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  • From eeriansadowthefallen on August 27, 2007
    jesus, the emotional tension skyrocketed in this chapter. not only do i have to wonder exactly how ed will deal with havoc's little bombshell, i have to wonder how havoc himself is going to deal with it. jean is understandably upset about the whole situation, but he seems to be having far too many extra problems with the fact that ed and roy were having a relationship.

    really, its getting very exciting.

    and yes, i did successfully get added to the update list. thanks so much!
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  • From MooMoo382 on August 27, 2007
    And the plot thickens *DUN DUN DAAAAH*
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  • From eeriansadowthefallen on August 24, 2007
    too bad the site was being spaztacular before. my email is shadowshideout@yahoo.com
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  • From eeriansadowthefallen on August 23, 2007
    darling, this story is incredible, but you've left us entirely hanging. this is blatantly unkind. i want to demand another chapter, but i know that doesn't really work. (i am a writer too, you know;-) just know that you have another eager reader waiting in the wings. and i'd love it if you emailed me when you manage to update this.

    thanks
    ~e
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  • From Kuragari75 on August 06, 2007
    oooooo, you're evil. lol, good chapter! duh! Jean's kinda being a dick huh? lol, keep it up!!!! can't wait for next update!!!
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  • From MustangsHavoc on August 05, 2007
    Oh! That was just to short! Another fantastic chapter! I just loved it! Ed ordering Jean around is priceless! I can't wait to find out what he's up too! I hope Riza stays on his side or he's screwed!

    Wo make me worry about Al and Winry so much, with creepy Russel/Envy there! I hope all gets a chance to kick ass!
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  • From roely on August 05, 2007
    i like this chapter better i can see you going somewhere!
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  • From BishounenKrazed on August 04, 2007
    man, ed was so fucking cool!! XD i can't wait for the next chapter! ed is - hopefully - going to kick some figurative ass! cha!

    and i hope al opens his eyes and learns to be suspicious. i don't want him being hurt because he was too naive to see the truth of things or trust others that do. and fletcher needs to stop being so blind, too. honestly, little brothers... *shakes head*

    and where the fuck is my mustang-man? j/k i'm sure you'll get to him when the time is right, but seriously, thinking about roy has me thinking about havoc, and he was being a serious ass. he's so thinking of going for riza and he's condemning ed?! and, was it my imagination, or did havoc seem as if he was in on the "hurt mustang" plan? i mean, he's like, "this wasn't supposed to happen," but it had a tone like it *was* supposed to happen, just not the way it did. i don't know. my mind gets away from me sometimes. but ed needs to hand havoc his ass, because jean's attitude isn't going to fly, i can tell him that. at least, it won't fly with me.

    anyway, great chapter, and such a quick update! i'm looking forward to the next one!
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  • From ANON - stupefiedNarutard on August 04, 2007
    Damn, that was quick!! Well, right now I am seriously mad at Havoc. I like the idea of him with Riza, but I hate that he's just as immature as Ed. He wants to know things as well and when he's surpassed by a kid (well, younger person...) it's hard for him to keep his pride in check. Overall, I think you did a good job with him. Although he has his moments of maturity, he was definitely more of a "younger" person rather than a stable person to check in with for help. Havoc was a comic relief, sometimes a bit helpful and you've demonstrated that here.

    It sucks that Al found out Ed is okay. I wanted him to think Ed wasn't alright, because, for some reason, I dislike Al to a certain extent. I think he's very much spoiled, besides the hard life he's had, he's always been treated good (until that one night) and now he's sitting around getting married. I think I feel like Ed and am jealous. Maybe a secret part of Ed wanted to be like Al, wanted to able to settle in a place and feel comfortable. Anyways, I'm exceptionally tired tonight... I can't think of much to say.

    Oh yes, I hope his plan works out as well. He seems to be good at making plans, but who knows what he's thinking? He's distraught with grief and pressured... his better judgement could be out of wack. Anyboat, God I need rest. Thanks for updating so fast! This was a nice chapter in which we learned the feelings of Havoc...

    lovelovelovelove,
    stupefiedNarutard
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  • From MooMoo382 on August 04, 2007
    Oh snap, Havoc got TOLD XD
    I miss Mustang D:
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  • From Kuragari75 on August 01, 2007
    WHAT HAPPENED TO ROY!!!!! *whimpers* I want my flame-boy back. Good chappies though... I can't wait to read more!!!!! Keep it up!!! *sits staring at computer screen for next update*
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  • From MustangsHavoc on July 30, 2007
    I love the chess analogies! I tried picking up the game myself for ahwhile and it was addicting! Another great chapter!
    I just love this story! The whole people's army thing and the fact that the homunculi are involved linegering in the back ground just adds a lot to the plot, especialy thinking it will come to the forefront soon! That tension is just great! and oh my god! Ed's dream and him crying! I wanted to cry!
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  • From BishounenKrazed on July 30, 2007
    roy's creepy, sending people dream-messages from the maybe-grave. and al is such a wuss. and it wouldn't surprise me a damn bit if the military didn't say anything about roy because they don't know where he is. like, he's hiding at the landlady's place. but that might just give over to ed freaking out that roy didn't tell him he was alive and somewhat home, conveniently forgetting that roy wouldn't have a way of knowing that ed was home while in hiding.

    wow, i'm getting way too into it. you know, i thought that roy saying he was taken and talking to kain about ed were really sweet and nice touches to add to the melodrama that is "roy's missing," though it could be more like dallas and who shot roy mustang? anyway, i can't wait for the next chapters. i know jack shit about chess, so i must know if it ties in more with the plot. bring it on! XD
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  • From ANON - stupefiedNarutard on July 30, 2007
    Mmm, I hated that dream... it made me cry. But, then again, I totally loved it. I loved that you linked it to chess with Kain, that was extremely smart. I hoped he actually learned something from that, which, if he didn't, I'm sure it'll click somehow.

    I wonder if Al really will go find Ed and if he is going to actually get the chance. With palm-tree there to mess with his plans and be "Russell" who knows what will happen? (except you, of course...damnit) So is Ed actually admitting to himself that he loves Roy?

    Ahh-- classic women's intuition. Winry is right and I feel bad that Al actually thinks it's Russell. In his bliss he completely forgot about certain people that could do him harm, that still haven't gotten what they wanted in the first place. He thinks everything is okay since his life is alright and the only thing worrying him is the rebellion, sex, and Ed. (Al, that little perv) (of course if I was locked in a tin can for such a long time, I'd crave human contact as well)

    I love that Kain was helpful-- he's such a cute guy! And the nurse thing cracked me up. Ain't that just how it is? All the good men are taken. (not neccessarily by other men, but that's a sexy thought)

    Edward, towards the end of the chapter, seemed a bit more enlightened. He's taking this seriously and I love that he is starting to think. Hopefully, he realizes that he too has been selfish. I hope he got the meaning from Kain, I really do. AND I STILL WANNA KNOW WHAT HE DID TO GET AL'S BODY BACK!!! T^T

    Anyways, til then!

    lovelovelovelovelove,
    stupefiedNarutard

    *update, you cretin, update!* *jk, you're not a cretin*

    *but please do update*
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  • From roely on July 07, 2007
    well, that was sad , is he dead? i hope not anyways here is my email address yummietummy@verizon.net
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