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By : CardDragonBall

From cueball2 on June 18, 2004

He would bet his no-longer existent tail on the fact that Chichi turned into a bobcat when you stripped her. She probably grew claws and spawned a black leather whip. -ROFLMAO I could just picture Chichi doing that too. It just fits her personallity too.

Then he turned and walked away, unconcerned that Kakarot was staring after him, still blushing, and with the added burden of arousal that hung heavy in the air around the large one. - How cruel! Manipulating jerk. He knows it too. *chuckles*

Keep up the great work. Guku wearing personality shirts??? LOL

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From ANON - jaygoose on June 17, 2004
LMAO! Oh my Goku might have gotten himself into something. *crosses fingers*
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From ANON - Macha on June 17, 2004
I love it. I really, really do. "You've been watching me for twelve days straight....It has ceased to amuse me," OMG, that was sooooo Vegeta like.

Why, Goku, why? You really had to go and ask THAT question. LMAO

I have no idea what Krillin should do. OR what he is going to do. I wonder how 18 will feel about the whole situation if he decides to spill the beans.

Krillin is right though. You don't go messing with Goku's falmiy and friends while he is alive. Come to think about it, you don't go messing with them when he's dead either.
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on June 17, 2004
She wasn�t using him and he wasn�t using her, and somehow the perversity of that made him want Vegeta more. --that is insane. I love it. He is addicted. He has someone who will love him at their own will and he wants Vegeta who seems like he doesnt even like the guy.

Forgive a lot of things, Goku could, but you didn�t screw around with the man�s family and friends. Nothing pissed him off more. --loved thine ine and so true

Besides it allowed him to get away with things that �smarter� people wouldn�t be able to. Like watching Vegeta. He watched him a lot lately. Watched him do nothing mostly.--aww he is a stalker how cute. But he cares I'm glad someone is looking out for Vegeta, or at least trying to. Goku just came back and for 12 days has been watching Vegeta that shows me how good of a friend or dedicated he can be.

and Vegeta was starting to lose weight.--no *sobs* he is depressed...my poor Vegeta

there stood Vegeta, arms crossed over his chest, smirking and looking highly amused to have found him, Son Goku, spying on him.--LoL

Krillin (still trying to figure that one out.) --rofl!

Is that a royalty thing? Do you have to be so stubborn when I�m just trying to help you?�--lmao!

�So,� he said this, fully realizing it was probably a bad thing for him to say, �If you had sex again you�d be hungry?�--O_O *crosses fingers* please oh please let the answer to this be yes. hehe Goku is so cute asking tha
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�Kakarot, are you offering something?�--again I repeat let the answer be yes...yes... you are so evil for ending it right there. evil I tell you!

end notes lol
^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 16, 2004
�You need to eat, Vegeta. At least that.� The amused look hadn�t come back, but the fists loosened up a bit and Vegeta wasn�t shaking with annoyance quite as noticeably as he had been a moment before. Which just went to prove that whatever happened between him and Bulma was bad enough that the man obviously had not gotten over it yet. �Come on, you ate all that food after�� Hm. What to sa�You�You� Krillin��

�I was hungry then.�

�So,� he said this, fully realizing it was probably a bad thing for him to say, �If you had sex again you�d be hungry?� LMAO.

Oh, look, the amusement was back in full-force. The arms crossed over Vegeta�s chest again and he looked at Goku from head to toe in that �I�m undressing you with my eyes� sort of way that made him want to take a bath or something because it made him very uncomfortable. He shivered a little as he stood there and realized just how much he probably should not have said that sentence. A smirk, a real bark of laughter and Vegeta said: �Kakarot, are you offering something?� - ROFLMAO. *dies*

I could jpictpicture to look on Goku's face after that question.

Great chapter. Krillin's thoghts and emotions were described very well. Beware! Small people tend to squeeze into small spaces. *smirk*

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From ANON - Sarkywoman on June 16, 2004
Goku had better be offering something. His Prince needs some lovin' and he deserves everything! SPOIL HIM!

