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March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
it\'s SO cuteeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!^_^!
!^_^!
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March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello there! This is, overall, a nice fic, but it\'s no wonder, since it\'s a bit poor when it comes to an actual plotline, but I suppouse all the very well done lemons pay up to it. That should work for the ooc too, Tala and Kai couldn\'t be all that sweet and kind all of a sudden. Where\'s the coldness I\'ve grown to love in those two? Well, time is said to work miracles... Since they changed that much, you could lose some time shaping your characters a bit more no?
Your editing is quite good though some words that don\'t seem fitting or are not well used now and then pop up, but grammar seems fine and you space your story well too.
Overall, I think it\'s a good story (ooc, but it\'s to late to notice it anyways...) and you should continue it. Stories are meant to let one express their imagination, reguardless of many people reading it or not.
Your editing is quite good though some words that don\'t seem fitting or are not well used now and then pop up, but grammar seems fine and you space your story well too.
Overall, I think it\'s a good story (ooc, but it\'s to late to notice it anyways...) and you should continue it. Stories are meant to let one express their imagination, reguardless of many people reading it or not.
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March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello!! Wow!! Their together together!! I knew they would. What is up with Spencer and Brian?? Are they together?? Very hot scenes by the way. Please update it. One more chapter?? That\'s sad. I love this story. Oh well. It\'s a great one.
Too da loo,
KinkyMe
Too da loo,
KinkyMe
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March 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is so getting good!!!!!!keep writing!!!!!!!!....typing
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March 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Kon is not match for Kai!!
XD
KaiTala RULEZ
XD
KaiTala RULEZ
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March 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hella sweet fic especially seeing as there\'s not much Tala(Yuri) and Kai fans around...*sniffles* For a while I thought I was all alone...tch\' oh well keep it up maybe we can collaborate on a tala and Kai story! Can\'t wait till the next chap!
Rene (pronounced Reen)
Rene (pronounced Reen)
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March 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
w00t!!! luv luv luv this fic but..umm it\'s the first time i see uke tala O_O no kai uke yummyness for us T--T wah!!
nice fic keep it up iam waiting for an update!!! woot woot!!!! *glomps*
TALA X KAI 4 Life!!!XD
nice fic keep it up iam waiting for an update!!! woot woot!!!! *glomps*
TALA X KAI 4 Life!!!XD
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March 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
why was he so nervous if he alreadyt admitted it? good story anyway
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March 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YEAH YEAH YEAH
a KaiTala
YAHOOO
Luv YA!!1
KEEP WRITTING
a KaiTala
YAHOOO
Luv YA!!1
KEEP WRITTING
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March 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aww, this was so damn sweet!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love Kai/Tala couples... Very nice scene in the second chappy too! Please please write more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Heh, poor Kai\'s eggs went all over the floor...