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Reviews for Deep Circle

By : chayron
  • From ANON - Webteter01 on August 21, 2005
    Chichi and Kakarott....LOL

    Wonderful chapter.
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  • From ANON - chibi_vegeta on August 21, 2005


    *snerrrrrrrk*...I must say, the humor here has just the right touch...not too goofy and not too sappy...nice balance...

    your paragraph breaks have improved immensely...yes, it will feel excessive at first, but it will feel more natural the more you practice...there are still a few strange word usages that give away your language skills...other than those one would think you are a native speaker...I'm terrible at languages and find myself envious at your breadth of tongue...your plot is tying together nicely even if some of it is convenient, but hell you can't go on and on about every aspect, that would just become tedious...so kudos for sticking with the elements that were most important to your plotline...I think I still hate Chi-chi, though...*snerk*

    I'm not sure if you intended this to be funny; "So, Radditz finally got him in the end." ...but...I can't help but want to say 'Well DUH!...how does he think Raaaven _got_ pregnant??'....*snickers*...it was a subtle and wonderful pun...and even if it was accidental it was great simply because sometimes stuff like that writes itself and that's one of the best moments one can have as a writer...*grins*

    I am _really_ looking forward to the last few chapters of this...


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  • From ANON - kit-kit on August 21, 2005
    wow that chapter was funny with goku being a stinky bastard
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  • From ANON - Macha on August 21, 2005
    I am very sorry if I gave you the impression that I didn't like the last chapter. I thought it was great. You have a plot going, and sometimes, with plot, comes drama. *nods*

    On with this chapters review. Again, I loved chapter. Actually, I think it is my favorite so far. (Of course, the next one will be my new favorite when it comes out. hehe)

    Goku speaking up when he did to Chichi was priceless. I sort of feel sorry for Kakarot, but I am glad it is an older version of Goku, with a bit more knowledge of what he is getting himself into. lol

    I am very happy Vegeta was able to share the part of his past with Goku that he had been holding back. That had to have been a terrible burdon, and now, although it is not gone, it is certainly less of an obstical.

    MWuahahahahahhahahaha, Earth, here they come!
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  • From ANON - Raphaela on August 21, 2005
    Loved this chapter! I can't help wondering though, what will happen if the two vegetas meet each other? And goku seems to have the same feelings for both of them... and i keep thinking about tose 'daydreams' goku used to have... i smell a plot twist coming on... hahaha! I know this sounds weird but i keep thinking that somehow the two vegetas will merge, or that maybe this is some kind of dream that goku is having... but i honestly dont think its a dream... okay, enough of my babbling, i cant wait for the next update!
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  • From ANON - Raphaeala Romero on August 21, 2005
    Hi! I finally finished that porject like an hour ago and i read this chapter... it was really good... but why did it have to stop?! *sniffles* Hehe, I can't wait till the next chapter!
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  • From ANON - NessSachiel on August 19, 2005
    and action begin :P
    please, add next chapter soon, ok? I am wery curious about earth people, will there will by Sons and Trunks? or not? and second Vegeta? my o my! update soon, ok? ^^ PLEASE! Your other stoies too! I love your stories!
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  • From Kugatsu on August 18, 2005
    Ahhh misunderstandings and love. They happen so often between these two but I rely on you to make it all better!

    Bulma! Earth leader! Excellent choice!
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  • From ANON - E.T. on August 18, 2005
    O.o Vegeta better hurry up and do something or Goku's gonna go mental... O_o;

    Oh this is good - are you very fluent in Russian? Coz if you are I'll need your help with a story I'm writing.
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  • From ANON - Macha on August 17, 2005
    Well, yes, I did leave the review for your story. Thank you for clarifying!

    Now, on with the review... or at least my reactions.

    The first part of this chapter, I was like O.O Oh NO... Drama. Yes, there was drama, but thank Kami for Raditz and Kamala. I hope their words will help Goku and Vegeta sort things out.


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  • From ANON - kit-kit on August 17, 2005
    nice chapter
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  • From ANON - chibi_vegeta on August 17, 2005


    excellent chapter...the plot seems to be tying together nicely and I'm looking forward to seeing what happens with Bulma and the earthers...

    the huge paragraph with Radditz speaking should be chopped up some, I know paragraph breaks are hard, I have a hard time with them sometimes too, especially with dialogue...try breaking this particular paragraph up whenever the specific thing Radditz is speaking of changes...

    couple of typos/misspellings...nothing major..

    good job!


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  • From ANON - Webtester01 on August 17, 2005
    I think things will work out between them.

    I can just see the look on Vegeta's face (the one from Goku's Dimension) when he see's Goku with his tail and mated to another Vegeta from another dimension. LOL

    I bet Bulma will be surprised when she sees a saiyan that recognizes her.
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  • From ANON - JJ on August 12, 2005
    YOU HAVE GOT TO FINISH THIS!
    i loved the story. the mini vegeta and the little furry snakes are so cute and lift the mood of the story perfectly! also very nice descriptions of vegeta's 'perfect compact body', they make for plesant visuals! *drools* I love the conersations and teasing between goku and vegeta, its so funny even if this fic isnt a comedy.
    One thing. everyone is too damn feminine, all the crying and misunderstandings, the mood swings etc. Especially Kamala, im so convinced that hes a girl i have to remind myself ten times in one chapter that hes a dude. I even had to correct that last sentence twice! Anyway i hate her cos shes so close to Vegeta. to close...
    Other than that its all fabbity, funny, moving, and heartwarming, so dont make me repeat that first sentence!
    Best wishes JJ

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  • From ANON - ET on August 12, 2005
    O.o What on earth happened there? My review went odd on me... *blinks*
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