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Reviews for Barracks

By : chayron

From ANON - Nancy on July 25, 2012
Just finished readings it from the beginning...Wow! This has to be one of my all time favorite fanfiction stories!! It is SO well written and all the descriptions are wonderful to read without weighing down the story. Please update when you can. Thanks!!
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From ANON - Vega on July 16, 2012
A great story! Thank you, dear Chayron! I am really looking forward to every new chapter and waiting for the reunion of Goten and Trunks.
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From Silvers on July 16, 2012
I am really enjoying this story!!! It is never updated fast enough for me. (Of course even if it were updated every hour it wouldn't be fast enough) Thank you so much for the entertaining story and keep it up. :)
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From ANON - Mew2 on July 15, 2012
Soooo glad you updated! I was anxiously awaiting this one. AND OMG I DON'T EVEN HAVE WORDS TO DESCRIBE HOW EXCITED I AM THAT THE PRINCE IS BACK SO I AM USING CAPITAL LETTERS INSTEAD OF COHERENT SENTENCESSS!!! I missed him sooo much. I hope we see him more. Also, it would be interesting to get his perspective like we used to. Love your story, please update again soon. :)

ps: Also, I believe you used the word "pray" once when you meant "prey". No criticism! Just letting you know.
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From ANON - dreamer on July 15, 2012
I'll be interested to see what happens when they meet
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From dragonfire2687 on June 15, 2012
So far this story is very intriguing can't wait to read more.
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From Silvers on May 22, 2012
Hey, I just wanted to say I really like how creative your story is! I am definately enjoying it. I look forward to the next update. :D
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From ANON - Veronica on May 19, 2012
Holy shit, girl. That is some HOT sex in this chapter!! Their second and third times were even hotter than their first. You've got /me/ blushing like a virgin. Anyway, the last few chapters deserve a much more in depth review but it'll have to wait til I have some more time. Just wanted to let you know I loooved this chapter ;)

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From ANON - animeslave18 on April 27, 2012
Ah damn! I'm all caught up now! >< Now I gotta wait until you update again. :( *sighs* and its at the worst possible place too. Ugh. Goten's not gonna let Reyn take his cherry, is he? :p It's gonna be Trunks. I've felt this since the beginning. Well, technically I guess he already has, but not with the right...'equipment' hehe. Man, it sure is a long week. O.o They're taking their sweet time to get to...that one place...lol I can't remember. I'm more into who Goten's gonna sleep with rather than the visions. But don't get me wrong, those are just as interesting. :) Hm, and here I was thinking Goten's obsessiveness with sex was a symptom. ;p but it appears that he's a growing boy. I wonder if Kakarot was the same? I guess, it could be a symptom if he's a late bloomer. :/ Aw, when's he gonna see Trunks again? >< And Kyon? And Ario? I wonder, I wonder...ugh I'm just too damn eager. >< Don't forget about this story! :o Or I'll hunt you down and tie you to your computer chair and force you to finish writing it. Huh, usually I don't resort to something so harsh. O.o But I'm obsessed with this story! >< I needs it daily in my boring life.
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From ANON - animeslave18 on April 20, 2012
Okay, I cannot wait until I catch up with your updates so I'm reviewing now! This story is friggin awesome! And I'm not that big of a fan of Goten and Trunks, but when I saw that you kept updating it (not to mention you've been working on it for five years or so now...no wonder you have so many hits!), and I ran out of stories to read, I decided to finally read it. I managed to get to chapter 27 before I finally decided to review. :3 Before the war ended the good flow that was goin on, I realized that Goten and I have a lot in common. :3 Don't know what to do if a guy likes you and when you don't want to go out with them, but not neglect them either, you turn into a tease, hehe. I wonder, are you like that? Hehe, just wondering since the main character is likewise. I'm not saying that the flow was ruined or anything. If the war hadn't happened, then there would be no chance for Trunks and Goten to get together. :) Hehe, poor Goten. He has so many boys chasing after him now...or before...I'm only on 27 lol. This story is so detailed that I'm surprised how well its put together. :) I was actually planning on joining the Air Force sometime this year. Mainly for traveling and paying for school...and if I had to go to war, I can blow things up above instead of in the front lines. However, I don't plan on flying since I hate it myself. :/ Especially overseas. The only reason why I'm thinking of the Air Force is because I think the basic training will be easy and I hear we will get three meals a day and not have to sleep outdoors...but that's just what I heard from my gramps and that was like fifty years ago. >< So, I'll find out soon enough. Just curious, but did you get all this information by researching it or did it come from that creative mind of yours? :) Or both? Sounds like too much work to come up with on your own. I know I wouldn't have been able to pull it off hehe.

Ooooo the visions! Had a feeling that would be in here! ^^ I squealed when Kakarot asked if he's seen the edge of the world and the old man, which I presume is Bardock. Hmm, what does it mean? I know I'm gonna have to read more to find out. Damnit all, it seems Kakarot keeps trying to avoid Goten so he wouldn't have to explain everything to him. However, I had a feeling the answers weren't going to come that soon. Will Trunks have to eventually explain it to him? I'm surprised he hasn't yet. The longer he puts it off the more Goten will be pissed at him, since he's known for a while. I can only guess that maybe a virus has spread in the male gene as well. Either that or Kakarot has figured out how to become a Super Saiyan and his boys are just uber strong. :3 However, when the project is mentioned, I'm stumped. :/ It's sad that Gohan's already dead. >< Perhaps his death will explain more. Once again, I'll have to continue reading. Oooohh I wanted to cry when Toharu died. :( I can't believe you killed him! >< I can only imagine how Ario's feeling. :/ Does he continue fighting or does he give into the pain? And what about Kyon? I'm surprised Goten didn't ask about him when Trunks mentioned that he was still breathing. Then again, after everything that was happening, it would be hard to grasp everything at once.

