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April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Shit, this is good, okay, it's more than good, actually, hehe, coz I love it so far! And you haven't updated for about 3 years now, what happened?!
Anyway, I feel like I should tell you that I've only read the manga up to vol.4 (so I haven't really seen much of Envy yet, if one doesn't count the blissful but short appearance he made in the beginning of said volume) and I've seen the anime, which I loved and I do of course love the manga too! But I'm sure I'll love it even more after reading the whole lot and I've to say that even though I like both of Envy's portrayal in the manga and the anime, I've to favor the anime one because of the simple fact that I really haven't seen very much of him in the manga yet.
But also because of the majority of all the Envy/Ed fics out there, has/are being portrayed with Envy from the anime, rather than the manga! And also because I love him a little bit more as the raving psychopath that he is in the anime or at least, he's a lot more scary (which I believe) in that one. But also beacause of the fact that he hates his father (Hohenheim) so much, which concludes him to hate Ed and Al as well, (which also means that they're his half-brothers) (especially Ed, I believe)! And Ed hates him back with a passion, that helps of course, hehe.
Okay, so back to the review; I've already mentioned that I really enjoyed what I've read so far and I'd love to read more, as I'm sure others'd love as well! Hint, hint, hehe!
Anyhow, I think the plot was very good and the portrayal of the charcters were great as well, maybe they were be a little OOC but not much, so never mind that, eh! I really loved the interaction between Envy/Ed, coz that was awesome and the smut, let me say; "Whoa, that was excellent and very hot, hell, it was probably one of the best I've read recently, and that should say something, eh", in other words, well done!
A few things which kinda bugged me about the fic; the fact that you kinda didn't use any commas in your sentences, (mostly in the latter chapters) it made the whole reading experience a little annoying, actually.
Another thing was that there were some weird typos in the text at times and some words were also typed two times in a row.
And finally the fact that you refer to Envy as he's a grown up man, well sometimes and I kinda feel that it's a bit wrong, coz Envy's favorite form is rather youthful, he's tops one or two years older than Ed, (in looks, of course) so that would also make him a teenanger, eh!
So maybe you ought to go and re-edit the fic and fix the minor mistakes and typos, just a tip!
All in all I really liked this fic and I really think if you've the time and the will; you should definitely continue and write more, hopefully soon coz I want to read more and find out what going to happen next!
So please write more!
Anyway, I feel like I should tell you that I've only read the manga up to vol.4 (so I haven't really seen much of Envy yet, if one doesn't count the blissful but short appearance he made in the beginning of said volume) and I've seen the anime, which I loved and I do of course love the manga too! But I'm sure I'll love it even more after reading the whole lot and I've to say that even though I like both of Envy's portrayal in the manga and the anime, I've to favor the anime one because of the simple fact that I really haven't seen very much of him in the manga yet.
But also because of the majority of all the Envy/Ed fics out there, has/are being portrayed with Envy from the anime, rather than the manga! And also because I love him a little bit more as the raving psychopath that he is in the anime or at least, he's a lot more scary (which I believe) in that one. But also beacause of the fact that he hates his father (Hohenheim) so much, which concludes him to hate Ed and Al as well, (which also means that they're his half-brothers) (especially Ed, I believe)! And Ed hates him back with a passion, that helps of course, hehe.
Okay, so back to the review; I've already mentioned that I really enjoyed what I've read so far and I'd love to read more, as I'm sure others'd love as well! Hint, hint, hehe!
Anyhow, I think the plot was very good and the portrayal of the charcters were great as well, maybe they were be a little OOC but not much, so never mind that, eh! I really loved the interaction between Envy/Ed, coz that was awesome and the smut, let me say; "Whoa, that was excellent and very hot, hell, it was probably one of the best I've read recently, and that should say something, eh", in other words, well done!
A few things which kinda bugged me about the fic; the fact that you kinda didn't use any commas in your sentences, (mostly in the latter chapters) it made the whole reading experience a little annoying, actually.
Another thing was that there were some weird typos in the text at times and some words were also typed two times in a row.
And finally the fact that you refer to Envy as he's a grown up man, well sometimes and I kinda feel that it's a bit wrong, coz Envy's favorite form is rather youthful, he's tops one or two years older than Ed, (in looks, of course) so that would also make him a teenanger, eh!
So maybe you ought to go and re-edit the fic and fix the minor mistakes and typos, just a tip!
All in all I really liked this fic and I really think if you've the time and the will; you should definitely continue and write more, hopefully soon coz I want to read more and find out what going to happen next!
So please write more!
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February 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
-clear's throat- Alright, I have a couple things to say. YOu have the manga and Anime mixed up. In the manga, Envy is not human what so ever. He never was. The whole human transmutation to humonculi is only in the anime. Not manga. Envy is acutally a very large eight legged lizered like monster with a lot of people that scream and um... used to be human at one point but was... hell I cant describe it!!!!!! But the bottom line is that Envy wasn't human ever in the manga
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June 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
it was yummy ^_^ normaly i dont like lemons, too sour ,but this was really tasty ^_~ n e way hope you write more its awesome! i want lemons,mangos,tomatoes(wait! that\'s not a fruit! O_o) and yes goddamit i want a melon!
Furher: ^_^ here ya go (hands me a melon) happy b-day!
Me: O_O\' umm......thanks.
Furher: ^_^ here ya go (hands me a melon) happy b-day!
Me: O_O\' umm......thanks.
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May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please continue writing this fic, I just love ed+envy. Not that many good ed+envy fics out there, and this one is really good!
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April 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WRITE MORE!!!!!!! My favorite pairing. (looks around making sure no one is looking,then cries,\"I WANT MORE OF THIS PAIRING,But,I just wanna read the ened pairing.)Basically I\'ll read ANY and ALL OF THE ENED PAIRING.MY odd way of saying continue,please.
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April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay for smut. Didn\'t mind that it was long since the part was written so well that it is pretty addictive. I swear I was near to hyperventilating while reading it. Anyway, i hope you\'re still up on updating this fic.
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April 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You have you write more! More! More! More! It\'s really good and so you have to continue! I think it\'s really cute and good and write more soon!
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April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i\'ve noly started to read it but what I have is good so far.... but I have to ask... Do you know that there half brothers... You find out in the last or next to last episode... ^_^ Bring on the insest! Teehehehe.... I\'m so bad. LONG LIVE YAOI!
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March 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE UPDATE!!! I really like this story. Your characters are not out of character at all. I have only seen the anime, so i don\'t know what Envy is like in the magna. I haven\'t seen him much yet in the anime. He seems to be a bit insane, likes to toy with people\'s heads, and just have fun. Ed still seems exactly like the short tempered teen who will do anything for his brother. So, yeah. Your characters aren not OOC at all. And please update soon. It\'s not fair to leave us all hanging here in the middle of a great fic.
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February 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Come on, update please? I know you\'re alive...I checked your LJ ^_^; Are you still working on this? You haven\'t updated for...-counts fingers- 1/2 a year!