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Reviews for Descent

By : ZaKai

From ANON - AxelsRoxas on March 08, 2010
Yo! Just want to let you know that this fanfic is absolutely amazing... and this is my first time reviewing anything on aff so feel proud. Lol. I'm usually too lazy to, but there are a bunch of things about this fanfic that I just love.
Probably the first thing I noticed and loved was the fact that you don't use random Japanese words here and there throughout the story. Al not calling Ed nii-san and Ed and Fletcher not calling Izumi sensei was incredibly refreshing. So, thanks.
I'm really missing Roy now though :( Yay that Knox helped reassure Ed with the whole "I don't think he's dead" thing. Makes me happy.
Your knowledge of alcohol is kind of impressive, are you a bartender or something? Cause you know your stuff!
Maybe I'm just not educated in the world of booze, but yeah.
Your attention to detail makes me happy as well. It's actually really hard to find a story that follows the story line... Only thing I disliked was when some of the differences between the first anime and manga made themselves present... like the death of Winry's parents. Not like it really matters. You stated that you would be following the anime, so it's all good.
Ed's got himself in a pickle though! Good thing he has everyone looking out for him or he'd be totally effed xD
Can't wait for Roy to come back and beat him over the head for being an idiot :P
Oh! Please put me on that list for update e-mails? That's so the one thing I hate about aff! No author alerts. Gah.
I don't know if you're planning on updating any time soon, but if you do I would so love an e-mail!
Thanks a bunch for the awesome story!
Hope you update soon!
-Axel's Roxas
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From ANON - Tsuzuki on September 28, 2009
please please please finish this story! I'm hooked now! Oh and please email me when you update? I'll love you forever if you do! arigato!!!!
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From nightfox39 on August 26, 2009
i love it ^^
We can has more Zakai?
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From ANON - Ava86 on June 19, 2009
Just read chap25! Loving it so far. I think it's funny that me and Ed like the same drink. It is also sometimes made with orange juice which is really good!
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From ANON - Sasurto on June 17, 2009
Yay this story is back!!!! This is still one of my favorite fanfics, hope you continue to update!!! I really cant wait to see what happens when Roy comes back!!! Send me an email when you update please!!!
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From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on June 17, 2009
SQUEEEE! At long last a new chappie!! *happy dances* :D Imagine my surprise upon seeing the story alert memo in my email! :) Ah how easy it was to slide back into the groove of this story. *heart* Poor Ed's getting a taste of what Roy's been going thru for years now! :D Hakuro can kiss my ass btw! XD His one comment about Ed leading men into battle struck a chord with me. He means for Ed to go fight this People's Army doesn't he. He means for Ed to suffer, possibly die, doesn't he! The sorry sonofabitch would do it too just to get Ed out of his way wouldn't he. damn him. Nice to see Kain getting better, sort of. I haven't decided yet what to make of Breda. He seems like an OK guy but he keeps making Ed question everything in love and life so I don't know if I fully trust him or not. Winry, unsurprisingly, has caused all kinds of unnecessary trouble for herself, for Pinako, and, most importantly, Al. The girl was always too high strung for her own good. :( There's just one thing missing from this chapter. *sniffle* WHERE IS MY ROY?! WHAT HAVE YOU DONE WITH HIM?! GIVE HIM BACK!! *sobs* Yeah, I'm still dying (no pun intended) to know what's become of my beloved raven haired rapscallion! XD
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From TiaA on November 23, 2008
I went through this in a matter of hours and all want to do is continue reading. This is very intriguing story. You have me trying to wrap my mind around the storyline, I keept waiting for the shoe to drop for Ed and Roy. I wonder when will the Al and Winry story will give but I just want to know what the heck is going to happen in the end.

With the earlier chapters I enjoyed the realism of Roy's alcholism. It was good flaw for this character that made him less than perfect. No, it was what made him strong. Roy has terrible issues, his friends have seen the worst of them, but they refused to let him fall so low or let him remain on the ground for too long. He also has terrible preseverance. He is cruel to everyone, but worst to himself and it was at those time in the story that I felt sorry for Ed. Everyone from the Maes in Roy's mind to Riza knew how bad this relationship was for the boy, heck even Ed knew it, but it was the force of Roy's personality that I think has dragged Ed into this mess. Roy is the perfect anti-hero in this story and I wait for him to return.

This is truly a lovely story.

