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Reviews for Mind Rape

By : MutantPoptart

From ctsama on March 01, 2016
Wonderful story! I love how you've conveyed Vegeta's mental and emotional state throughout the story. We feel everything right along with him. I really look forward to seeing how things end up. Thank you!
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From ANON - Talltree-san on February 29, 2016
Oh this is so exciting, and eerie at the same time! Also it seems Buu is so comfortable being in Goku's form and yet is also very scared of that fact as well. Then we got Vegeta as well probably missing Goku more than ever and now got Buu turning into his lost rival and friend. Very interesting development this is :) .
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From ANON - Sara on January 05, 2016
I wish I had stopped reading after the first chapter. I'm sorry, but it's true! The first chapter was amazing, incredibly in character, tragic, and heart wrenching. The parts with Goku were just intriguing enough, really it was flawless because you really are a wonderful writer! I enjoyed the following chapters as well, but I feel like the story lost serious momentum and believability during the "courting" chapters. Vegeta became more and more OOC (in a way that seemed more forced than believable), even when he fought it wasn't enough, his justifications seemed forced, and the worst - why would he waste weeks and not even look for the other dragon balls? Forget the idea of wishing back Goku, what about his lost friends, his son, or any other idea to get rid of Buu? For him to completely blow off the limitless possibilities the dragon balls had to offer was incredibly hard to swallow, especially after he told off Dende. His complete lack of a plan, plot device like decisions (goading Bow into raping him, then being surprised when that backfired? Why not just charge him and attack him until he fights?) became very frustrating.

I kept reading expecting there to be a chance at revenge and redemption against both Buu's, only to have it fall into a twisted rape-turned-love story. Vegeta's mannerisms in the last few chapters are understandable, there is only so much you can fight before you just shut down, but I was holding on for one of two things - for Buu to get what he deserves (and a stockholm syndrome-esque love and a build toward 'consensual' sex is certainly NOT it) or for Goku to resurface, as foreshadowed in the first chapter and with Dende. It's Chapter 25 and neither has happened.

I just needed to raise my hand and say I am not with the other reviewers in thinking Buu and Vegeta as a couple is a good thing. The part that I hoped would be the overarching story (a proud warrior humiliated, tortured, but eventually able to fight back and overcome) has been so thoroughly crushed into this pathetic unrecognizable character. You were right in the first chapter that what we love about Vegeta is his struggle, but with so many failures piling up, all losses and no wins, even I as a reader can't have hope for him anymore. What is truly sad is I don't see how he could ever come back from this IC. Even if Goku popped out, they defeated Buu and Goku lurved him, even if everyone came back to life and it was all thanks to him and he was the hero like he secretly longed, I cannot see how Vegeta would ever be able to face any of them. If he tried, I couldn't bring myself to read that sad, wretched tale. The only way I can see for this story to end in a good way for Vegeta, is for him to die and be remembered as a hero with people none the wiser of what he went through. What I'm really hoping doesn't happen, is a Buu-love happy ending. Broken or not, how anyone could love someone who destroyed his life, raped him, and killed literally everyone not just his friends and family, is just not believable at all.

I'm sorry if my comments are discouraging, this got way too long. Please write whatever you want to write, and don't stop because it's good and you're talented. I'm sure the story is going exactly how you planned it, but I can't bring myself to read anymore of it. Good luck anyway!

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From ANON - Talltree-san on December 30, 2015
I'm shocked and yet not surprised Vegeta would eventually be driven to almost kill himself. Kinda makes me think a little on that whole oh how the mighty have fallen. But I'm thankful he didn't blast himself because his curiosity won out in the end.
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From Ulrike on December 27, 2015
What a great Christmas present! New Chapters! As I'm reading this, I can feel Vegeta's personality fading, as if he simply exists without purpose. You've captured his depression well. He does what Buu wants just because, he still lives...just because, and Vegeta's lack of feeling toward what has happened to him is so well written, I can truly understand how he feels. That sudden decision to end his life was both shocking, yet unsurprising, too. I'm glad Vegeta felt Dende's presence and decided to not end his life, but I'm excited to see how you depict our saiyajin prince from here. Is there a will to fight again? Or will Vegeta need a lot more help from Dende and the other Earthlings who survived? Really great writing. Can't wait for the next few chapters!
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From ANON - Talltree-san on October 24, 2015
Wow that was something right there. It makes me think who is this new Vegeta, and if he somehow manages to get everyone back with the Dragon balls would his friends and family notice the difference. I think Goku would probably pick up on the differences right away. But right now it's looking kinda bleak right now for Vegeta mental wise.
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From ANON - Talltree-san on October 04, 2015
So Buu finally got rid of Bow, hmmmm. I wonder if... no at least I hope there weren't any of Vegeta's family or comrades inside Bow when he was destroyed :/ . But as it stands Bow is gone but Vegeta is not relieved though. Out of the two I think that Buu was the slightly lesser evil of the two so good riddance to Bow!
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From TristaML on October 03, 2015
SO glad that Bow is dead, and even though it was something I never considered, I'm glad Buu didn't absorb him- by not absorbing him he lost some essential characteristics that belonged to him (well as much as anything could belong to someone who absorbs things and becomes something else.) I'm also glad Vegeta had a moment of clarity at the end there, yes it was sad, but he still needs to be aware of the reality of his situation rather than become depressed by all the little parts that make it up... I do hope for some type of turn around---sooner rather than later if I might add. Where is Dende now? Is Goku going to overcome Buu from within... it seems to me he's the only reason Vegeta's even alive, but what do I know... why is Buu keeping Vegeta alive... why is he "in love" with him in the first place? How will Vegeta react to seeing Goku again anyways? Ahh, I'm getting ahead of myself.

