rate_review Reviews

Extremely moving service. Brought tears to my eyes.

I think I now hate those humans as much as Goten and Vegeta, and as for Gohan, contempt is too light a word.

Missing Goku already, hope he can come back somehow.

I don't even know were to begin.
This story is the best story i have ever read in my life. You are an amazing writer, with an amazing talent to captivate the reader.
My hand are trebeling and my heart is pounding. The emotions in this story is simply wonderful The pride of the Saiyan. How wonderful it seem.
And I love your way of describing the characters and there inner battles.
This is really a fiction masterpiece!

Keep up your fantastic work!
I can't wait so see what will happen, now when Goten going to be raised by Vegeta.

And again: A fanatic story!

// Gina

This a very very sad chapter. I felt for Bulma for her rememberance of the little wild and full of laughter kid. I love how Vegeta pay tribute to his only rival-- a man who is truly worth all his attention. It was very touching.

There are so many mistery left in this story. please write more, I am so confused just now. Look forward to read more.

You have done an absolutely amazing job. The imagery for the memorial for Chi-Chi and Kakarot, was breath taking. I could see every detail of it in my mind. Please update once more when it's convenient for you.

Very interesting story, I've really enjoyed reading what you've uploaded so far.

Your story is vibrant, descriptive, and lucid. Your characterization is second to none, and while your story is venturing far from what I'd consider canon or 'in-character', I do think that in some ways, what you've depicted is more realistic and enthralling that what actually happened. I also am enjoying the slower pace of this story - sometimes I find things move so fast that it's exhausting (in a bad way) but this isn't like that. I also very much enjoy the raunchy descriptions you use - even if the description of Saiyan musculature/scent revolts your characters, the readers still think it's hot, which is a really nice balance.

In terms of constructive criticism, I can't offer you any *objective* advice, though I can say what I find *personally* detriments the story. I think that your psychoanalytical introspection, while important for characterization, can become slightly overwhealming, in that you continue your description of their thoughts long after you've made your point or the point is redundant/repetitive (eg. puny humans!). Don't get me wrong, I LOVE the introspection, but I think sometimes you just go a *bit* overboard.

I'm still wondering where you'll take this. The glorious battle stance, the armor, the explosion (which, by the way, is one way I think Goku was really out of character in the series, but perfectly in character for your fic; he seems not to care about Chichi in the series, taking off for years at a time, your description considers the repressed *Saiyan*), Gohan's past, Goten's future... an excellent tale in the making. Keep it up!

Breath taking as always. Please update once more when possible. Thank you.

Gosh Vegeta is really tearing himself up isn't he. He really needs Kakarot. Turning Goten into a mirror image won't be enough, though it will be good for Goten.

I'm still waiting for Goku to return as you say this is a Vegeta/Goku fic, but I'm having doubts now on how he will reappear, as surely Vegeta could have used the dragonballs by now :(

this is a great story and it got me soo hooked. I like how you describe Vegeta's sorrow of the most important person in his live. There are so many mistery as well.Please update soon.

Wow, the emotion in this chapter is overpowering. I feel so lost with Vegeta and the little flicker of hope at the end was uplifting to say the least after such an emotionally draining chapter. I love the way that you get into Vegeta’s head and can portray him so well.

I am really intrigued to see what Vegeta is planning for the memorial and to figure out more about the flashbacks that seems to be haunting the Prince. The story line is really gripping me, and intriguing me as well. I can’t wait to see what is going to happen and how everything is going to plan out.

SaiyanGirl,



I have to say that I am absolutely in love with your story. The characterization is so perfect and I can't help but find myself enthralled with the story and inhaling it like nothing else. I am intrigued by your concepts and can't wait to see what they are revealed to be. I can't wait until I see it updated and I have some more of my new favourite addiction. Wonderful job and please, please keep going.



Biku