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By : CardDragonBall

From Polymer on February 16, 2007
Excellent story. Very sexy and very V/B characterwise. Can't stop enjoying reading it!
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From ANON - Karista on June 27, 2004
I'm an avid Bulma/Vegeta fan and I have to say, this is one of the most well written, accurate stories that I've had the pleasure of reading. I enjoyed it so much, I'm now inclined to read the rest of your fics, even though I'm not that big of a DBZ slash fan. You truly do not give yourself enough credit for your ability to write het, you're way better than many authors I've read that believe they have a good handle on the subject. Keep up the good work, this story has found a place in my favorites.
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From ANON - Getarian on April 30, 2004
Just read it all through to the end. Really loved this Card. Loved the way you portrayed Vegeta and Bulma. Sorry to see that's it's all finished, but it ended nicely. Liked that.

Just some stuff that I especially enjoyed:

"�Hn.� He said. Probably would have said much more, but since he was naked, his reaction to her inadvertent wet-T-shirt contest was doing all the talking for him."

Loved the way Bulma tracked Vegeta down and found him in the shower and decided to join him, whilst reeking with sarcasm.

Loved Vegeta's reaction to Bulma's wet T-shirt. :-D

�So, curious about our son?�
�Why would I be, woman?� there was a slight pause, �We�ve both already seen him.�

LOL! Very Vegeta. :-)

"Watched his eyes drop from her face (yes, unlike Goku, he did manage to hold her glare for a little while before he gave up all pretenses and just stared at her breasts)"

*Chuckle* Gotta give him points for at least trying to maintain eye contact, when it's obvious that his eyes are just twitching to rove a little more in the southerly direction. :-)

"Damn sexy Saiyan."

Mmm, totally agree. :-)

Always love the lemons. Loved the imagery in this:

"Felt her body rippling around him and he paused for a second, opened his eyes to look up at her, mouth still around her breast, thumb still stroking her-knowingly-and there was a strange half-smirk that he made."

Amazingly sexy scene. :-)

Love that Vegeta had been wondering about Bulma and his child, but 't 't want to openly acknowledge that fact to her.

That's definitely a Vegeta trait. :-)

Really enjoyed seeing a part of the shower scene from Vegeta's point of view.

Loved how Bulma finally got annoyed with Goku ogling her breasts and told him to go and ogle ChiChi's for a change. Hate that she gave him that idea, 'cause *shudder* Goku/ChiChi sex... G/V works so much better ;-)

"Kakarot�s child did not have strange colored hair. Why did his? How did it turn lavender anyway? The woman�s hair was blue. His was black. That did not make purple."

*Chuckle* Ah, the mysteries of Saiyan genetics... or, blue-haired humans. :-)

"They had wrapped it up in a blanket, but it was still covered in questionable fluids."

LOL! "Questionable fluids" Can definitely 'hear' Vegeta in this. :-)

"...the idiot nurse would have dropped him on the head. (The woman had told him the reason Kakarot was the way he was�er�was because he had been dropped on his head. There was no way he was going to let his son turn into that moron.)"

ROTFL! Loved this. Can definitely see Vegeta thinking this. :-)

Really loved that Bulma woke up to find that Vegeta was standing there holding Trunks, nothing mushy about the scene, you kept Vegeta beautifully in character, and managed to make it extremely touching at the same time. I loved it. :-)

"For the first six or seven months he was less than impressed by the kid. In fact, it was rather boring. It slept and ate and pooped. Nothing inspiring there."

LOL! Loved this. Totally loved every moment after this point. From Vegeta developing an interest in his son, when he started to show signs of a developing personality, his pride in the fact that he felt that his son was definitely Saiyan.

Loved how Bulma just marched into the gravity chamber with a goo covered Trunks, handed him over to Vegeta and told him, it was his turn to look after the baby for a while, before turning and leaving. Loved Vegeta with Trunks... so sweet :-)

Totally loved the image of Vegeta, Bulma and Trunks, in the shower. A truly wonderful and loving family scene. Loved the image of Vegeta holding baby Trunks, while Bulma washed Vegeta down. So close and loving.

�Look at us,� Bulma said with a sigh, �We�re Mommy and Daddy now.�
"Vegeta snorted. �He is not calling me Daddy.�"

LOL! No, that doesn't work at all. Father sounds just perfect. Although, I loved the way chibi Trunks called him, dad. :-)

Yeah, loved that ending. Loved this fiThanThanks fhis his Card, it was truly wonderful :-)

Enjoyed the end dialogues... they cracked me up :-)

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From ANON - Hope_Poe26 on April 29, 2004
Just because I thought it was funny... I thought of letting you know you did a great job conjuring up a M/F story.
So... is that it? 'Cause that doesn't sound like your style.

