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March 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ahh, no rescue? No saving the day? Pitty, would be fun. Alright, so, why? Are they trying to lure Rei out? Or were they just pissed off? Questions, questions, next chapter will hopefuly bring some answers!
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March 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(reviewing chapter 34)
:\'(!!!!!!! Aaaargh! Poor poor poor Bryan!!!!!!! Please let him be okay!!! Poor boy! And... evil Tala! I knew they weren\'t going for sex this time, I knew they were going straight for the kill..Tala used the crowbar, right?. And they almost succeeded (ALMOST... right?????!).... Aaargh... it\'s frustrating!
Poor Ray! Isn\'t he going into hysterics or something? I know I would, in his situation!
But... what Ian said... was Kai really assisting?? Jeez... if he was... I don\'t know... he just didn\'t seem as violent as Tala was...
They\'re crazy. Definitely. Crazy. ANYTHING to get their toy back, right? And in their eyes, the only thing that stood in the way... was Bryan.
Boy, if I were Ray; I would be feeling *guilty*...
Why do I have this feeling that the next step in their \'logic\' thinking is going to be; \'If we can\'t have Ray, no one will.\'
If Ray still doesn\'t come back to them... He\'s going to be the next victim; right?
Boy, things really get out of control here...
UPDATE REALLY SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!
~Lily~
:\'(!!!!!!! Aaaargh! Poor poor poor Bryan!!!!!!! Please let him be okay!!! Poor boy! And... evil Tala! I knew they weren\'t going for sex this time, I knew they were going straight for the kill..Tala used the crowbar, right?. And they almost succeeded (ALMOST... right?????!).... Aaargh... it\'s frustrating!
Poor Ray! Isn\'t he going into hysterics or something? I know I would, in his situation!
But... what Ian said... was Kai really assisting?? Jeez... if he was... I don\'t know... he just didn\'t seem as violent as Tala was...
They\'re crazy. Definitely. Crazy. ANYTHING to get their toy back, right? And in their eyes, the only thing that stood in the way... was Bryan.
Boy, if I were Ray; I would be feeling *guilty*...
Why do I have this feeling that the next step in their \'logic\' thinking is going to be; \'If we can\'t have Ray, no one will.\'
If Ray still doesn\'t come back to them... He\'s going to be the next victim; right?
Boy, things really get out of control here...
UPDATE REALLY SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!
~Lily~
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March 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Man, Bryan\'s really getting it! Poor thing. Hope he gets well soon. Hope Kai and Tala don\'t cause anymore problems. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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March 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!! Poor bryan! *cries* IT\"LL BE ALLRIGHT BRY! REI IS HERE! Please continue! It\'s soo great! I\'m like.. on the edge of my seat!
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March 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(reviewing chapter 17)
*sob* *sob*
Poor Ray!
I liked this scene (despite of the lemon). The pain that Ray feels while having sex with Kai or Tala is just so explicite here. I liked how Ray was digging his nails in Kai\'s back... Now that\'s intriguing! It really shows how much he\'s suffering, how much he hates being in the position he\'s in, despite his body acting in its own cruel way. I liked how Ray was thinking his body must have a mind of its own; now that\'s a deep philosophical problem ^^; the body-mind problem is one of the biggest problems of metaphysics. But one thing is relatively sure; your body *does* do stuff without your consent; they are called non-intentional actions. ^^
You really have to feel sorry for Ray after this chapter! And Kai... I\'m not sure... He\'s a bastard, that\'s for sure; but then again, he\'s definitely more human than Tala...
Anyway, see you next review :-)
~Lily~
*sob* *sob*
Poor Ray!
I liked this scene (despite of the lemon). The pain that Ray feels while having sex with Kai or Tala is just so explicite here. I liked how Ray was digging his nails in Kai\'s back... Now that\'s intriguing! It really shows how much he\'s suffering, how much he hates being in the position he\'s in, despite his body acting in its own cruel way. I liked how Ray was thinking his body must have a mind of its own; now that\'s a deep philosophical problem ^^; the body-mind problem is one of the biggest problems of metaphysics. But one thing is relatively sure; your body *does* do stuff without your consent; they are called non-intentional actions. ^^
You really have to feel sorry for Ray after this chapter! And Kai... I\'m not sure... He\'s a bastard, that\'s for sure; but then again, he\'s definitely more human than Tala...
Anyway, see you next review :-)
~Lily~
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March 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(reviewing chapter 25)
This is one of my favourite chapters; I actually bookmarked your story, on this chapter ^^.
Tala\'s sooo scary... Just reading his threats makes my stomach do flip flops. He\'s dangerous... Definitely!!! Especially, since I reread chapter 33, I noticed the crowbar thing. I must have missed it the first time I read it; probably because \'crowbar\' wasn\'t part of my vocabulary (I had to look it up). But now I know what it is; I\'m kind of worried (*understatement*)...
Tala just seems to have such a twisted mind... He could *really* use some psychiatrist help!
I also liked the fact Bryan\'s hands were trembling at the end of the chapters; some authors seem to forget that their characters are still humans, and humans have human reactions when confronted with situations like these. It\'s a cute Bryan!
Btw; please update this SOOOOOON!!!
~Lily~
This is one of my favourite chapters; I actually bookmarked your story, on this chapter ^^.
Tala\'s sooo scary... Just reading his threats makes my stomach do flip flops. He\'s dangerous... Definitely!!! Especially, since I reread chapter 33, I noticed the crowbar thing. I must have missed it the first time I read it; probably because \'crowbar\' wasn\'t part of my vocabulary (I had to look it up). But now I know what it is; I\'m kind of worried (*understatement*)...
Tala just seems to have such a twisted mind... He could *really* use some psychiatrist help!
I also liked the fact Bryan\'s hands were trembling at the end of the chapters; some authors seem to forget that their characters are still humans, and humans have human reactions when confronted with situations like these. It\'s a cute Bryan!
Btw; please update this SOOOOOON!!!
~Lily~
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March 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You only think!!!! Damn and here I thought Tala was the viscious one! What had Kai done to Bryan! Ohh, Rei is gonna get pissed and I can see him leading an attack force of the other bladers against Kai and Tala, both of whom are finally gonna get whats come to them!
And btw, I\'m fixing \'I\'m a father\', correcting some mistakes and rewriting some paragraphs I wasn\'t happy with.
And btw, I\'m fixing \'I\'m a father\', correcting some mistakes and rewriting some paragraphs I wasn\'t happy with.
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February 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh my, what is to become of poor Bryan? Rei to the rescue?! I hope so, what\'s best to confess one\'s love then the danger of death (am I going to far?)
Well, just have fun making a nice rescue scene
Well, just have fun making a nice rescue scene
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February 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
\'Bout time you updated! I was starting to wonder if you\'d forgotten about this fic. So, Bryan\'s going to end up in the hospital now?
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February 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(reviewing chapter 13)
That last sentence \'I don\'t know how much longer I can last\' was just soo sad! Poor Ray!! He\'s suffering...
The last scene was very beautiful. Ray, in Bryan\'s arms... So sweet!
~Lily~
That last sentence \'I don\'t know how much longer I can last\' was just soo sad! Poor Ray!! He\'s suffering...
The last scene was very beautiful. Ray, in Bryan\'s arms... So sweet!
~Lily~