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Reviews for Descent

By : ZaKai

From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on May 01, 2007
SQWEEEEE!!!!!!! That note was the sweetest thing ever!!! I just melted! It made me cry it was so beautiful!! :) Using automail bolts to make the ring was just perfect! How romantic!!! :D I think I wanna marry Al now! LOL!! I guess you had to add Kimblee in here to offset the fluff. feh. sorry bastard. grr!! He almost completely ruined the happy moment! jerk. At least it all worked out in the end! :) I wonder how Ed will react to the news of Al's impending nuptials!! OMG!! Al will want him for best man for sure! EEEP!! Ed better find a way to get over the past and make peace with Al before it's too late! oooo! I can't wait to see how this is gonna work itself out!!!
Update soon!!!
Koneko =^.^=
P.S. What?!? no Ed? no Roy? *cries* It's a good thing this chapter was one of your best yet otherwise I might not forgive you for no RoyEd this time around! LOL! L8R! :)
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From gatherer818 on May 01, 2007
*looks around confused* reply? ~I~ got a reply and I ~DIDN'T EVEN SEE IT~?!?!?!

*can't be happy for Al and Winry, too busy trying to find an over-opinionated reply from an excellent author*

*kicks Kimblee square in the ass for bothering Alphonse-kun when he had enough on his mind already*
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From MustangsHavoc on April 30, 2007
*Aka Raditz* Aw a sweet chapter! But please, PLEASE! Don't let Kimblee rape Al! I don't think my eyes could handle reading that! For once I just want Al to really beat the shit out of someone( like say Kimblee and or Archer) in an Ed like rage. He is an Elric after all, that crazy, windmilling, rage has got to be in there some where!
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From ANON - stupefiedNarutard on April 30, 2007
That had to be the sweetest thing I've ever seen, besides the Kimblee part. BWAHAHAH, there was a little worry there in my heart for a second. I thought that Alphonse had proposed and then left to find Ed. And then I was like, "Well shit on a stick, he proposed!!" Then I started crying. Literally.

I loved the whole worry on both sides! I was laughing my ass off at the end when I realized what you were doing to them, you sick, SICK author!! (jk) Hehe, I actually quite enjoyed this, but I wonder... When will Ed ever find his happiness? I mean, he got Al back, but Al was in love with Winry and wanted to stay with her so he beat the shit outta Al and left, broken hearted and unloved. Went with Roy, was good for awhile, but guilty. Started smoking cancer sticks, got in a fight with Roy and is now equally guilty because he freakin' loves Roy and wants to protect him but he can't.

I hope something bad happens to Ed! SO THEN MUSTANG WOULD REALIZE HE COULD GET HURT NO MATTER WHAT HAPPENS THE IDIOT!! Sorry, the compassion I have for this story is too much.

The whole poem was beautiful...and the idea to use automail bolts b/c that's what Winry loves. I was seriously like, "I wish Alphonse loved meeee!"

Although I was wanting some RoyEd interaction or at least thoughts about each other, I ended up being completely satisfied! I think I must really like AlWin now. thank you!

Please update when you can, you GENIUS!~

lovelovelove,
stupefiedNarutard
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From ANON - Moo-Moo on April 30, 2007
AWEE! That was so cute
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From ANON - Moo-Moo on April 22, 2007
Oooh, I love this story! So much drama, and angst, and sometimes fluff!
I would love to be put on the email-update list, please?
P.S. -- Can't wait to see what'll happen to Ed when Izumi meets up with him :D
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From gatherer818 on April 18, 2007
I don't often type out reviews for stories that aren't finished, and you've now made me do it twice >_< bad bad bad! I just felt so much like leaving a note even though I'm so asleep I can't come up with anything good to say...

I'd ask you to send me email updates, but I check AFF.net so often just for a few really good stories (this one gets read first or second, depending on how close to the top of the list it is, I'm also addicted to nomdeplume's Worlds Collide... then the lesser ones get their turn =P), I don't need them to be up to date. I usually check AFF and email at about the same time... sometimes AFF first, if I'm waiting after a really mean cliffhanger >_
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From ANON - stupefiedNarutard on April 17, 2007
Ahh, the sweet, yet short, but quickly updated chapters of this story. MUWAHAHHAHAH! Finally! The gorgeous Roy Mustang who has seemed a bit retarded in the last few chapters thinks sensibly... then he fails to be a man AGAIN! Grr, I wanna kill him for his stupidity and hug him for his wonderful attempts to keep his friends and ... ahem... subordinates...*coughEdcough* safe.

And holy shit I really, really wanna know how Ed got Al's body back... ooh, Edwaaarrrrrd, what did you do, you silly goose? XD

And I even wonder wtf Al is doing or is trying to do...

And that dude... poor Russell, having to endure such a hardship as traveling with some annoying dude that wants to impersonate you. Or something.

I say and too much, hehe, anyways... CinCin gets on my nerves for some odd reason, maybe because Den was there first and I'm like... aww...Den you're the raisin and CinCin's the grape! Poor thing.

HWAHAHAH, I can't wait until Roy figures out it REALLY was partly his fault. And if Roy knows Ed is capable of doing the things he did and does... wtf is he trying to hide? It's not as if Ed isn't in the same amount of danger he would be in if he knew the things Roy did. It's all bulldonkey...

You clever, evilll author.

