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Reviews for Chess

By : Robyn

From TristaML on July 20, 2012
It's so funny to see the characters that we know from DBZ like Dr. Gero and the andriod in a story like this that sort of changes the meaning of that character and the relationships between them all, but you do such a good job of rewriting a character into the story itself and redifining that role while still holding true and making it entertaining. I can't help but enjoy seeing them all in the chess-tournament scenerio and how they seem to come together.

At first I wasn't sure if I was going to be interested in reading it because it was very a/u but once I started I just kept being compelled to go to the next chapter. It flows very well. The relationship that Chi Chi creates with Vegeta is cute and it's nice how it's happier type of fiction where they're all in the perfect position to be making plays with each other at this point in their lives.

I like Eddie and the unexpected relationship that you developed between Chi Chi and Raditz, and I LOVED Vegeta and Goku practically fucking on the floor, Goku much more interested in Vegeta's type of games obviously! And one my favorite things in the story was the mention of Bunni and her hubby, I always like those two :)

All in all it was fun read and I'm glad I didn't pass it over
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From mjmusiclover on June 18, 2011
an awesome , beautifully well written fic :D
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From ANON - chandu on February 27, 2011
Loved this. It was kind of... adorable? I couldn't help but picture the characters as "chibis" from time to time as I read. You are a great writer - thanks for creating this!
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From maegerakawaii on April 20, 2010
This is kind of bittersweet. On one hand, I'm sad it's over. On the other, I'm happy that it's over and ends happily. Hopefully you continue to write such entertaining stories. Thank you for posting this one. Peace!
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From ANON - topbear on April 19, 2010
You finished it!! I read everything except the last chapter before. The way you end it put a smile on my lip. this is indeed a very sweet story. I love the interaction between the two. it did feel like they are playing game, and reach the heart of each other eventually.

well done for a good light heart story. I wish I could read more.
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From ANON - achillona on April 19, 2010
you are so crafty! and yes! I will say it for you: SEQUEL! SEQUEL! Sequel!!!
you cannot end it here! too much left unsaid and undone!

Please, PLEASE, PLEASE continue!
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From maegerakawaii on April 12, 2010
That was a lot happening all at once. Now, I'm really curious about what Bardock meant about seeing the future. I need to know what is going to happen next. I can't wait for your next update.
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From ANON - achillona on April 05, 2010
wow! that was quite the show!
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From maegerakawaii on April 05, 2010
I wonder how the rest of the crowd felt about that little performance. If I was one of them, I would have certainly thought it was HOT. I would have even tried to stop Bulma from stopping the two. Great chapter! Thank you! Please keep the updates coming.
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From Achillona77 on April 03, 2010
excellent as always. can't wait to see bardock's expression when he learns that not only has his lost son been found, but both his sons are marrying royalty!

update soon!
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From maegerakawaii on March 29, 2010
Shy Raditz is adorable. Way to go Briefs parents! Mothers always have a way of finding out EVERYTHING about her children. I can't wait to see how Goku and Vegeta will move on from their little misunderstanding. I hope it will be a steamy make-up. AHEM! XD Thank you for the update.
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From IuvenesL on March 28, 2010
Ooh, I missed this update! It's the only story outside of yaoi that I'm actually following, lol. You should post update notices on the Salon!

What really reminded me of MLS in this story was the fact that all of the main characters are still in it, and tied to each other, but for different reasons, and circumstances have led to the canon couples not getting together. Of course, a big difference is that yours follows more canonical logic (hence the lack of demis). Also, I think Card didn't use Yamcha because she doesn't like him. Beyond that...yeah, not much similarity. But that was one of the things that I liked about MLS, and it works well in this fic too, though of course I agree it's a simpler story.

As for the water...referring to the breach of etiquette, when you order water, and the way it seemed to play into the dynamic of the scene with Cicely (though I suppose that might not be what you intended, seeing as how the competitors might not be expected to drink alcohol).
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From maegerakawaii on March 22, 2010
GAH! Why must there always be misunderstandings? NOOOOO!!! Yet I love the tension at the same time. Please update soon. I'm dying to find out what Goku and Vegeta will do next to get past the current awkwardness.
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From ANON - Gigo on March 18, 2010
Ohhh i read this last night its so cute. Ive never read a dbz story that actualy seemes as if it was writen by someone older than like 12. You gave them intresting personalities and dient stick with their typical dbz attitudes. Kepp updating love to read more. :)
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From IuvenesL on March 16, 2010
I really didn't think I was going to get into this one all that much, since it's smutless. But it turns out that I am a sucker for a G/V hookup story, and this one is believable to me, despite being strange. In some ways, Vegeta seems OOC, but who knows how he would have turned out in the situation? Frieza taken care of, and no idiot third class kicking his ass to make him go all veiny. And Radditz. LOL! Such a different reunion...and believable, for the same reasons. Your pairings are cute - it's almost a stupid question to ask if you were influenced by Card's MLS on this one (since it's in your recommended reading, last I recall) - but definitely the strangest of them is Bulma and 17!! That cracks me up. Also, your one canon couple is inspired. And one great thing about this fic being smutless is that there won't be any Krillin sex!

Also. Yay for the Monkey's Paw parallels in chapter 1 (pretty sure the fable is way older than that, but that's a nice version of it). Yay for a bunch of little continuity details, but I think my favorite was the water. :)
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