Ah-hem. Sorry about that. I don't think Goku would go into it that lightly though, even if he is trying to help Vegeta. So he's probably like, 'what? No!' Then Vegeta will get pissed off....

Krillin: Then I'll show up and have sex with Vegeta.

Sarky: GAH! GO AWAY! *sprays Krillin with bug spray*
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on June 15, 2004
ok...Vegeta staring at Goku was just plain scary and creepy.
Then when he pushed Krillen off and told him not to come back I kinda laughed and thought to myself 'yeah b/c Goku's back' hehe...

I loved when Goku thought of Vegeta...the sight of tongue on his lips..etc...that was so yum eyes darker hotter! *dies*
I love how you word things.

lmao at Vegeta not thinking of sex with guys but much less do it...

hm so Vegeta wants to see how far Goku's innocence will go...*thinks* me too! I want to see too!

LoL at Goku when he says I gotta go okay okay! etc....
but naked Vegeta *drools* that is such a good thing.
He is damn near irrisitable in this fic! he is dark, angst filled, naked a lot hehe, a badass.
He is a sex god! he should join a union!!!!
lol at end notes!

Oh *sobs* I might havlledlled Goku by tossing lemons on them...? I knew I should have just poured lemonade over them instead.
^.*
-MB-
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From ANON - Mrs S. J. on June 12, 2004
Yay ! Vegeta made Krillen go away ! Yay ! ~realizes she sounds like Special Ed from Crank Yankers~ Of course Goten and Trunks arent straight silly person....Trunks just hasnt realized how good of a friend Goten is and that he really can tell him everything at which point Goten will comfort him by shredding his clothes and having his wicked way with him. Duh ! Ooooh, Kakarrott was looking..naughty naughty.. I noticed a conversation about sex with Vegeta.... I would have sex with Vegeta in the blink of an eye...mmmmmmmmmm ~drools~ Yummy Vegeta. ~Gets lost in her own little lemony dream. Computer short circuits because of the drool ~

~Angel
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From ANON - angry monkey on June 12, 2004
Yay- Goku's back wheeeee. Man, this story has already grown on me, like a spider laying it's eggs in my brain, and thoose eggs have hatched into to curiosity. *Happy Sigh*. Is Piccoloo going to make any humourous appearances in this as well? If he turns white at Goku and Veggie, I dread to think what would happen if he heard about Vegeta and Krillen. Maybe it would be like chemelons on white paper (they apparently explode).
As for syrup, it's dark chocolate syrup on chocolate covered rice crispies (choco snaps). I'm such a pie. MMMMmmmm.....pie.
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From ANON - macha on June 12, 2004
Well, that was really a shock for Goku, now wasn't it. Hehe, I think that he DID like what he saw, well, maybe he'd like something er, er, but I will just have to wait and see.

I liked this chapter.
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From Shan on June 11, 2004
::looks up from huddling in a corner:: 'Is Krillin gone now? Is it safe to read about Vegeta's sexy body?'
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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 11, 2004
Goku with his mout haning open at what he saw. LOL

LOL
More!
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From jaygoose on June 11, 2004
Oww...Goku is back and he's not with Chichi. This is encouraging. But Vegeta is especially dark in this one. I love a Dark Prince. Too bad Trunks and Goten are straight otherwise this is a very interesting story. I take the Trunks and Goten thing back. It's good to have a change of pace every once in a while. Poor Krillin looks like he won't be getting anymore Geta lovin' anytime soon. Heh heh...
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From ANON - Webtester01 on June 10, 2004
Yay, more plot.

Great chapter.

Well I better post chapter 11 now.

Finaly I'm finished with that chapter. It took forever.
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From ANON - macha on June 09, 2004
Interesting. Don't know if I like it or not yet. I guess I will have to keep reading to find out, huh?

Despite that, the story is written very well, and I like the POV's making up the story rather than just a story kind of story. (Did that make any kind of scence?)
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