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July 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like Mustang\'s niec e- she\'s cool and I enjoyed Ed getting that wrench to the noggin (he SOOOOOOOO deserves it sometimes!)
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July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awww, I hope Ed and Winry get to do it soon=P I can\'t wait to see how things progress between Al and Roy\'s niece.X3
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July 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a cute story. Please continue. Ed and Winry forever.
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June 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I just wanted to say that I REALLY like this story! I know it\'s only one chapter, but I can tell it\'s gonna be good, so puh-lease update soon^_^
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June 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice start, short but nice. I liked Winry\'s bickering with Ed.
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June 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hehehe! funny ending! update soon! the easies way to NOT make a mary sue is to ensure the character has flaws. For example, don\'t have her be as good/better then Ed at alchemy. it\'s too over the top. if you want to see how an OC should be done, look at the story by BathoryM called \'Rider on a Pale Horse\'. Merrick (her OC) has won awards and everything. The story is completely original and fantastic. It\'s a great read however you look at it but if you want to use a MS- see what BathoryM did and do that. this story is really cute and your writing is funny. update soon.