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That was cool. I loved the ice cream bit. Quite steamy. Well I guess as steamy as you can get with ice cream until it becomes no exsistent. Anyway now on to lines I loved:

Big hand touched his stomach. Bif maf made a pleased little noise.
Vegeta removed the hand, bent it back, caused bones to make nasty kingking noises.

Nobody touched him. Especially not his stomach. He wasn’t a fucking good-luck troll where you rubbed their stupid stomach and made a wish. He was a Saiyan.

What else can I say but sheer genius and fucking hilarious?

Now...More Smut...Please?

Yeah, gotta love those transitionpterpters. Are yours as annoying to write as mine are? Because mine are. Arggg! Anywho, nice chapter. I feel all warm and tingly inside. God, I hope that\'s not gas. That would be really embarassing. :)

Okay, here it is...whittle free ;-)

What a wonderful opening to this chapter...I\'m in lemon heaven :-)

\"As it turned out, Vegeta didn’t need the sense to yell at the woman, because Kakarot swiped out his arm, broke a table leg, grabbed the chair and yanked it out from under her—all without even pausing in his thrusting-\"

Impressive! I have a sneaking suspicion that if Bulma suddenly came up with a workable antidote for her \'Hormone Therapy\' Vegeta would probably tell her to sod off! LOL

Loved Goku\'s “Out!” and “Mine” Completely loved the lap sitting and staring. Definitely loved Vegeta resting his head on Goku\'s shoulder, sighing and allowing himself to be held. Laughed and sympathised with Vegeta as he acknowledged what his round of gloating had yielded...Everything felt so alive...damn! I love this fic :-)

Laughed at Bulma\'s reaction to being evicted from her kitchen.

\"Sure, she thought vindicitively, screw on my kitchen floor and kick me out.\"

Gotta feel some sympathy for her, when you get right down to it, that had to be damned embarrassing. LOL! I keep thinking, maybe she shouldn\'t be such a voyeur, then I think,...two hot Saiyans going at it...hard to remove yourself from that scene...besides Goku shouldn\'t be such an exhibitionist...poor Vegeta! LOL

Yes...Vegeta definitely has a perfect body :-)

Loved Bulma\'s reference to Goku and Vegeta as the \'Horny ones\' *chuckles*

LOL Okay, I get Krillin sticking his fingers in his e..bu..but the squeezing his eyes shut was a crack-up!

Nooo, I don\'t want Vegeta to lose his ‘come fuck me now’ smell. His scent has been wafting nicely through my computer...bring it back now damnit!

Okaaay, I\'m normal again...please disregard above statement. :-)

Sigh, doesn\'t Goave ave such a wonderful view of family life? I want to go and live with them...and maybe nudge Goku out of the bed and snuggle up to the Prince...Yes, sounds like a plan to me :-)

Seriously, another wonderful chapter, you seem to bring everyone to life so easily. Everything flows, the characters, their surroundings, their actions, everything is so well described without anything being overdone. I know that when this all ends, I am going to keep coming back to this, time and time again.

\"Oh, and I never made it to the bebe saga. I watch DBZ on tv, and they often skip episodes just to annoy me.\"

I hate that! I have DBZ on tape, and whilst I completely understand that both yourself and Jaygolikelike to possess the whole collection, I really don\'t see myself buying a single episode of GT...The opening credits, still gives me the horrors. I also have very, very deep fears regarding rumours about a live action movie...Maybe one day, they\'ll come up with another series along the lines of DBZ, complete with correctly coiffured Vegeta, and a less geeky Trunks (what where they thinking with those shorts?)but until then, I much prefer to leave it all at the end of DBZ and enjoy the wonderful world of fanfiction :-)

I really love this fic! It\'s so original! Keep up the good work and...
UPDATE!!! UPDATE!!!! UPDATE!!!!

YEAH!!!!
It was after the Great Baka had thrust into him that Vegeta realized the woman was still sitting at the table. That was so funny, the great baka...*shakes head* rofl

“Out!” and “Mine” I always love when Goku says that! ^.^

So he rested his head on that shoulder, sighed, let himself be held. The Ouji is just too cute...*sighs*

It would be very hard for me to pick a fave of all your fics, but I have to say I really, really, love this one. I love how everything is turning out, and I love those twins! They rock!

I also like the fact the Goku wants to be a real saiyajin family....that\'s so sweet.
I\'t \'t wait to for the next chap!
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Oh Gods, this is probably going to be my longest review...I\'m really going to have to learn to whittle.

LOL! Straight off, first paragraph...loved Vegeta\'s thoughts, particularly:

\"But his Father never really stopped to say: \"Son, women are pregnant for nine months, and this will be vitally important to you in the future.\"\"

*chuckle* I can definitely see an equally evil grin appear as Vegeta had his \'ingeniously evil idea.\'

Okay, :-) completely lost it at this point:

\"Preparing him for what exactly? Because while Goku appreciated a good stretch as much as anyone, he didn’t really see the sense of doing it first thing in the morning when they could be having sex.\" ROTFL!

