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Reviews for Demon In the Design

By : antilogicgirl
  • From AnandaEronel on April 19, 2011
    I would really love to see more of this! I know you pretty much tied the storyline up there at the end, but I enjoyed it very much. :)
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  • From ANON - Miyu on April 26, 2009
    Excellent work X3
    To be honest I was with the group that thought that Roy got off to easy but we all know that he's good at heart he just has a funny way in showing it ^-^ One thing I didn't coming was the *whistles* truly did not see that coming. Thank for continuing too, most fan-fics are forgotten by the writer *cries* (make me cry), but if there is more to this story can't wait to see/read it XD
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  • From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on December 30, 2008
    Yay! That was great! :) AngryAl was awesome! It did seem at first that Al was just being a prick about Ed and Roy being together but then you realize that he's just looking out for Ed's best interests. Roy did play a very nasty joke on Ed and Al doesn't seem the type to forgive and forget easily. It was almost like it was just desserts for Roy and Ed to walk in on (sorta) Al and Riza on the couch. At least Roy didn't berate Al for sleeping with Riza the way Al did Roy with Ed! :)

    Loved the erotic letters! They were the perfect vehicle for them to keep the fires of passion burning while learning a bit about each other so their relationship could grow, deepen, become more solid and secure. I REALLY liked the way you wrote their first time together! :) I did snicker at Ed tho when he came so early in the touchy-feely game! XD The way they explored each other with their hands before they even did anything really explicit was so erotic, so sensual. It definitely made the 4 months they were apart worth the wait! :)
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  • From SarahTaylor on December 30, 2008
    Oh dear God in Heaven, thank you XD

    Give me a minute and I might be able to form coherent sentences lol

    Let's start with the letters, oh wow you are a Goddess. I loved the smut, passion, heat filled letters. And then throwing in the smut after that, I think I nearly stopped breathing ^_^ It was so sensual and pure, perfect for their first time together. A lot of people rush into it but you allowed them to explore each other and learn, brilliant.

    That ending was priceless, I loved her sloppy sarcastic salute, excellent XD I was in stitches from the second the line 'somethings wrong here...' was spoken. I just knew that had happened.

    AngryAl was ace, I love AngryAl. Him and DrunkAl are my new fav characters, they're so good to write too. Al threatening Roy has to be the highlight of any story ;-)

    When I read the part addressed to me I had to chuckle. Last night I actually started the pole dancing scene in anticipation of you posting, it's half done, I have to add Roy's side of it then it's another chapter posted. I promise to get the next chapter after that one done within the week but I think I need a rest tonight, your story has me on overload at the moment *_* (that's meant to be sparkly eyes btw XD) Oh and the evil plot bunny threw another twist at me so that should be fun... The evil Winry strikes again heh
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  • From SarahTaylor on December 29, 2008
    If you post both together, 2. If you plan on making us wait with teasers like that and only give us one a week then 1, all of it!! Now please!!!

    I want to see angry Al. And if you post it all now I'll go and finish Karaoke, complete with pole dancing Ed and Epilogue smut XD And yes I am trying to bribe you XD
    Is it working?? lol
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  • From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on December 29, 2008
    I vote for one big one!!! :D The little teasers have me all anxious to see the next chapter!! It's gonna be awesome! Al, "I swear on my mother’s grave, Roy, if you hurt my brother again, they’ll never find your body..." squee!! Al is so ebil!! :D Protective!Al is scary! LOL I can't wait to read the whole chapter!! :)
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  • From Evermist on December 06, 2008
    Gasp! You're holding it hostage for reviews?! Well, I'm afraid I don't cooperate with kidnappers! Now post that last chapter, because I've loved this story, and must see how it ends!
    ...
    ...
    ...Curses...I've given in to your demands...

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  • From ANON - Anon on December 05, 2008
    Oh God how I just love this story so far, please continue as soon as possible ^^
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  • From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on December 05, 2008
    *giggle* I can so see Al being a slobbering drunk! He just seems like the type who can't hold his liquor! XD I laughed my ass off at Ed yelling at him! I think that's the only time I've ever seen Ed curse at Al like that! Props to Roy for pulling the party together for Ed like he did. I don't know about anybody else but I like the way Roy and Ed are getting along now. Ed's slow steady realization of his feelings seems quite natural, esp given how often inept he is with basic human interaction. :) I VERY much like the fact that Ed got to do the seducing here, very nice turnabout! Go Ed! :D I totally expected Roy to try and put his best moves on Ed post party but Ed turned the tables on him and has Roy right where he wants him! :) I can't wait to see what happens in the morning!! Al with a hangover will be pretty funny and, hopefully, Roy and Ed will have worked out this "situation" between them! :)
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  • From SarahTaylor on December 04, 2008
    Damn that was good XD

    Ed sure knows how to make your heart pound and I'm just loving Al in this chapter, projectile vomit hehe.

    I'm slightly speachless right now so I'll just plead for the second half. I want to see angry Al *down on hands and knees begging* PLEASE
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  • From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on December 01, 2008
    *grins* That's what I said in my last review - that Roy was being a bratty little boy to get the attention of the one he likes, aka Ed! :D I called it! YAYZ! :) I'm anxious to see where things go from here. They do say the best relationships/lovers start out as friends! :)
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  • From SarahTaylor on November 27, 2008
    Very nice, a fitting end. I had to laugh at Roy's last line, it was just so him XD
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  • From ANON - Leeanna69 on November 23, 2008
    What an asshole. He's playing a prank on Ed by telling him he has cancer? Roy deserves whatever Ed does to him for that.

    Loving the fic though. ^-^
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  • From ANON - Amethyst-eyed Koneko on November 20, 2008
    Ya know, Roy sure has a funny way of showing someone he likes them doesn't he? :) All of his stupid little pranks are like the classic little boy who pulls the hair of the girl he likes just so she'll notice him, to get a reaction. Just look at him now! :) He has Ed's undivided attention and it scares him to death! XD The bartender was funny! Good thing for him he didn't say anything about Ed looking female otherwise, given Ed's current mood, it would not have gone well for him!! :) With each passing chapter I'm more and more impressed with how well Ed is keeping his temper under control. I keep anticipating Ed going into a full blown thrashing rage over something Roy's done but he has yet to do so! The waiting for the other shoe to drop is killing me! XDDD I can't wait to see what happens when these two talk!
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  • From SarahTaylor on November 18, 2008
    I loved that the bartender mistook Ed for a girl, that was just priceless XD

    Oh so good, Roy's really in for it now :)

    Looking forward to the next chapter.
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