Thank you.

lovelovelovelovelove,
stupefiedNarutard
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From BishounenKrazed on April 17, 2007
oh! realization! of course there's denial as well, but it'll get harder to deny in the future. and now i seriously think al's thinking of marrying, maybe, winry, and archer saying that he doesn't see it makes sense now too, if that's what's going to happen. and i'm still in the dark about what ed did... kill someone? have sex with someone/homunculous? okay, i'll be patient. and i won't die. but i hope the next chapter comes soon!! i love this story!
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From ANON - Raditz on April 16, 2007
oh! Just a teasrer chapter! You are so cruel! Once again you rock! I have suspicions about what Al is planing and of how Ed got Al's body back. I can't wait to find out! Also, I love the fact that Ed still has automail limbs, he just wouldn't seem like Ed with out them!
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on April 16, 2007
You can add me to the update email list! :D I'm really glad that Fuery is getting better but, now that he is awake, there is the really big problem that he might unintentially say something that could get Roy in a lot of trouble. Roy is right to worry! Fuery might say something in his sleep or to a nurse that could get back to the wrong people and the consequences could be disastrous! While I don't want Roy to get hurt or killed because of his investigations, I certainly have no qualms about slapping some sense into him for his denial about his drinking and for what he did to Ed! :) If it took me slapping Roy until I broke my hand to make him admit he has a problem then I'd gladly do it. Although it would be kinda hard to type with my hand in a cast it'd still be worth it! LOL!! For the sake of my hand I hope he's close to a breakthrough on his own! XD

You're a rotten little tease, you know that right? For 29 chapters you've hinted and danced around how Ed got Al's body back and you STILL haven't told me how! GAH! It's killing me not knowing!! :D I'm hoping that once he's staring Izumi in the eye he'll have no choice but to 'fess up and then I'll know what he did. right? And, on top of wondering what Ed did, I still have no idea what Al's secret little project is! meanie! :P How much more are you gonna torture me before you finally tell me? *cries* Oh, and I don't really know why, but it was really sad when you said that Ed didn't wear his red coat anymore. That kinda broke my heart. That red coat is so much a part of him that it's sad to see it go. *cries again*
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From ANON - Raditz on April 16, 2007
This story is amazing! I just love how in character you have keeped everybody! and the sex scences are so HOT! I can barley write let alone a sex scence! I cannot wait for more the plot is so riviting. A good plot and hot sex? You rock! Big time!

-Raditz
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From AmethystEyedKoneko on April 10, 2007
GAH!! Cliffhangers everywhere!! @_@ Has Fuery taken a turn for the worse? *wibble* Who was it Ed saw outside that shop? Sig? Armstrong maybe? Will Roy and Ed ever work things out? Ed is so close to going back to Roy! yay!! What in the world is Al working so diligently on? Curiosity is driving this kitty crazy! :D Are Ed and Al ever gonna work out their differences? Al will be quite surprised to find out Ed's been with Roy (in more ways than one! *dies laughing at her own bad joke* :D) this whole time! Why is Envy so intensely interested in Russell? I'm afraid that Envy will kill Russell. That comment about that if Envy kept questioning him like he was then he would know enough about him to actually be him is very suspicious! Russell was wrong to do what he did to dear little Fletcher but he doesn't deserve to be killed by Envy! *cries* So many questions! :) Need answers now! LOL! Why is it so damn funny when Ed has a meltdown every time someone mentions his height and/or questions his age? No matter how many times Ed blows up over it, I never get tired of it!! :) Bean sprout! funny!! :D "Yes, he�s legal...yes, that�s right...Yes, he really is a State Alchemist." LOL!! LOVE IT!!!
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From ANON - stupefied-Narutard on April 09, 2007
Ommmgggg...

Ed is so funny, i love when people call him short... never gets old for me. Anyways, another GREAT chapter... I swear I worship this story. Mmmhmm, *eats at chapter corner* Desceeennnnntttt (my anti-drug)... No seriously. I suppose I'll have to wait a bit longer to see some RoyEd action... but it's all for the cause. I really hate Winry a lot... but mayb that's because... well... I dunno, I just always do. You make her a LITTLE bit more tolerable, but there's only so much you can do without making her OOC.

oooh, Russeelllll, you better get outta theeeeeeeeerreee!!! RUN BITCH, HE GONNA KILL YOUUU!!!

Anywahoo! I love your story so much better than the movie... I just FINALLY saw that durn thing... and I cried the whole darn movie!!

Still so very talented and I look forward to more Descent-y goodnesss... Mmmm..

lovelovelovelove,
stupefied-narutard
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From BishounenKrazed on April 08, 2007
you just had to leave me hanging with roy's phone call, didn't you? and the man who, apparently, saw ed and, probably, tried to apprehend him. i'm going to die of unresolved tension before the end of this story, i know it.

okay, so now i'm really wondering about al's little project there. but he doesn't seem as upset about archer having a thrown out copy as i thought he'd be. and don't get me started on ed. he wants to protect roy, but he can't see that roy'ss just trying to protect him? sheesh...

god, i love this story!! oh, and that thing where russell said that if that boy knew anymore about him he could practically be russell... i got a chill. is that what the boy's after? my god... is it envy? have you even put the homunculi in this story?

anyway, awesome job!! i look forward to the next chapter (but more towards answers. answers!!)!
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