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By : ZaKai

From eeriansadowthefallen on January 21, 2008
review chp 43

i have but one thing to say this time around: thank you for having a realistic first time experience with the two virgins. too many people make it all wonderful and flowery and perfect and its so not.
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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on January 21, 2008
I can't believe people have asked you if you know where you're going with this! I mean, come on! You don't get 43 chapters into a story that is this involved without having some idea of what you're doing! Are they crazy? sheesh. idjits.

I kinda almost wish that Al had let Winry go with him. There's no guarantee that Archer still won't try and use Winry to force Al to come back. Archer could still threaten or arrest Winry in an attempt to make Al surrender and/or join with him. Al's going straight from the frying pan right into the fire leaving with Russell aka Envy! We still don't know what happened with the real Russell and Al is likely to suffer the same fate! Al will be off all by himself headed God knows where to do Heaven knows what! GAH! Damn Envy straight to the hell that spawned him for instigating this mess! grr! At least Al got to spend one night of almost wedded bliss with his soon to be wife. :) Sure it was a bit of a disaster, as the first time often is, but now he definitely has a reason and a place to come home to. There's a tiny part of me that wonders if Winry will end up pregnant from this awkward fumbling in the dark. Wouldn't that be a kick in the pants for Al to come home and find Winry with baby Elric! *laughs at self* Just ignore me. I'm being crazy again! :) Seriously tho, if Ed could just get some good news where Roy is concerned, all will the right with the world! ^_^ Roy's been gone so long. *sniff* Come back soon Roy! Your #1 fangirl misses you!! I'm glad Ed got to enjoy himself on his birthday. It was a short reprieve but at least it helped to lessen the pain of his loss just a tiny bit.
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
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From ANON - Ashley on January 21, 2008
Yay, you updated. ^^

I'm in this for the long haul; I love long fics with heavy amounts of plot. xD PWPs are great and all, but plot is good for the soul. xD
Update as soon as you can since I'm dying to see what happened to Roy. ^^
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From ANON - Ashley on January 06, 2008
If there is anyone in this world that can create suspense then it's you. I NEED to know what's going to happen next or I swear I'll wither away and die. xD

Please add me to your mailing list. My email is Aerithkitana@hotmail.com

And please(x100) update soon. =3
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From TheLightsShadow on January 04, 2008
Nya, would you mind putting me on that alert list? My address is thelightsshadow@gmail.com ^^ I can't wait for the next chapter!
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From eeriansadowthefallen on January 03, 2008
review chp. 42

oh my. just...oh my. oh, al.

that was intense. and poor al. this is really going to screw him up.
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From MustangsHavoc on January 02, 2008
*is mind-fucked*

Al? Kill some one? Out of cold-blooded rage?

So did NOT see that comming!

What is Ed going to do when his brother winds up in military prison for killing a soilder?

This just gets better every chapter and I can't wait till thing really pick up and the action gets going becasue I just know it's going to be awsome.

Gah! I hate Envy. But he wouldn't be a truly good villian if we didn't loathe him, would he?
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From BishounenKrazed on January 02, 2008
i am exhausted and freezing, so this review is going to be short and sweet:

i fucking love it. love the story, love the angst, love the suspense, love you.

this is the best story ever! XD as always, i look forward to the next chapter. *kisses*
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From BishounenKrazed on January 02, 2008
haha! i am sorry about the review from last time. i didn't think it would do that to the screen. i took it off for you. so here's chapter 41's review, without the very long no. ^__^
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NO~O!

and just in case that wasn't clear enough - NO! how could they do something like that?! damn humunculi. i hate them all; they should all die a horrible and grisly second death! and i hope kain doesn't believe what pride tells him and looks into everything himself, and comes up with the idea to "pretend" to do what pride and sloth want, but really help roy and the others. and speaking of roy, that bastard better have a good explanation for keeping me waiting for as long as he has. and wtf was with the drawer? was roy there? or was havoc going into his private stuff to find something that has to do with the orders he gave havoc and riza? and i hope those two haven't decided to not go through with is orders, whatever they are, because i would feel as if they'd betrayed roy that way.

gods, this is so angsty!! and another thing... ed would be able to tell something is wrong with russell, right? i mean, envy hates ed so much, he couldn't possibly be able to hide that much animosity, you know?

sorry, i know i just asked you like, 80 questions that you can't answer - because that would spoil the story - but i'm just so damn excited and anxious! anyway, i look forward to the next chapter, if you couldn't already tell. ^__^

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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on January 02, 2008
O_O! "Hello thar plot" indeed! OMG! Al killed him! I can't believe it! wow. I'm kinda stunned right now. Sweet little Al is now a murderer. whoa. I guess it was only a matter of time before Envy managed to manipulate Al into doing something this drastic. Now Al will have to leave Risembool a wanted man. I'm scared to even think about what Envy wants to use Al for. :[ I wonder if Al will become so horrified with what he's done that he destroys those gloves.

*chuckles* Ed doing Roy's job and being unbelievably bored with it! Now he knows how Roy's felt for years! :D It was funny when Ed had that piece of paper stuck to his cheek when he let his head rest on the desk! :) I wonder how many times that's happened to Roy! :D It's sweet to see Ed being so grown up and wanting to do Roy's job better than he did it. It's almost like he wants Roy to be impressed with what he can accomplish while Roy's not there. Breda almost made me cry when he said, "We're working on it", when Ed said he wanted Roy back. ;_; What is it with Ed and phones? He has the worst luck in the world with them! :) This makes, what?, at least three times that Ed's run afoul of the phone. I would say that it's like a curse but this is just Ed's usual run of luck. :) Ed can't find the courage to call and Al can't find the words he wants to say. *sigh* When these two finally do see each other again, they're gonna have to talk for a week just to catch up on everything they missed because of missed phone calls! :D
Update soon!
Koneko =^.^=
P.S. Roy? *looks around for him* Roy, where are you? *sniff* still no Roy. *pouts* You do know that the anticipation of Roy's return is killing me don't you? meanie!! :P LOL!
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From yeagerbomb on January 02, 2008
chapter 42:
no! bad!! first of all, the phone tag-thing isn't cool. 'they'll call back if it's important.' BUT THEY DIDN'T!!! ed! it's your turn, if you didn't know! and AL!! i'm apalled. i was pissed at the soldiers for attacking winry, and i was cheering for al to kick some serious ass, but then... he went in, and i was saying, 'al... um, please stop?' i wanted him to kick ass, but not... not THAT much ass. and then he did it, and i was sad because al has completely compromised his character now. he's just...not the same innocent little boy as before. i look forward to more!!~
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From ANON - Evermist on January 02, 2008
Stupid Envy, stupid soldiers, stupid...stupidness!! >< Gaa, this review really sucks, but I don't care! Add me to the update list, please, ShamanKing986@yahoo.com Update soon! *huggles Al and Winry*
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From radcat on December 25, 2007
Now...THAT was a plot twist....Feury about to be tricked into being a spy for the bad guys....can definitely say that I did not see that one coming...that was a good surprise. Understand about time. You write good stories and we your adoring public will wait. Merry Christmas.cat
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From tshapochi on December 18, 2007
though i really have missed getting more frequent updates on this story, I do understand completely your position. This story is very well written and I am anxious to see where it leads. I will do my best to be patient. Good luck in your studies.
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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on December 16, 2007
Why the hell are the reviews all stretched out across the page?? First aff chops off part of my last review and now they screw up the look of this one! WTH?!? I hate it when it does this. :(
Koneko =^.^=
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