Always excited when this story is updated!

Until next time

TristaML
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From Ulrike on September 26, 2015
Oh my God...so sad! :( Those last few paragraphs about Trunks were incredibly heartbreaking. Things just do not seem to get any better for our poor Vegeta. I'm looking forward the upcoming chapters. Just....how can this get resolved?!!?
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From Ulrike on August 10, 2015
It's interesting that Buu is feeling so protective of Vegeta. I really hope Vegeta doesn't start falling for him, too, as it's Buu's fault Vegeta's in this predicament.

Arg, the angst! The ANGST!!! (which I love) I have no idea how this is going to end. While Buu is being all kind and gentle, he's still really controlling, and clearly does not understand Vegeta's discomfort. Then there is everyone from Earth, who survived, who are just chilling on some remote planet waiting for a solution.

I wonder, after all of this has come to a close, how Vegeta will see himself. He allowed himself to become Majin Vegeta and then refused to fuse with Goku, which led to this situation. With Vegeta's pride, I can see him blaming himself for all of this, while also trying to cope with what has happened to him! He needs someone to hold him and hug him! Preferably not Buu.

Cannot wait for the next chapter!
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From ANON - Talltree-san on August 08, 2015
I was yelling in my head at Buu that Vegeta isn't trembling with pleasure it's fear D: ! I think it's high time for Bow to go for good!
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From ANON - Talltree-san on July 11, 2015
Omg, any normal human beings would have died a long time ago going through what Vegeta went through. I don't blame him for wanting any friend right now to comfort him in his time of desperate need :'( .
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From ANON - b-chan on July 08, 2015
I had to sit and think on this chapter before I could write a review for it; it's dark, disturbing, and hard to get out of your head once it's in.
First off, you've had a couple 'evil' cliff hangers in a row. Seriously after chapter 19 when you stated you'd broken it up because it was too big and would be posting within a week; day five from posting I was checking this site at least twice a day hoping to see an update. Once it went over seven I was like... any minute now.... any minute... it'll show up... it's already written and done... god when it's going to show up?! I dislike when people that write reviews just to say 'please hurry with the next chapter' but I was seriously tempted to do just that.
Then we get this dark chapter which left us hanging once again... pure evil.
Bow's lack of interest in sex turned this into a torture chapter; a disturbing kinky kind of torture (every time you described the dragonballs touching I'd think back to the series when they show them pulsating and glowing together and would think oh... that would so really happen if used that way...) But, those balls are so... big (wince).
My minds going off half cock wondering how the next chapter's going to be. Did Buu know what was happening and wait till Vegeta called for help to intervene? Did Bow do it to get to Buu, did he do it because he thought Vegeta had wronged Buu and need to be taught a lesson, or was he following Buu's orders? (Although personally if I was Bow and wanted Buu's attention I'd just absorb Vegeta, of course if that happened the Z senshi have all pretty much lost... not exactly a good ending).
Vegeta was pretty traumatized after the first time and he had Dende to try and help, now he's only got Buu. He doesn't even trust Buu, something monumental would have to happen for him to have any reason to trust Buu. I can't really see Vegeta broken after this (You're making him very strong and resilient, which I appreciate), more feral... certainly not calm and collect, plotting his next move while playing Buu's games.
Damn I can't see Vegeta coming out of this mentally intact at all. I can only imagine the first time he and Bulma try being intimate or if they get Goku back that little voice in the back of his head blaming him for what happen in the grove (Majin Vegeta all over again only 20X more pissed).
I really want to know where you're going to go with this. I hope your muse is good to you, life gives you all the time in the world to write, and with any luck we'll get another chapter sooner rather than later (fingers crossed).
Thanks for the read
b-chan
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From Ulrike on July 07, 2015
This chapter...got me. It really did. You really captured the true, filthy horror of Vegeta's position. He was being led along as a prisoner, tortured and utterly defeated. When he was walking behind Bow to the tree, I almost started crying. Vegeta just didn't seem like a warrior anymore, but someone who desperately needed help. Ah, God this was such a heart-wrenching chapter. I can't even really put it into words. I know I'll be re-reading it again.

The whole dragon balls thing was incredibly creative, but still so awful! You imaginative, evil writer! But still...was it Dende who called out to him in the end....or was it....Kakarot? Hmmm....

I don't see how Vegeta will ever be able to recover this! I've probably said it before, but even if he wins...how will he ever be able to move on from such horrific and humiliating tortures?!?

I cannot wait for the next chapter. Please update soon! Or I might die.
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From ANON - Talltree-san on July 03, 2015
I myself would have probably died from that throat torture Bow put Vegeta through :( . And it seems like no matter how hard Vegeta tried Bow could not be goaded into battling him instead.
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