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November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice strong characterization. I especially like the adjectives used like "lyrical" to describe Envy's voice. I got a bit confused, as to who was saying the dialogue in a few areas though.
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November 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
0_o... I like. Very descriptive in the imagery, but vague as to how the images connect into the whole. Makes you think and piece together. I like that. As to ways you could improve the writing, nothing really stuck out in my mind...