having prolonged the reading of this over a stupid summary. This is great so far, I'll keep reading.

Camaro

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From ANON - Macha on April 20, 2005
Once again a lovely chapter. Not that I think it's good to run away from you problems by using substances, but in reality, sometimes it's just seems so.... GOOD. It's an easy way out when you don't really want to take the time to deal with them, or don't know what is really wrong in the first place.

Although Gohan knows what is wrong. I just wish he had someone to talk to about it. He really needs that, but I can see where old friends and family wouldn't understand, and his new friends are just that.... too new.

Thank you for updating, I can't wait to see the next chapter.
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From ANON - Macha on March 30, 2005
As Gohan's life just gets worse and worse, this story gets better and better.

I was slightly surprised at Vegeta's intervention. Not because the 'ex-prince' stopped to help, but more so about the chemical statement. I am certain that sayian has seen more than his fair share in a life time.

I am still very interested in this story. It was a pleasant surprise to see that you had updated. I hope updates become more regular in the future.
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From ANON - Hecate18 on December 20, 2004
I'm really liking this, its so 'real'. You've done a great job developing Gohan's character.
I've never read a fic quite like this, looking forward to the next chap! ^_^

~Hecate18~
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