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Reviews for Stargazer

By : Suisheu
  • From ANON - Pixelgoddess on July 04, 2005
    Hmmmm.... Are the voices an inside influence or an outside one? Or a little of both. Interesting how their speech is more formal in comparison to normal dialog - is that deliberate? Wondering why the internal battle made Vegeta pass out and what the little glow was - and why he can't remember now. Poor Goku - so bewildered by his prince's strange behavior and trying to be so careful and not piss him off.

    I never totally destroy stuff I have written - I have files of false starts. You should keep yours, even if you don't post them. Sometimes it is just waiting for a rewrite, or else there is a gem of a paragraph in there.
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  • From ANON - Pixelgoddess on July 04, 2005
    Another chapter already! Your descriptions are just amazing - I can't get over how good they are. Is this REALLY your first fanfic? I find that hard to believe. It must have been living in your head for quite awhile then, to spring out like this. Poor confused Vegeta - he always finds it so hard to believe Goku means what he says. He is so used to being used and betrayed by others he thinks that is all everyone will do. I am looking forward to more of this - very angsty, very emotional. Well done.
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  • From ANON - The Chichi Slaughter House on July 04, 2005
    I feel that this is really great so far. I love the description, the way you give Vegeta a lot of inner thought, the way Goku's eyes speak for him... It's wonderful. For a beginner, this is really really good, which means one of two things: A) you've read a helluva lot of fics or B) you have really thought about the emotions you have wanted to put into this and the plot. I personally think that it's B.

    In your first A/N, you say you will never be able to compose fanfics with the same intensity, beauty, or all around awesomeness that many of the people on aff do, but that you promise to try your best, and I think that you are wrong. Your best is better than a lot of other people's, especially for a first time. To be blunt: I think you put yourself down too much, or that you are too modest, which is refreshing, because some people think they are the best.

    I would be happy to read and review the rest of this fic, and any others you do. You have talent.

    Keep up the good work,

    The Chichi Slaughter House
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  • From Kugatsu on July 04, 2005
    I can't believe you cut me off just then! Youupdate faster than me! So short and so sweet! I definately belive in you!
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  • From Kugatsu on July 04, 2005
    very coiled and tense foreshadowy with just a hint of the love between them....


    excellent excellent! This is like a fine recipe! I hope the meal you make is good!
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  • From ANON - Pixelgoddess on July 04, 2005
    Beautiful description. Very nice how you made Vegeta seem to be part of the night - and comfortable with it. Can't wait to see why Goku was so desperate to pursue him to the point of tripping in what should be his own environment. It seems like they are lovers but not friends... Looking forward to the next chapter - hope to learn more about what is wrong with the pair.
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