I'm so glad you kept up with this story. :) You seem to be true to your word. This story is now one of my top favs! :3 It has everything you can ask for! Long chapters, sex, fighting, angst, romance, everything. :) Not to mention it's the only thing I look forward to when I get off work and on weekends. Although, reading just one chapter every night before I go to bed isn't enough. :( Gods, it's like Twilight or the Host. I wanna cry cause I don't wanna stop reading it and I don't want it to end cuz it's a really good read. ...You should make this into a book. ^^ It would be much longer than either book, not to mention better. x) Anyway, I am eagerly, eagerly, eagerly, looking forward to the chapters yet to read and the ones yet to come. :)
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From ANON - Webtester01 on April 06, 2012
It's been a while since I last had a chance to read this site, let alone this story. I'm glad you are keeping it up!

I"m glad Goten is maturing. The change in direction is refreshing. I have a few chapters to catch up on. I'll keep coming back!
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From Tru6768 on March 27, 2012
Hey, girl! Actually, I DID keep reading after Chapter 26 (and I'm glad I did because that oh-so-sexy truten kiss was in chapter 27--drool worthy!!) Anyway, I'm sorry that I didn't review after finishing Chapter 40, but I have been waiting and checking every few days for 41 and I was so happy when I saw that you posted! I'm loving the sense of humor in this story and there were a few laugh-out-loud moments in this chapter. Well it seems Reyn has finally got into Goten's pants. Trunks better hope these little interruptions keep getting in their way, or Reyn might get into a lot more than that soon! I also love how we're learning a little bit more about "the experiment" that Goten and Reyn are a part of (not so much in this chapter, but in the ones just before it). I have my own ideas as to what exactly is going on, but I'll wait and see if I'm right. You are always good for surprises!

Still loving the story and can't wait for your next update :)
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From Tru6768 on February 08, 2012
Chayron. Darling! It has been far too long :)

I guess it was some years ago now that I read the first 10 chapters of this story. And I've hardly been active in the fandom since then, but lo and behold a week or so ago I was perusing AFF - what have they DONE to it by the way? Ugh, the new layout is AWFUL - and I came across your most recent update. Noticing that there were now some 40 chapters, and curious to see how things had played out for Goten and Trunks, I clicked on Chapter 1 again. Well, I've been reading 5 or so chapters a night, going to bed way too late, and neglecting my work far too much, all because I can't put it down.

I've just finished Chapter 25 and I had to take a moment to tell you how much I'm enjoying this. It took quite a few chapters in the beginning to introduce the reader to everyone, the characters, the backstories, the base, life on Vegeta-sei, but now that you have, I am loving the way the story is moving forward. It has a brilliant pace. Every chapter has some laughter, some tears, some flirting, some exciting gossip or forbidden meeting. And always plenty of action. I am just eating it all up! I can barely concentrate on anything else wondering what's going to happen to Goten and Trunks, and Kyon, Ranvera, Ario, and Tohoru.

Ah, Toharu.... When he died, it was the first time I've cried reading fanfiction since Strong Heart. Well done, old friend, well done. It is a testament to how you have drawn in the readers, so that Goten's friends have become our friends. It wouldn't have been so bad, except that Ario's still living.... I wonder what will happen to him. He seems strong, but still, it's so tragic. The way he was holding Toharu, and the way Goten broke down. It was fantastic and I felt the tears leaking down my cheeks. I loved Goten's reaction - first retching, then his overwhelming despair being interrupted by some damn idiots giving him orders. When he finally lashed out at them I felt it felt so vindicating and cathartic! I know he was hysterical, but it seemed like such a natural reaction at the time. It would have taken sedatives to calm me down as well.

Now Goten and the prince ;D Of course I can't go without commenting on their relationship, since it is the main attraction. All I can say is the waiting is make it it so freakin' sweet. Every little interaction they have puts me on the edge of my seat wondering how far they'll go, what feelings they'll let slip. I'm so glad you're taking your time with them. And I'm very much enjoying watching them relieve their sexual frustration (and ours!) with other people, haha. I was so glad for Trunks when he finally got some action with his old nanny, lol. It was hot and I loved every second of it, though I have to say, I'm personally disturbed by the nature of their relationship. I hate the fact that the man was his caretaker and started having sex with him at age 11. Seems so unfair and exploitative. But Trunks seems to have gotten quite some satisfaction out of it so I suppose it's not so bad. Still, it's just my personal distaste for that sort of thing in real life which I can't help but let slip in to my reading.

I must also commend your betas ChibiVegeta and QuatreOfDoom. The language and grammar is absolutely fantastic and not even a trace of those old Chayronisms I used to like so much! You know, the ones that made your characters sound exotic ;) Truly excellent work by all of you.

And now...I will ignore the work I brought home in my briefcase tonight, open a bottle of whine, and on to Chapter 26! Thank you so much for this lovely reading experience.

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From ANON - Rbell on December 27, 2011
You have an amazing story going. Normally I strongly dislike fanfics with OC's...especially with alot of OC's. But you somehow pull it off very well, focusing on the actual anime/manga characters but also develop the OC characters enough that the reader cares about them too. I'm thoroughly enjoying this fic and am glad I came across it. Haven't heard from Trunks in a bit, am curious what the royals are up to while a war rages. I like Reyn quite a bit--I'm guessing he is like Goten with the unnatural strength for his class...but he doesn't get the premonitions? And as for Goten...for a unnaturally strong fighter, he sure vomits alot. =)
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From ANON - Topbear on November 22, 2011
Pugh. Hots in the air. Love the last question. Eagerly wait for gotten to reply.
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