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From Makota2112 on April 28, 2004
Yay!! That was a great ficcy. Hey, don't feel bad about ending it here, a fic is done when it is done.

Thanks so much for providing me with a source of entertainment for the last ten days or so, I do appreicate it.

*claps*
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From ANON - Pixelgoddess on April 27, 2004
Feels guilty for making Card cry - but you perfectly caught the cluelessness that is Goku. Doesn't mean I don't appreciate him. But...(drags a cursing Vegeta out)...compare him to this excellent specimen of fiery male Saiyan-ness. No contest. We keep Goku for sweet and hugs, but we keep Vegeta for lust and passion.
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From ANON - Shiro Ryu on April 27, 2004
I don't know whether to say "Damn, its the end" or "Yeh, a story that has been given an ending, and, not just abandoned"! You are a very good writer! Thank you so much for your story, if you ever write another DBZ het. fic. I'll be there! (sorry, I have a hard time seeing Vegeta, Goku, Piccolo, or Krillen in yaoi situations. I know, lack of imagination on my part. ^_^ ) Anywhavehave fun writing!
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 27, 2004
Hi, I've been waiting for you...I got a little bored waiting for class to start and all. I thought that that was a good ending. It was so sweet to have them all in the shower together. I could just see little Trunks being all adorable and stuff. Sigh...almost make me want a kid...almost. He he.

Absolutely time for more slash though, Kay?
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From ANON - Makota on April 27, 2004
Damn it! I tried twice to review to the last chappies, but I kept getting a 'too many connections' crapcrap.

Anyway, muchos kudos to you for writing the Goku/Chichi smut, hat's off to your bravery. See, it wasn't so bad. In fact, I'd say you did a damn good job!

Is it me, or does Goku seem to gather his wits more when he's horny? Feed that man some Viagra!

Nicely done.
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From ANON - Pixelgoddess on April 26, 2004
Goku and Chichi in this story - it is like watching a train wreck...(don't worry - not a negative comment on your writing) He is so clueless and I really feel sorry for Chichi. "Move!" Goku has never been my favorite - I am a huge Vegeta fan - and you have captured exactly why. You paint the characters so well, it is hard to believe you haven't seen every episode. I know you couldn't resist getting Goku and Chichi together, and I love Bulma's reaction to Goku's eye-fuck. Poor Vegeta in baggy pants. Okay - next chappie. :)
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 26, 2004
Oooowww! That was very good. I must say that I have never read a Goku/ChiChi lemon. So this is a first for me. It was so cute though. I still don't like them together though. Your Goku is definetly a bit slower than mine, but I find that utterly irresistable. I really loved this chapter. I liked being able to get into Goku's head for once, very good. And the breast fascination is hilarious. It was so loverly.
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From ANON - Shiro Ryu on April 26, 2004
Actually, I'm glad you did a Goku/Chichi lemon. It was a nice change of pace. Not to mention that you managed to keep him simple and still make him sexual(I am impressed!). Usually you have to give his character a little more brains in order to make him appear sexual. I look forward to your next chapter! ^_^
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From ANON - stella on April 25, 2004
thats funny, bulma manages to give ve a p a piece of her mind while still getting some. thats my girl. good job, can't wait for more. i really love ur story
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From ANON - jaygoose on April 25, 2004
Yay, you updated! Joy! It's been a long torcherous day and a little Bulma/Vegeta banging goes a long way! I think that its cute the way those two interact. I can not see Vegeta a doctor's office with the blue haired onna though. Hmm...A Goku and ChiChi lemon...as much as I hate those two together I can't help but find the prospect interesting.

You probaby won't believe this, but I started writing the The History of Kalika only after playing my brother's DBZ Bodukai game over last Christmas Break, I hadn't seen not one show. It was wierd. I knew nothing about the show but even then it seemed that Vegeta kicked ass and he soo belonged with Goku. But now of course I by and watch anything Dragonball related I can get my hands on...its research people. ;)
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From ANON - Ginia on April 24, 2004
OK - now that I've read the chapter... *reaches out and gently taps Card on each cheek* A ChichiXGoku is not what you want to do unless you really LIKE Chichi with Goku... I did that once and even though it came out HOT - it still gives me nightmares.

Another great chapter - having Vegeta say she wasn't showing yet is exactly what would make her smile! Been there - hated that. How come my hubby couldn't figure out what Vegeta did so easily?
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