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December 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey, be honest, i love this even though the 2nd was too short for me.. But please update soon.
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September 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god!! That was beautiful TT-TT I had orgasm after orgasm just reading, thats how good it was *rolls in despair for wanting more* please don't let it end there! more! more for us fans out there!
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August 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
8O Epic!
I think you should continue! 8D
Please? XD;;
I think you should continue! 8D
Please? XD;;
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August 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm afraid it's very bad. The story idea may be cool, but you don't have the characters in character and your english writing needs a lot of work. I suggest you get a friend to write with you to improve.
Ex: Kai never calls Mr. Dickenson 'Mr.D'. The others may, but not Kai. I just don't see Rei calling Kai 'babe' either...
Hope this was helpful
~Kio
Ex: Kai never calls Mr. Dickenson 'Mr.D'. The others may, but not Kai. I just don't see Rei calling Kai 'babe' either...
Hope this was helpful
~Kio