rate_review Reviews

I would clap my hands if you could listen to it. A very good fiction, I\'m very impressed!
Though it has 30 chapters already, it took me little time to read, it must be the first time I ever found an author who could say all there is to be said without to many pretty words and with such small chapters. The plot is nothing of to imaginative, but the way you led the story is amasing. Rei\'s thoughts, the portrait of him as submissive person and his reactions inside the relationship are flawless. I\'m enjoying Bryan\'s part very much, but him being the support seems ooc, but since he\'s no longer a \'bad guy\' so... But I wonder what can happen. What I mean is, Ray wanted support, a shoulder to cry on and he found it on Bryan. When he finaly pulls himself up, will he still think of Bryan the same way? And what of Bryan? Won\'t he feel a bit used, thinking of himself as a shell for Ray to hide from Tala and Kai? As for these two, you are making me hate my favorite characters. That means you are making them evil so well I can\'t possibly like them. I liked the way you started the story, most of them start before they get into the relationship and go on from there, but, starting at the middle of it, you managed to cover all the details needing clearence without forgetting anything. Funny how most people are so open talking online and are unable to be like that so I had some fun imagining Bryan in a chat room, chatting...
I didn\'t particularly like the confrontation scene with Tala Kai Ray and Bryan in front of all those people. Though I can imagine someone like Ray behing able of using the other people as shields, I don\'t think either Tala or Bryan would feel confortable dealing with such things in public. Then again, they are anime characters... and all the sex, is that humanly possible? Isn\'t that a little to much hormones per day?
As for editing part, every now and then letters seem to disapear. Don\'t if it\'s the site\'s fault of if it\'s you who forgot to write the full word. other then that it seems perfect, good spacing, many paragrafs, no spelling mistakes I could spot, ect etc...

Woah. Those two together? That\'s a strange one. This is getting good. Hope to see more soon.

Not too much to this chapter, but it wasn\'t bad... Poor Ray... lol...

NUUU! I hope nothing bad happens... Hey, can we skip everything and just go to the lemon?! Sorry I love the story, I have just been yaoi deprived because in the past week, my dear mother decided to check the entire computer for anything she didnt approve of... and she almost found out about my yaoi addiction.. Luckily I told her this website was an \'adult humor\' website... >.>

This is great. Hope Tala and Kai don\'t cause problems. It\'s getting real good though. Lets see some action between the two lovebirds eh? Looking forward to reading more.

Hey,
Oh, I hope Tala gets it! Kai on the other hand doesn\'t seem that bad. I mean he tricks people but he doesn\'t rape them like Tala. Oh, and what the hell is everyone gonna do, I mean, are the Bladebreakers gonna keep Kai as their captian or will they get rid of him?
Well, I love it and I hope you write more!
Bye Bye
Mika

Pretty good chapter, nothing to interesting but it was decent filler.

Okbees, now Lee knows and that means the rest will find out for sure. Think Tala\'s gonna get a visit from some \'concerned citizens\' he isn\'t gonna like. Gee, you know I like the sound of that. Now, if we can just get Bryan to stop being so stubborn, he and Rei could really light up the night.

And now, I\'m two chapters behind. Oh, drat. No, promises about the next chapter, having a bit of writer\'s block.

......so... is the police going to be involved here? BEFORE something worse happens? now I can\'t wait for the next chapter!!!

This rocks. Hope Bryan\'s ok soon. Hope Tala and Kai buzz off. They deserve each other. Looking forward to reading more.