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Reviews for A Little Light of Love

By : squallstorm

From Azumichan on April 06, 2008
Another chapter, yay! Anyway you should be pleased with this chapter, I just hope that you continue soon. You scared the hell out of me when it looked like Ed had died, how could you kill Mustang though? That was mean, I always liked him just because he could always get a rise out of Ed. Oh well, at least Roy Taylor and Ed can work on getting together, geeze kiss the golden boy already! I love this story and can't wait for the next chapter :)
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From ANON - Baroqueangel on April 01, 2008
Right, I'll try again, I wrote this really long kinda insane review *Sleep deprivation from not being able to stop reading your story* but as I tried posting it, AFF chose that moment to go into its apparently daily updating so it didn't quite make it up. So I'll condense what I said cos I can't quite remember. Love this story, just spent many hours reading all 23 chapters, you must update soon please. Your chapters are really long and I needed to take breaks so my backside didn't fall asleep but it was still good. I bow to your obvious talent and to Zakai for being your Beta. I love how you killed off Mustang, so undignified to get hit by a car and die on the way to the hospital but he deserved it for everything he did to Ed. I couldn't believe that you killed off Izzy, I was like nooo, and then you shot Al and I was like WHAT??? *Did I mention the sleep deprivation?* I was so glad that the seniore got what was coming to him and I was cheering Roy on.
You handled all the angst so well, you could feel (or at least I could) some of their pain. But I loved the softer moments too, between Ed, Al and Izzy. It was so sweet, I was in fits when she mashed Al's crotch and didn't understand what she had done, so like a child.
Ok, sleep's now tugging at me and I can't remember what else I wanted to say so, congrates on the brilliant story, please post the next chapter soon.
Baroqueangel
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From Afrieal on March 31, 2008
We understand real life... real life sux Af got mono and can't write as much as she wants I slipped in the snow and Missed seeing ZaKai as Millie at Sakura on sunday and to top it off our blood sib's computer burnt out BOTH of our flash drives with EVERYTHING we had written. Thank the gods for hand written back ups. You have a talent that transcends the occasional "flat" chapter (this wasn't tho) good luck with real life.

Rysh and Affie
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on March 31, 2008
You need encouragement you say? Here. *hands over an enormous big box of it* The rest of it will come FedEx. I hope you've got a spare room or three to hold it all! :D

*stares dumbfounded, hand clutching chest* Oh my God. I can't believe it. It's just...oh my God! Mustang! *voice trembles, eyes well with tears* I...I just...I can't believe he's gone! ROY!! *breaks down into wailing sobs* Run down by a car, drowned in his own blood. *shakes head sadly* How ignoble. The mighty Mustang brought down by such an ordinary thing. So hard to believe. wow. SO did not see that one coming! :) It really hurts to know that my hero, my superman, my adonis on a pedestal is only human after all. ;_; Roy standing in a beautiful meadow just waiting to cross over. At least I have this one last pristine image of him. I'd like to think that Mustang was there to keep Ed from crossing over, to goad him into wanting to live and go back. I don't know. It's like this was Mustang's last gift to Ed before he left for good. (Damn that hurts to say!!) I do believe that Mustang really did care about Ed and would do just about anything for him. He just didn't love Ed the way Ed loved him. (Damn that hurts to say even more! T_T)

*sigh* Roy Taylor, what am I going to do with you? *bangs head on desk in frustration* Answering by not answering is not an answer you turkey! RRGH! :) I love him but I so wanna knock him upside the head right now! :D I was kinda hoping that that crack in the head he got from the door would help him make a decision, make him choose, but I guess not. You have to follow where your heart leads you, Roy. No one should live a lonely life. It will be hard on you both, probably more than I can even begin to imagine; but if you love each other, it will be worth it! :) (Look at me handing out trite cheesy advice! LOL!) Ok, confession time. When I read Roy's fears of what could happen to him and/or Ed if they were found out, I was suddenly reminded of a scene from Brokeback Mountain, well, two scenes actually.

SPOILER ALERT! SKIP THIS PART IF YOU DON'T WANT ME TO RUIN THE MOVIE FOR YOU! :)

The first scene was when Ennis, played by Heath Ledger, was a child and his father took him to see what had happened to (or what I believe the father and his cronies had done to) some poor guy who was suspected of being gay. Why in God's name would a man subject a child to this?! scared straight (literally) my ass! ignorant son of a bitch. The things they did to him were unspeakable and I cringed to imagine how horrific his death must have been. The second scene was when Ennis found out Jack, Jake Gyllenhaal's character, was dead and, based upon his memories of the first scene, Ennis imagined that Jack had been murdered in spite of that bitch wife of Jack's saying it was a tire iron accident. pish. The bitch was so lying! grr!

