rate_review Reviews

There are tons of typos and grammatical errors. Punctuation impedes the reading experience, so you might want to go through this one more time if you still have plans on continuing. It's probably why it was rated so low, not because it's something nobody would want to read but because it's just so hard to read when the punctuation is all over the place, or worse, nonexistent.

I would have liked to have read more. I felt especially jipped when you jumped through Bardock and Serina. I'm guessing that the twins are Kakarott and Turles? I would absolutely have kittens if someone wrote a Young!Turles fanfic ha

Finally, a Bardock fic. I have been looking for one for awhile (I've only read a handfull), so pleeeeeeease update! You gotta continue this! ^^ Update! Update! ::Gives Son Grin:: -THE_RAGE_BEAT *aka-BlackTigerG2*

Really great!! why dont you continue? I love bardock/toma pairings. wrote one myself. but anyway, couldn\'t think of anything wrong with it other than there\'s only one chapter!! :o)