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........ this is me the author wasting space.

Hey, so to answer a question that was blown my way. I'm not sure where they went.... at least not when I originally wrote it anyway. I have in the works Unity The Ark. Where each pilot will get a book to themselves. And I can't give away the other details that are now to be added because you guys already know how the story is going to go. So Book one will answer your question about where. So Please read and review.

Thanks Everybody
~Zim

Wow ... this is interesting ... but i'm still at a lost ... Where did they go? Where is this place that they all called "home"..??
My thought was their Gundam .. but it will remind them of war ...
so where on colony or galaxy are they?
Help pls!

Hey Thanks everybody for reviewing me. SOrry it took so long to get to the end. And you are welcome, I was seriously contemplating getting rid of this story, but I pulled it together at the last minuet. So anyway, just so you all know, assuming you read the reviews and see this. I was thinking about revamping the first few chapters and maybe slowing it down a bit. I've reread them and I'm like wow... in a bad way. I'm not sure though. I deffinately want to revampt chapter one. Wufei's chapter isn't so bad, Duo's chapter kinda bugs me too. I don't know. Well Thank you all once again for sticking with me. Please everyone review the story I would love to hear what you all have to say.

~Zim

great story. I was looking forward to the ending. Thank you for not leaving me hanging.

Wow. Very interesting story -- I love the idea, and you've done a wonderful job with the characterizations of the pilots; making them "ooc" while still maintaining the true essense of who they are. Some spelling and grammar issues, but that is to be expected without a beta, right? ;) Can't wait to find out how Trowa connects the dots... keep up the good work, and update ASAP!

Thank you for reviewing this story. I apreciate it alot. I\'m sorry but I feel it will probably be much longer still until the next chapter is out. Though I hope for soon.
Zim

\"Clapping hands\" This is a really great story and I think that you did a super job on Chapter Four which by the way I think that I enjoyed the most. I really do love taking a peek into each of the pilots heads and seeing how they view themselves and each other. Then later on seeing the surprise when they find out all of the things that they never suspected about their friends. For example, with Duo when he found Heero and Wufei. He already knew somethings about Wufei, but he didn\'t know that Wufei smoked. Nor would he ever have inagined that Heero would be understanding about his situation. I can\'t wait to read more of this because as the chapters progress it gets to be more and more interesting. Great Story.

You\'ve got a good premise, but the fic is very difficult to read. You seriously need a Beta. The spelling, grammar, punctuation, and syntax need a good \'once over\' to refine your prose. Don\'t misunderstand what I\'m trying to say, please. You have a great idea, but your lack of structure and discipline, not to mention your lack of familiarity with the rules of writing in general, detract from the story. Using the Spell Check feature or a similar application would help a lot, too.

I write as a hobby - not fanfiction, but sci-fi and nonfiction. I\'ve cowritten a few published songs. I am also an editor and a researcher. I don\'t usually edit (Beta) fanfiction, but if you want help with proofing your work, feel free to contact me anytime.

Whatever you do, keep writing! Brush up on your skills and before you know it, you will no longer be a fic writer - you will be a great fic writer.

tina_123166@hotmail.com

ONGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love you *huggles* I printed a copy out for myself and I\'m going to hang it on my wall... nah my door! That way when I come home from work I\'ll be happy to see it! SO thanks I\'m all so inspired by it that I will make time this weekend to write chapter four! There\'s another Wufei scene so you should be happy! Anyway I was so jazzed about that I pimped it on my LJ So everyone can see the Beautimus pic! ANd then check out your other works, which I promptly did after freakin\' out!

Thanks so Much Babe

Zim