Sean
Please include me on your mailing list for updates. I am at senatia at yahoo dot com. Thank you

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From nightfox39 on August 21, 2008
This is really my favorite fanfic of all time, and that's saying something seeing as I read a lot of them. I've been reading it since it was first posted on FF.N- it's a pity you haven't updated for a while. You have a lot of talent.
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From ANON - Casandra on August 10, 2008
I have gotten so addicted to this story and would love to know if I can be also put on the list for updates, but not just for this but for any updates you do. I do not know if I asked already since AFF hardly is nice to me.

Thanks you for posting this and giving me something to really like. (^_^)
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From ANON - Azumi-chan on February 29, 2008
My email is LadyMisaga@yahoo.com by the way since it doesn't say when I leave a review. I wanted to let you know that reading all the chapters in two days has been exilerating and then when I come to the end I want to scream, please update soon! As I have mentioned, it takes some getting used to between the Al/Winry scenario but he is so sweet and within this story I truly feel he is so much better for her in a way. The palm tree must die, he gets on my nerves, *stupid, mother fucking, cross dressing, hateful, jealous, murdering palm tree* Sorry just had to rant, I hate that thing and feel no remorse for him *it* despite the fact that he is funny in a sadistic way. Anyway, Thanks a million, once again, for writing such a story, you really have so much talent and I hope you update soon. Sorry for not reviewing more often. But keep in mind to overwork yourself, can't have all the talented writers' killing themselves to keep the fans happy, then where would we turn when we wanted to read a good story.

A thought has come to mind . . . I have this feeling that when Mustang is found all hell will break loose. Not only that, but Ed's maturity will definitely come in handy and may expand over time. But if and when Ed and Al meet up I hope the change in him doesn't spark any problems concerning Winry, not that it would get her anywhere considering how completley obvious it is that he loves Roy-just that it is a nagging thing for Al and I don't want to see him have him heart broken like that. Just a thought or concern. Kind of makes me even more anxious to see the two unite and how *interesting* it will be considering how much closer Ed has gotten to the subbordinates that work for Mustang. Only way to know is to wait for the next chapter. Man this review is much longer than the other ones, hope you don't mind . . . Well yeah my head is spinning so looking forward to the next chapter and this fan fic is beyond complicated and so well written.
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From ANON - Azumi-chan on February 29, 2008
I can already tell this story is far from over, but this was beautiful chapter and I am still a little shaky with the Al and Winry thing, but it did seem very realistic considering that some of the opther 'lemons' as other often call sex in other stories are so far fetched and overdone in a lot of different ways. I adore your writing style and should probably review more, but its' difficult to not get caught up in the story. Geeze I miss Mustang and I wish someone would kill Juliet Douglas and the Fueror already, using Kain like that (You're evil, he's sweet and innocent in a Alphonse sort of way, but it adds a twist to the story and I am looking forward to seeing where it will go.) I am looking forward to where the story will go in many aspects.
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From ANON - Azumi-chan on February 28, 2008
Havoc and Ed are so much alike it's scary at times, though neither will admit it and Havoc is more mature at times. I absolutely love Izmui, *"Sit! Eat!"* and just like that everyone obeys her, but I have such respect for her, and Hues was always "nice and insane" a Ed put it. Dwelling on the past when you should focusing on moving forward . . . Next chapter, can't wait to see how Ed handles this 'authority' and 'taking charge' situation. I am sure Mustang's subordinates will help, especially Riza considering how she is, she's strong and she will do as much as she can after all.

Thanks for another wonderful read!
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From ANON - Azumi-chan on February 28, 2008
Well, I hope Ed will take what Kain said to heart, chess really does represent so much about life and I persponally love the game (currently tried to explain it to my step-cousin, but I can't explain it very well concerning life and how the game relates to life) I loved how you had Kain explain it like Roy would. This chapter was done very well and on to next one . . . thank you so much for the story and the explanations at the end, sometimes they help out a lot.
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From ANON - Azumi-chan on February 28, 2008
You did great in portraying Breda, it truly is believable and expected for him to act as you wrote him to act. As always everyone is very much in character. Brilliant chapter, it defintely tuggs at the heart strings, which just means you are doing a wonderful job.
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From ANON - Azumi-chan on February 28, 2008
Well written and Ed is really in for it with Izumi, but maybe she will be able to get him thinking straight. He's nearly eighteen, and he should beat the shit out of Roy Mustang regardless of the fact he is trying to protect Ed because he is being an ass and Does have a 'drinking' problem. I love Izumi, it really sucks that she died and I hated how it was never that big of a deal in the movie, she was my one of my favorite chracters. Anyway, I am really enjoying this story and thank you so much for your devotion and submitting such a wonderful story.
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