END SPOILER

These two scenes really do make me fear for Roy and Ed. Roy wants to take Ed to South Dakota but, given that Brokeback Mountain took place out west and people from very rural areas tend to not be very open to things considered outside the norm and given the time frame we're in (mid 1920s right?), that might not be such a good idea. *sigh* Ok, Ok, I'm sorry. I'm getting way too in to this (again) but I just did some googling and society was awful to gays and lesbians back then! Not that things are a walk in the park nowadays but that's beside the point. My point is that Roy is definitely justified for feeling this way and wanting to approach this slowly and carefully. I feel for him, for them, and wish them well! :)

You have no idea how happy I am that the Seniore is finally dead! AND by Roy's flames too!! WOOHOO!! YESSSSS! :D
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
P.S. Noa can't read Al's thoughts anymore? O_o? weird.
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From MustangsHavoc on March 30, 2008
*Dumps buckets of encouragment on your head*

I love this fic so much! Roy losing control and being all surrounded by sparks and fire was a dream come true!

AND YOU FINALLY TOASTED THE SENIORE! WOHO!

That made me so happy! I wanted Roy to burn him so bad! and when he did it was so good...

BUT HOW COULD YOU KILL MUSTANG LIKE THAT? HIT BY A CAR!? WTF?!? Seriously, that crushed me, that whole dream/death sequence was gut wrenching! Poor General, and poor Ed, I would think it would hurt him to see the General like that!

As allways, this was worth the wait.
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From alleycat88 on March 30, 2008
Ok this is me encouraging you to write more because I have DEARLY missed this story!
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From minaaaaaaaa on March 30, 2008
that mutang moment was sad and creepy all at the same time hmmmm.... weird..

fun note seniore is goooonnneeee wooooooooooooooo fina fricking ly!! mwahahaha

now, to find out what roy plans to do with ed, i thiought it was sweet when ed confessed too bad the timing was a little off :S oh well, roy will come around :)
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From Azumichan on March 04, 2008
Okay, a review for the last chapter posted, please let Ed get out of the situation. And have someone castrate, burn, and torture the seniore, please. I really ditest that guys beyond words. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
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From Azumichan on March 04, 2008
I absolutely love this change in Al in this story, I always felt that he really was a lot more like Ed than other's realized. But when Ed was around him he was able to be the level headed, cool, and peaceful one because Ed acted on impulse for him. Chapter 14 review, I loved how Al hugged him at the end, it was so Al. Thanks for such a wonderful story.
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From ANON - Azumi-chan on March 04, 2008
This story still continues to captivate me and it flows very fluently. It has orginality and a very strong plot line. I love it!
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From Azumichan on March 03, 2008
This story is very orginal and flows very nicely. Isabella is so adorable and I am glad Al kicked Macy's ass, he deserved it damn pedophile messing with a five year old little girl. This story is very good and it has a lot or realistic aspects to it. Thanks for submitting it.
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From HikageHikari on February 21, 2008
NOOOOOOOOOOO! You....you are a horrible person! *POUT* Why must you leave me dangling like a helpless fishy. A sad helplless fishy. Why can't you just let Roy and Ed be happy lovvies. Oh well... Please hurry and update.
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From LadyCera on February 13, 2008
Noooo!!!! Ed!! Get up, get up, get up, get up!

OK, seriously. I love your story. I have never been an EdxRoy fan, always a hardcore EdxWin fan, but honey you've made a believer out of me! :D Your writing style is excellent. Its simple but not lacking. Although I did notice a few things along the way, its great to see your going back and rewriting/editing.

Please keep writing!!! I must now what happens!! I love the mini AlxNoa subplot you have going. Skweee!! And personally I don't think you could have made a better bad guy. He's soo creepy, and sick, and perverse, but at the same time believable. In my mind he�s a slimy, incapable, snivelling little worm, but I can�t help but be worried every time he�s in the same room as Ed. I LOVE to HATE him!!! *evil grin* Everytime he gets hit in the face(or anywhere else) I give a little WOOT WOOT!!

I also love your version of Roy. He is just like Roy Mustang in a lot of ways, but different in so many others. I think that is what makes me like this pairing so much. And I love his background, excellent job on that one� Him and Ed, they are just so sweet *bounces in chair* � ok, now I am rambling. If I don�t shut up now I never will. Thank you, thank you, thank you, thank you, Please write!! *bribes you with cookies and pocky*

LadyCera
P.S.
I have added a link to this story to one of my you tube videos (http://youtube.com/watch?v=y6OtfnLXEfA) hopefully it will help this story get the attention it deserves
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From minaaaaaaaa on February 03, 2008
why? why must you hurt my soul?! roy gets chloroformed??!! why cant the two of them have a chill moment together? there's always something happening getting in the way of their relationship progressing aahhh!! frustrating. buuuuttt i assume thats what ur going for, so good job :) And at least we got that kiss. yay.
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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on January 24, 2008
NOOOO! You can't leave me hanging here like this!! GAH! I hate cliffhangers!! :) When I got to the end of the chapter, I was like, "NO! There has to be more!" :) The fight scene was so intense! I was scared to death there for a minute that Ed would martyr himself for everybody else - AGAIN! Whew! Are you trying to give me a heart attack or something! :D Man, I can't wait for the next chapter!!! I'm so excited!! :D Roy and Ed are so in love and that kiss was HOT! Somebody, some way, somehow has to save the day and rescue Ed - assuming he doesn't save himself! :) Ed! Use the blood from the wound the scalpel made on your thigh and alchemically fry this sucka!! w00t!! :D A love like Roy's and Ed's can't end like this! GAH! Need more story and soon! XD
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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