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April 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow great story so far ^^.
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April 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Greetings my dear I have been waiting and waiting until you placed up more chapters to read and review your fic. I will be honest in the beginning it was slightly confusing on who was who but after the 3 chapter I knew lol. I enjoyed it I liked how you made a plot of conflict and still are proceeding the conflict plot and not having it solved too quickly. I liked how you used Goku in which I mean I love how you are using the name Kakarot instead! It is something I love seeing his sayian name not human name, it gives his character a more roughness that he do not have in the series. Though honestly I would like to see Vegeta in the end married to the 'bad' guy creates more angst (Yes it is true I like angst) Then creates another conflict to be solved lol. I like the lemons and it was great to see Vegeta/Kakarot finally come together and their interactions are very good. Keep writing girl I am enjoying.
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April 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
this story is very enticing. I can not wait for next update. What is kakarotto's real identity? WIll he marry Vegeta instead?
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March 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
That was an intersting meeting. I think you have a fantastic villain in the making here. I really hope he does not end up married to the guy....or at least gets rid of him in the end.
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March 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I like the way this story begins, just the names are maybe a bit confusing at first.
Vegeta no Hokoru means "Vegeta of the Proud/Pride" so it is rather fitting, I like it. But since it is often confusing, perhaps you should only mention the full names once in each chapter and then use a short form, as I think you have done so far.
And Maybe it would help if you put the translation in brackets right behind the name when it is first mentioned so the people get the hidden meaning right away. If you want to discuss names beforehand, just contact me, I'm available to help you all I can.
I think it is a pretty interesting start, a very different universe. But it would be interesting if you could try and bring in some of the others, even if it is just as a cameo, so some of us will have something to smile about atthe sidelines.
Keep up the great work!
Vegeta no Hokoru means "Vegeta of the Proud/Pride" so it is rather fitting, I like it. But since it is often confusing, perhaps you should only mention the full names once in each chapter and then use a short form, as I think you have done so far.
And Maybe it would help if you put the translation in brackets right behind the name when it is first mentioned so the people get the hidden meaning right away. If you want to discuss names beforehand, just contact me, I'm available to help you all I can.
I think it is a pretty interesting start, a very different universe. But it would be interesting if you could try and bring in some of the others, even if it is just as a cameo, so some of us will have something to smile about atthe sidelines.
Keep up the great work!