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By : Robyn

From ANON - topbear1974 on December 25, 2010
Oh.my.god. table found out! In such a dramatic way. I wonder what would be his reaction. What vegeta would do when he know. Would it be a full war between vegeta'house and son's house? I felt like shot hit the fan.

However, I am glad goku has manage to get gohan back. At least they share some same understanding and feelings. The angery sex and the make up is hot, as per your normal standard. I love your way of describing saiyan hierarchies and how gohan as his father, don't care about it. I am so glad I have checked today. It is a great Christmas gift. Merry Christmas to you too.
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From ANON - topbear1974 on December 23, 2010
I read this chapter again. I really like gohan go mystic. That is pure glorious. I wonder when vegeta prroposed gohan to stay, did he mean it or just a way to goad goku? Did he want goku to jealous?for himself, not gohan. His reaction is gold, typical vegeta. Tarble is so cute in this fiction, make me sorry for his level. I hope he have someone too in future. Sorry about the typo. Computer broken. Type from mobile and no spell check. Really look forward to next chapter. You cannot hang us over the Christmas and new year.
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From ANON - topbear1974 on December 23, 2010
Oh oh saiyan love fight!!! I LOVE the tension moving under the scene. I felt for goku's care to gohan and gohan's dark feeling is surging, just waiting for an outlet. This chapter is one of the best dragon ball fanfiction I have ever read. When goku ask vegeta to help, I am not sure he saw the result. And vegeta, how I love his reaction! He will make sure you got more than what you bargain for. I love goku asert his authority. Both get a kick on the ass. Totally love this chapter. Can not wait for another update. Part of me wants to Chase you hard. Part of me don't want story to go quickly then I need to wait a long time before another story worth me checking every day. Look forward to anotherupdate.
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From TheGreatChickenbone on December 23, 2010
Ah, I loved this all the way through and then that last chapter had me more than excited to see what it so to come of it. I can't wait!
I absolutely loved it and the tension made it a thousand times better than it already was. I am very glad that I started reading this! I think you have done a wonderful job so far and I will be waiting for more. I will be sure to keep up with this story.
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From ANON - RinRins on December 19, 2010
WEE!! Another excellent chapter! I'm loving the originality of this fic so far. The setting on a ship and introductory of other Saiyajins makes this exciting and unique; not to mention the pairings. Considering the timeline and sitation, I think you're doing a wonderful job with the characters. No one is too OOC and everyone has that Saiyajin edge and attitude to them. Just perfect! I look forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - topbear1974 on December 14, 2010
Vegeta! Oh my god! Vegeta! Jump from the bed and running around. Behold yourself woman, this story is all about goku and gohan! So deep breeth deep breeth..... now i can talk.

I absolutely LOVE this chapter. I like your detailed description of the scenes. Made me enjoy the metal feast provided by your imagination. I love how you describe the reactions of the relevent party. It is all fun to read. I also love your way of starting a completely new thread. Appear randomly. But made the flow of the story so enticing. Like kale, rhonda, icejins. These stories woven into the main threath, made me anticipate what is going to happen. You are very good at arrange your plot. The reading is never boring.

Now come back to say the part most interested me. The triangles, vegeta and gohan and kakarotto. You made my day, or my evening! I absolutely love vegeta' reaction! The scene in the dinning room. That is actually quite sweet form vegeta side. I wonder what he would react if he knows the truth. He is right to be the leader of saiyans. However, when gohan followed goku on the bridge i was actually very excited, knowing the power level of the two. It felt like possess treasure while walking in the crowd. The amont of feeling of danger and excitement and security. I also love the family cosy feeling he share with goku while walking. I wonder what gohan would be in this battle. I so look forward to see him make his future among other saiyans.