Damn, as much as I loved the fact that Vegeta got to have his evil way with Goku, I couldn\'t help but feel a shiver of....God knows what to be honest...(but it was pleasant,) when I read this:

\"Goku realized that this was a role-reversal. Realized that if wanted Vegeta to desist and get himself under Goku like he belonged that Vegeta would have no option but to do as he was told, really.\"

I love it when Goku gets dominating thoughts, even better when they become actions...I\'m not sure completely why, I mean, Vegeta\'s my favourite, you\'d think I\'d want him to be seme...go figure. :-)

\"Genius! Vegeta was a brilliant man.\" Yay! You go Vegeta.

\"Vegeta just smirked. Turnabout was fair play and all that human bullshit.\" LOL!

Loved Vegeta\'s \"MINE. MINE! Mine!\" I know he probably meant it every bit as much as Goku, felt all the same feelings and all, but there was a sense of, for want of a better word, \'payback\' in the words...which was cool, it\'s something I could imagine Vegeta doing after hearing it all those times from Goku...even though he probably loves the Saiyan side of it, it probably rankled his proud side. :-)

Altogether, another fine lemon :-)

Loved Bulma\'s reaction! LOL

\"Fish, she was sure, looked more elegant than her. Because just the image of him… With Goku under him… And LORD, the noises they made!\" *chuckles* Oh yeah!

Vegeta\'s proud strutting...LOL. Ah, as much as I love uke Vegeta, there is no way I would want to deny him this moment :-)

*chuckles* I see that Goku is back in form, informing Krillin of Vegeta\'s impending motherhood. The fight followed by Bulma\'s warning to Krillin, followed by his reaction was a joy to read :-)


\"I was really hoping I didn’t confuse people with the twins. \"

Wasn\'t the least bit confusing to me, well written as always. I loved them, and I loved the fact that Goten couldn\'t keep his mouth shut about things and then Vegeta Jr, splurted out more information whilst attempting to shut his brother up. LOL

\"I haven’t watched very much of GT, but I saw enough of it to dislike it mostly.\"

Erk! I haven\'t seen it all either, I got about 3/4 of the way through the Baby (or Bebe) saga and just couldn\'t take anymore...I tried to stick with it for Vegeta\'s sake, but I couldn\'t...not that there was much of Vegeta, as Vegeta, anyway...first that damn moustache hai haircut, and then \'weird looking\' and \'annoying sounding\' \'Bebe Vegeta\'

Blows raspberry at the PTB behind the stupid show.

Okay, I thought that that was extremely enjoyable. Vegeta\'s evil idea didn\'t turn out exactly the way he had planned did it? And who the hell did Bulma go and screw anyway? U may have made it a bit obvilous but I am known to be a little slow on the up take. He He. ;)

Another review. I know. But I had to comment on GT. I think it is as stupid as the next person but I still can\'t help myself everytime a new tape comes out I go and buy it. There is just something in me that says that a Dragonball collection is not complete until you have GT too. So sad. You have to take the good and the bad when you truly love something I suppose. Anyway, that was just my bit. And I agree there is just not enough Vegeta in that show. too too is so sad. :(

Damn! My last review for \'More of us\' ended up looking like a novel, so I thought I\'d break this review up for the individual chapters.

Okay, love the twins! Not exactly mysterious like Trunks are they? LOL No wonder they caused themselves to cease to exist...errr, sort of. :-)

The fact that the twins didn\'t feel like fighting the androids was a crack-up! So NOT their parents.

Lemony Goodness:

\"Then he was flipped onto his back, divested of his clothes and covered with a great mound of shaking happy Kakarot.\" LOL!

Another wonderful lemon! And damn, when Goku pulled back and balanced on one arrm, hovering over his Vegeta, and just stared, filled with love...and then Vegeta stared back, feeling the same, it briefly robbed me of my breath. Wonderful!

\"Gk: Great sex! Yellow sex!\" LOL

I very much enjoyed this chapter, lot\'s of fun :-)

LOL Still love those twins!

\"Thankfully the sheets didn’t slip or disgusting would meet a whole new level of gross.\" LOL

Ah, some mysteries explained. I love the fact that the reason Goku had remained in SSJ mode even while sleeping, was due to his protective instinct where his mate was concerned.

ROTFLMAO! I loved when the twins explained about the other timeline...ALL of it, but my favourites have to be these two:

\"Oh, and for some reason, years after that Dad gets turned back into a kid and he travels around with Trunks and Pan. Still trying to figure that out…\"

“Yeah,” Goten agreed, “And Mom grows that stupid ass moustache and cuts his hair.”

I totally agree with Goten, it WAS a stupid ass moustache! God I hate GT!

Lemony Goodness:

\"Just when he went to wash his hair, the shower curtain opened and the very vision of naked, bronzed perfection stepped in. Sweaty. Naked.\" Drools, want Vegeta...must have Vegeta.

Gods, the shower scene was incredible, Goku moves and Vegeta responds and not a word is spoken, just the moans of pleasure and the total need for each other, completely in sync.


\"Gk: It isn’t going to end is it?!\"

\"Vegeta: Logically it must.\"

Nooo! Don\'t listen to him Goku!

\"Too bad they never got along that well while they were fighting on the show.\"

It would have definitely been nice if the PTB had concentrated a bit more on a deeper friendship between the last two Saiyans...but it was not to be....sigh! Or did you mean, too bad that they never worked out their friendship, in bed, on thow? ow? LOL Hmmm, could have been interesting, and would certainly give a whole new meaning to Vegeta\'s \'Big Bang Attack\' LOL