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Reviews for An End to a Never-ending Story

By : DarkSerapha
  • From Lunamaru on January 10, 2010
    Aha! See, the thing with this story is that I had a background story for it: how the HELL does BARDOCK defeat FRIEZA?! And his scar, how'd he manage to get that removed? And why would Gohan not recognize that Bardock isn't his father? And why wouldn't Goku just blast the guy out of the sky when he had a chance? Etc etc. Well, the whole "Bardock defeats Frieza" thing is a longer story that I could add on to the beginning... hmm, but I wasn't really caring at that point I guess. XD See, I wasn't trying for plot, although I have all the explanations in my head. So, thanks for the constructive criticism, and I'll actually get my beta to help me with this for once. XD You like stories that make sense. I however usually make no sense. XDDD But I'll try to fix the parts you commented about. And you could email me too, I don't mind unless you don't want me to.
    Oh, and btw, that wasn't me putting all those :(. If you read the name, it was probably not "Lunamaru". Probably my sister, actually, sorry 'bout that!
    So, thanks again for the constructive criticism!
    ~Lunamaru
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  • From Lunamaru on January 09, 2010
    Hi, I just didn't know how to contact you in thanks for the flame for my story, When We Come Back. Seriously, I don't usually get flames, and I need them especially when I write a one-shot at 4 am in the morning when I usually don't know what I'm doing. And it didn't have any real reason behind it because, well, I didn't want it to. That's just how I felt about that XD And I could answer the other questions about "plot" and "how did that even work?" but what's the fun in that if you didn't like it? And no offense to you, but you're a GkVg fangirl and I'm just really really ... not XDDD If this was just a flying fancy to read a random incest story, then...thanks for reading it! I would try to read and review this, but as said, I'm not a GkVg fangirl and all your stories are that pairing. So, sorry for taking a review to respond to you, but it was the only option I had.
    You can always delete this. :D
    ~Lunamaru
    PS: Sorry if you get some random reviews/flames from my friends. XD They read my reviews too.
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  • From Zofo on September 02, 2008
    Awwww, that was very sad and touching, Vegeta telling of his unrequited love, but I liked the happy ending :)
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  • From topbear1974 on September 01, 2008
    awwww. I remember the story. The feelings runs very deep from Vegeta's side. The monologue is very touching and moving. From glimps of Goku's reaction, we can see the feeling runs deep too. I love how Vegeta thought he was going to end this once for all and he was stubborn about not wanted to be resurrected. This is very typical of him. However, Goku has his own solution, and as in every battles he fought, he won in the end, the prince's heart. The ending is sweet and I alway have a sweet tooth for happy ending.


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