The story vegeta came up to cover kakarotto works out fine with goku. Who said he is dumb. This is ingenius! I love the feeling that we know something underneath not the face value. I can see that he and goku being on and off as both are very strong characters. It takes great love and a lot compromise for this two to be together. While gohan is much easier. They are from the same house and share the same value. The two being together, actually can be a quite formidable force! They are very sweet together.

All in all i love the complecations, triangles this story brings. I also love when you post, you post a solid side chapter. Enough for me to have a satisfactory bed reading. Just make sure you are not worn off. Rubbing Macha's wrist.
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From ANON - luv-blonde-bunny on December 12, 2010
YAY!! loving it! ^^ please tell me, though, that Vegeta's not planning on anything w/ Gohan, is he? omg, if u do, i'm totally curious how Gohan's gonna get out of it. oh well, too soon to tell i guess ^^

keep on writing,

luv-blonde-bunny
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From ANON - Iuvenes on December 02, 2010
lol...just to be clear, all I did was pick out a few typos! :)
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From topbear1974 on December 02, 2010
An update!! Many thanks.

The tension between the son and father is high and I can see the mutual attraction is unstopable! Both are quite related and similar to each other and both are gorgeous guys it is not a surprise. I like how you describe the relationship between saiyans and other aliens. So Goku was not the leader of the alies but a useful soldier. I wonder how he and gohan can survive ane evolve in this war. And after war, would they go back? Chichi would be so mad!! So would Vegeta,hoho.

You have mentioned Goku walked out Vegeta's ship due to personnel complicated issues. Is that because the dominance issues? well it seems to be Vegeta's loss then. I wish him jealous in green, hahaha. Only kidding. I know this story is about kaka and gohan.

I especailly like your lemon they are not only hot but also serve to evolve the plot. They don't seem to be meaningless PWP (although i welcome that too). So far the two encounter all make sense-first is to meet each other the second is to get their feeling sorted. I like lemon like that, with feelings.

Again I absolutely love how your describe the feelings between them, reflected in the small actions like smell, hug and eyes contact. I can totally see the emotion underneath. and it is so nice to see them recognise each other. i look forward to reading more.
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From ANON - luv-blonde-bunny on December 01, 2010
omfg, i freaking love this story! i think i'm going to have to stalk the story now, just to catch it every time it updates ;) i'm dying to see how this story progresses. i'm curious if you'll have their relationship be the main point of conflict, or if you're going to make the war they're involved in become, well, involved. lol sorry - bad joke ^^;. but, i'm enjoying it so far, and am finding it WAY sexy. can't wait to read more ;)

keep on writing,

luv-blonde-bunny
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From topbear1974 on November 30, 2010
W0w!! This story is so promissing. I love the start. It seems the Saiyans are for new adventure. I love advendure and any fantasy idea come out of your wicked mind. I can see the pairing is Gohan/ goku. Although I am a hard core kaka/vege fan, cause it is from you, I actually quite look forward to see what happens between the two. I always loved Gohan. As a kid his life is so usual and he was the second/replacing hero for goku.

I love when kais talked about sons. It seems there will be new enamy in the galaxy. I was immediately hooked. When came to second chapter, the begining is so grand and detailed, I felt like a star war movie unveiled itself in front of my eyes (read twice in order to get hold of all details). I wonder the reason Vegeta and Goku go separate way. I can totally see that Goku wants to be the leader of the "inpure". With Gohan onboard he should be much well equipped. ^:^. I also love the encounter of son and the father. Oh. my. god. Your way of writing made me felt so pleased and conflcted for them at the same time, and hot.

Goku still love Chichi so he even want a whore in her form. I felt bad for a minute for him. But I dont feel bad at all when he and gohan being together. you keep them very in character. The passion between them strangely made me feel clean (unlike vegeta's which is always some kind of dark). I know it is weired as it is from a incest yet it actually felt angelic (hope you know what Imean).

I totally love this story. The setting is complicated and inspiring and enticing. The describtion of the emotion is brilliant, fitting well in the situation. The plot is very interesting. I really look forward to read more.
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