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Reviews for Barracks

By : chayron

From ANON - Lururi on July 30, 2011
Reyn is quickly becoming a favorite character of mine. His and Goten's interactions are always so fun to read. :)
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From ANON - LittleOne on July 18, 2011
Yay new chap!! Loved it, just when I think the story might start to get boring you spice it up! Your great at keeping me interested and reading, can't wait for more!!! Thanks!!!
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From ANON - anonanon on July 16, 2011
Oh Goten, so very, very naive. A private party in someone's room with a porn being shown? How could you have possibly thought that everyone would just sit around and jerk off quietly. It's practically universal that movies=sexytime especially porn. I personally cannot remember any of the movies that I ever went to 'see'on a date XD
- Hilarious as always, great job on the chapter. Goten is just fated to end up the kitchens eh? I'm sure that Kyon's cookbook will come in handy for his new job :3 As for Terran traditions, we sure seem to have a lot of them don't we? Thanks for the wonderful update!
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From ANON - Anonanon on June 29, 2011
For part 30: XD Cats do seem to instinctivly know the best time to make one uncomfortable hehehe. The section with mr. Elite reminded me
of a series of kitty antics called 'Simon's Cat,' YouTube it if you have the time.

For part 31: I love how how you describe Gotens agonizing self restrictions fro
temptation; somehow you keep him in typical 'self sacrificing Son family behavior,' without making it seem out of place in this AU. Bravo! As for the time bending dreams, I wonder how much strife they'll cause our little protagonist.... ;D Thank you for updating once more, please do so again when you have the time and inspiration to do so.
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From ANON - L.F on June 27, 2011
Things are about moving on up, waiting mostly, so no not in life. :-)
I haven't heard the joke in ages, but I know he talked about a friend who mumbled real hard, I should look that up. This chapter was informative, and damn if Trunks doesn't have lasting affects on Goten, its too much! I've never thought about a guy and been moved to touch myself as fast as Goten. Ryen's not as annoying as I thought he was and good fight as always. I have a hard time keeping it to one persons movements but other people don't find it confusing just my proofers. I tell ya, I adored Goten before- favorite dragon ball character- but reading this I like him all the more.
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From ANON - L.F on June 12, 2011
Here I was all proud and ready to leave you a review, show you that I caught up and you do this! Hmph. I love Goten's ignorance towards animals, its sweet. I've got 3 kittens circling my house for meals everyday, they're killing me with kindness one minutes- to they don't wanna be touched but still they're sweet- and the next minute the black one is taking its claws out. I don't get animals.
It wasn't foolish of Goten to bet on himself, he should do it. Its how every man should approach life. I'd bet on me. Its gonna be good too, can't wait.
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From Resting-Madness on June 11, 2011
I almost forgot! How sweet it is to fucked into a three day coma by Trunks hahaha, puts pressure on him when the real thing comes though.
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From Resting-Madness on June 11, 2011
there's no way I won't be caught up tomorrow, life is... I'll say usual outloud, but in my head wicked sweet party of joy always. Can I just say, again, that to me is love. Tranquil boredom. I laugh everytime I see it. And its about time Trunks manned up and kissed Goten, idiot. He should have done that long ago. I'm still cracking up over Reyn's blowing on Goten's ear being the thing that had him break his nose. For me it would have been touching my spoon I tell ya... I don't care if I'd die for you, I'm in love with you whatever- I don't share food, drinks, spoons. We could be in the desert and I'm the only one who has water left, you're not touching it. You'll die of thirst first hahaha. But they know they'll be missed and were loved... but not enough to share those personal things :-).

What was it that John Leguizamo called his friend... I think it was english because he was mush mouthed. Total shock that he was a she, loved it. I'm gonna go update something myself. Expect a review tomorrow or maybe the day after depending on my reading speed.
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From ANON - anonanon on June 07, 2011
Woot woot! I'm putting 30 credits on Goten myself :P Btw, I love that his 'extensive and entertaining' profile was sent be a 'mysterious sender.' I'm thinking a little lavender birdy sent that gift >3 Thanks again for the wonderful update, as usual excellent job!
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From ANON - Aanda Windsor on May 28, 2011
T-T i knew i soon as i read about the fight that it wouldn't b in this ch. but i got my hopes up and said it would b only 2 b sad when it wasn't but i cant wait 2 read the next ch. n c who wins the fight i widh the chapters were longer its such a good story i could read it 4 hrs n hrs but then id have 2 torture myself my not reading ur updates 4 a few months inorder 2 be able 2 read it 4 a good period of time. i cant wait 2 finish reading it though i wanna know if goten n trunks get 2gether n how n who is seme n uke or if they switch back n forth oh i can't wait -^.^-

Oh Your doing a very good job on this by the way and i love how its going so far (well besides the fact that 1 of my other fav characters n gotens good friend died in such a way now if he had died while making sweet love 2 his lover all night long that would have been a happy ending but still sad that he died T-T )

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From ANON - L. Fantasy on May 21, 2011

By Set... you've got me up out of my seat, weeping, and applauding with wild enthusiasm. I thought what you did in KKM was awesome, the end all be all. But this war was the shit hahaha. Oohhh, but how could you kill the glue. I thought you'd take the easy route and kill Kyon, after that whole admitting to being a third class you'd give the big whammo! And then prolong Goten and Trunks because Goten is grieving a possible boyfriend, I am SO thoroughly sick of seeing that premis. *looks bitterly at a final fantasy I can barely stand reading from disgust* but no you killed Toharu my beautiful little laugh box *crying* I like how you added that part with Goten being in love with him, when really its infatuation over a persons strong infectious self. It happens all the time, very realistic. I won't cry anymore though. I'm good. I love deaths, I don't know why people frown on them so hard. I can't wait to read more but my internet time is up and I have to return to the lame-o real world. Somewhat, though, my sanity has always been gone baby ahahaha. And you know what, I am behind but my computer got a really nasty virus on it and then my gram died. Didn't matter no one really liked her anyway but the dramatics of it all could choke a horse. People can be so fake about not caring when they clearly do.
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From ANON - anonanon on May 16, 2011
HA! XD I love that line," Unbelivable, you've just come haven't you?" Anywyas excellent job! Poor Goten caught up in inner-ship politics and not even there for 72hours. *shakes head* Oh and for some reason this line "And yet we can still make a man out of you,� made me think of the song 'We are men' I belive is the title, from Mulan O.o Thank you for updating your wonderful story, please do so again when you have the chance to do so.

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From ANON - Saya on May 08, 2011
goddess.. thank you! for these fanfic revelations. ily
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From ANON - anonanon on April 30, 2011
Woot! *high fives the other readers* some Trunks and Goten action oh yea! This upcomming 'stuck in a small spaceship w/ wackey assortment of companions' has a lot of potential for shennanigans: BRAVO! As for the border between Terra Republic and Sayjin empire, I wonder if this will have any connection to the flashback that Bardock has of his son Goku in the DBZ movie? Or perhaps I'm just reading too much into this XD ah well, excellent job and thank you for another wonderful chapter to this saga.
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From ANON - Webtester01 on April 19, 2011
Wow. The Prince is willing to cross the class boundaries to get what he wants. I think better things will happen in light of his decision.

Goten really is a dichotomy of contradictions. His willingness to turn down the biggest opportunity in his lifetime, really creates some difficulty for him emotionally.

I really like what you have done with the characters and the way the story is progressing. Kudos!
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